Challenges— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct answer and clear reason. To improve: make the topic sentence more concise, avoid repetition ("most of the students" and "most people"), add a brief specific example or comparison, and use a linking word to connect reason and result. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I think mathematics is the most challenging subject because it demands precise calculations and logical problem-solving. For example, topics like calculus and algebra require several steps and abstract thinking, so many students find it harder to get high marks.

提案: Answer is positive and personal, but phrasing is awkward and slightly repetitive. Improve clarity by using a concise topic sentence, then add a specific example of a recent challenge and use linking words (for example, "for instance" or "as a result"). Correct tense/wording errors ("I made what I couldn't do yesterday what I can do today" → "I can do today what I couldn't do yesterday").

例: Yes, I enjoy challenging myself because it boosts my confidence and sense of achievement. For instance, I recently learned to code in Python; as a result, I can now solve problems I couldn’t handle a few months ago.

提案: Clear opinion and relevant example. To improve: shorten and naturalize phrasing ("live a life that has a lot of challenges" → "live a challenging life"), tighten the explanation, and use a linking word like "for example" (already used) plus a more specific workplace scenario to strengthen the content.

例: Yes, I prefer a challenging life because overcoming difficulties makes me feel proud. For example, if I lead a difficult project at work and succeed despite setbacks, I would feel a strong sense of achievement.

提案: The answer is reasonable but generic and uses plural "we" which distances it from a personal response. Improve by giving a concise personal strategy (one or two specific steps), use linking words ("first," "then," "finally"), and include a short specific example of a recent challenge and how you solved it.

例: I deal with challenges by breaking them into small tasks and tackling them step by step. For instance, when I struggled to meet a deadline, I prioritized tasks, made a schedule, and completed the project on time.

× I believe mathematics is the most challenging subject for most of the students because it requires calculations and critical thinking.

✓ I believe mathematics is the most challenging subject for most students because it requires calculations and critical thinking.

Remove the article 'the' before 'students' because 'most students' is the correct general plural expression. Using 'the students' suggests a specific group; 'most students' is more natural for a general statement. Suggestion: Use 'most students' when referring to people in general.

× That is why most people struggle to get the high scores in this subject.

✓ That is why most people struggle to get high scores in this subject.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before 'high scores' in this general context. 'High scores' without 'the' correctly expresses the idea of achieving high marks in general. Suggestion: Use 'high scores' for general reference.

× Yes, I do love challenging myself because it gives me a sense of accomplishment and fulfillment.

✓ Yes, I do love challenging myself because it gives me a sense of accomplishment and fulfillment.

No grammatical error that matches the provided list; sentence is correct. No change required.

× In addition to it, it gives me the confidence because I made what I couldn't do yesterday what I can do today.

✓ In addition, it gives me confidence because I can do today what I couldn't do yesterday.

'In addition to it' is awkward; use 'In addition' or 'Additionally'. 'Gives me the confidence' should be 'gives me confidence' (article unnecessary). The clause order and verb forms were incorrect: use present ability 'can' for today and past 'couldn't' for yesterday; structure 'I can do today what I couldn't do yesterday' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'In addition' and place clauses in logical order with correct modal and tense.

× Yes, I would like to live a life that has a lot of challenges because it will give me a sense of accomplishment at the end of my life.

✓ Yes, I would like to live a life that has many challenges because it will give me a sense of accomplishment at the end of my life.

'A lot of challenges' is acceptable but 'many challenges' is more natural with 'life'. The sentence is otherwise correct in modality and tense. Suggestion: Use 'many' for countable plural nouns in formal speech.

× For example, if I undergo a lot of difficult situation at work and overcome them, I can be proud of myself.

✓ For example, if I undergo a lot of difficult situations at work and overcome them, I can be proud of myself.

'Situation' should be plural 'situations' to agree with 'a lot of'. Also 'a lot of' requires a plural noun for countable items. Suggestion: Use plural after 'a lot of' when referring to countable nouns.

× In my daily life, I usually try to keep making efforts in order to deal with challenges.

✓ In my daily life, I usually try to keep making efforts to deal with challenges.

'In order to' is correct but wordy; 'to' is more natural. The phrase 'keep making efforts' is awkward but acceptable; you could say 'keep making an effort' or 'keep trying' for more natural English. Suggestion: Prefer 'keep trying' or 'keep making an effort' and use 'to' instead of 'in order to' for conciseness.

× At first, everything is difficult, but as long as we keep making efforts, we will be able to solve those issues.

✓ At first, everything is difficult, but as long as we keep making efforts, we will be able to solve those issues.

Sentence is grammatically correct and matches tenses: present for general truth and future for result. No change required.