Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答能传达大意，但存在语法错误、词汇使用不准和冗余。建议： 1) 使用正确的应用名称和词类（例如 “WeChat” 而不是 “we chat”，用 “and do” 或更具体动词代替模糊表达）； 2) 简洁表达主旨（一句主题句 + 最多两句细节），避免重复； 3) 改进句子结构与时态（例如使用现在时一般陈述习惯）。 具体练习：先写出主题句“ I often visit social media sites.” 然后用一到两句说明理由并用连接词（because, and, so）连接。

例: I often visit social media sites such as WeChat and Douyin because I can watch short videos and get news updates. I also use WeChat to stay in touch with my friends.

提案: 内容明确且有具体原因，但句子有重复与未完成（“Besides that I it”），影响流利度与连贯性。建议： 1) 避免重复（friends and families → family or friends）并修正不完整句； 2) 用一两个具体例子说明额外好处（e.g. group chat, payments）； 3) 保持句子不超过五句并用连接词增强连贯。

例: My favourite app is WeChat because many of my family and friends use it, so I can video call them anytime. Besides, it is convenient for group chats and quick payments, which makes daily life easier.

提案: 回答有要点（界面更简洁、短视频增多、举例），但有重复和结尾不完整。建议： 1) 删除冗余短语（例如“often use, I often visit”重复）； 2) 用连接词（so, for example）把原因和结果连接得更清楚； 3) 结尾给出具体影响（例如你如何改变获取信息的方式）。

例: Yes, many sites have changed: they now have simpler layouts and more short videos because people prefer quick content. For example, my news website shows short clips instead of long articles, so I usually watch summaries rather than read full reports.

提案: 表达不够清晰，句子断裂且有大量重复与错误（“the other is.”、“helps you re relax”）。建议： 1) 明确列出两类网站并用并列结构（One is..., The other is...）； 2) 用准确词汇（e.g. entertainment or streaming sites）并举具体例子； 3) 避免重复并保持每句简洁完整。

例: Two kinds of websites are popular: social networking apps like WeChat, and entertainment platforms like TikTok where people watch short videos to relax.

提案: 观点明确但表达含糊与错误（“get the importance” 不通顺；“I only need to finish the whole book” 逻辑错误）。建议： 1) 用准确对比句（I prefer websites because... whereas books...）； 2) 具体说明原因（speed, convenience, up-to-date）并用连接词； 3) 修正逻辑，说明什么时候会选择书籍。

例: I prefer getting information from websites because they offer quick, up-to-date summaries and videos. However, for deep learning or complex subjects I still use books because they are more detailed.

提案: 答案含糊且自相矛盾（说没有想法建站，但又说喜欢计算机技能且重复）。建议： 1) 明确表达立场并给出清晰原因（lack of skills, time）； 2) 避免重复短语并用一两句说明是否会考虑学习相关技能； 3) 句子保持简洁、连贯。

例: No, I wouldn't like to create my own website right now because I lack the technical skills and time. Maybe in the future I would learn basic web design if I need a personal blog.

提案: 意思大致可懂，但句子多次中断与重复且结尾不完整。建议： 1) 把内容分为两部分（旅行与学习），每部分用一到两句完整表达； 2) 提供具体例子（e.g. travel reviews, tutorial videos）和结果； 3) 去掉重复并使用连接词（for example, so, also）。

例: When I plan a trip, I search online for other people's experiences and recommendations, which helps me choose hotels and routes. For study, I watch tutorial videos and read articles online when I have difficulties, so I can solve problems faster.

× Well, I often visit social media like we chat and doing because I can watch short videos and I also can get information from them and for WeChat I can stay in touch with my friends.

✓ Well, I often visit social media like WeChat and Douyin because I can watch short videos, and I can also get information from them; with WeChat I can stay in touch with my friends.

句中“doing”是想表示应用名称（如抖音）或动名词形式，但这里需要應用名稱或動詞原形的 -ing 用法不正確，應寫應用名（Douyin/抖音）或使用動詞時用動名詞搭配語境。建議：列舉網站和應用時使用正確名稱，連接句子時用逗號和連詞“and/;”使結構清楚。

× Well, my favorite website is WeChat because I have a lot of friends and families in my WeChat and even though we are away from each other, I can make a video call to them at any time. Besides that I it.

✓ Well, my favorite website is WeChat because I have a lot of friends and family on my WeChat, and even though we are away from each other, I can make a video call to them at any time. Besides that, it is convenient.

原句中“families”應為不可數或集合名詞“family”；“in my WeChat”介詞用錯，應為“on my WeChat”；句末“Besides that I it.”結構錯誤，缺主謂或動詞。建議：使用正確單複數和介詞，把不完整句子改為完整表達（例如說明是“convenient”）。

× Some of the websites I often use, I often visit have changed. They have a simple design now and added more short videos because many people prefer quick content.

✓ Some of the websites I often visit have changed. They have a simpler design now and have added more short videos because many people prefer quick content.

原句冗餘且時態/形式不一致：“I often use, I often visit”重複；“a simple design now and added”時態不一致，需用現在完成或現在時的一致形式。建議：刪去重複，使用一致時態（現在完成/現在時），並把形容詞比較級“simpler”用於比較變化。

× One type is social networking apps and the other is. Help is something help you helps you re relax. For example WeChat we can use it to stay in touch with our friends and tick tock we can watch.

✓ One type is social networking apps and the other is entertainment apps, which help you relax. For example, we can use WeChat to stay in touch with our friends, and on TikTok we can watch short videos.

原句有斷句和連接詞使用不當，且“Help is something help you helps you re relax.”顯然是重複和拼寫錯誤。建議：用完整句子連接兩類網站，使用關係代詞“which”引出功能，並修正應用名稱（TikTok）和介詞用法。

× Well, actually I prefer getting information from websites because they often provide some quick and short clips for me and I can easily get the importance from them. But books? I only need to finish the whole book to get something.

✓ Well, actually I prefer getting information from websites because they often provide quick short clips, and I can easily get important information from them. But with books, I need to read the whole book to learn something.

原句“get the importance”用詞錯誤，應為“important information”；“But books? I only need to finish the whole book to get something.”語意和時態混亂，應明確表達對比。建議：用正確名詞搭配（important information），並用完整句子表達對比（with books...）。

× Well, no, I think because I have no idea how to construct my own website because I like I like computer skills and maybe I think it is very difficult for me to begin this process.

✓ Well, no. I don't have any idea how to build my own website because I don't like computer skills, and maybe I think it would be very difficult for me to begin this process.

原句中“because I like I like computer skills”重複且意思不清；若要表示不擅長或不喜歡，應用否定或表能力的情態動詞“would”來表達推測。建議：澄清自己是否喜歡或擅長電腦技能，若表示困難可用“would be”表推測。

× Well, when I plan to go for go for a trip, I I searched in. I searched information from the Internet to find others experience and recommendations and for study. When I encounter some difficulties, I also seek.

✓ Well, when I planned to go on a trip, I searched the Internet for other people's experiences and recommendations. For study, when I encounter some difficulties, I also search online for help.

原句時態混用且有重複：“plan”與“searched”時態不一致；“go for go for”重複，“I I searched in.”不完整；“others experience”應為“other people's experiences”；最後“seek”需加受詞。建議：保持過去時一致（planned, searched），刪除重複並補全賓語（search for help）。