Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I often visit social media sites.”), then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and incorrect verb forms. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

例: I often visit social media sites, especially Instagram, because I use it to keep up with friends and trending topics. For example, I check short videos and stories during breaks to relax.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct word choice and grammar. Use one supporting detail and a short explanation. Replace vague phrases with precise ones and correct adverbs.

例: My favourite website is Instagram because it helps me keep in touch with friends and follow trends. For example, I often see short videos and memes that help me relax and learn about current topics.

提案: Answer directly with a clear timeline and fewer hesitations. Use correct tenses and a linking word to show change (e.g., “when I was younger… now…”). Provide a specific example of what changed.

例: Yes. When I was younger I didn’t use social media, but about two years ago I started using Instagram regularly. Since then I’ve begun following news and learning from short videos.

提案: State the general trend clearly, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and fix word order. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

例: Social media sites like Instagram are very popular in my country because people can keep in touch despite distance and share short videos. For example, many users post daily short clips and follow influencers.

提案: Provide a clear preference sentence and one solid reason with an example. Correct plural/singular and prepositions, and avoid duplicate connectors.

例: I prefer getting information from websites because they’re more convenient and faster to search. For example, I can quickly compare product prices on shopping sites.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and one reason. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “website” not “upside”) and concise phrasing. Give a short additional detail about skills or interests.

例: No, I wouldn’t like to have my own website because I’m not confident with web development. I don’t have the technical skills and prefer using existing platforms instead.

提案: Begin with a clear statement about what you learned, then give a specific example and link it to benefit. Correct verb forms and reduce hesitation words. Use linking words like “for example” or “as a result.”

例: I’ve learned a lot of English from websites, which helps with my IELTS preparation. For example, I watch YouTube lessons and follow English-learning accounts on Instagram, so I pick up vocabulary and exam strategies.

× I usually visit social media almost every day, especially I willing to Instagram so I really try to cut down.

✓ I usually visit social media almost every day; especially, I am willing to use Instagram, so I am really trying to cut down.

The sentence contains incorrect verb/adjective usage. 'I willing to Instagram' is ungrammatical: 'willing' needs a form of to be + infinitive or 'willing to use'. Also tense consistency: use present continuous 'I am really trying' to show ongoing effort. Add punctuation for clarity.

× As I mentioned earlier, my favorite website is Instagram because I can keep in touch with my friends and also follow the trends or memes when I scroll through scrolling through social media. And times rise so fastly.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, my favorite website is Instagram because I can keep in touch with my friends and also follow trends or memes when I scroll through social media. And trends change so quickly.

Redundant phrase 'scroll through scrolling through' should be simplified. 'the trends or memes' -> 'trends or memes' (no need for 'the'). 'times rise so fastly' is incorrect: 'times' is vague; likely meant 'trends change so quickly' and 'fastly' is not a standard adverb; use 'quickly'.

× Umm, well, there's for me, there are some changes to the bit website I often visit.

✓ Umm, well, for me, there are some changes to the websites I often visit.

Mixed and redundant 'there's for me, there are' is incorrect. Use a single 'for me, there are' and correct 'bit website' to 'websites' or 'the websites' to match plural subject.

× I when I was young, I was not social media users.

✓ When I was young, I was not a social media user.

Subject and verb number mismatch and word form errors: 'I when I was young' has word order issues; place 'When I was young' at the start. 'users' should be singular 'a social media user' to match subject 'I'.

× Umm, I start started social media about two years ago, so.

✓ Umm, I started using social media about two years ago.

Use the past tense 'started' (not 'start started') and correct verb phrase 'started using social media'. Remove trailing 'so' or complete the sentence.

× Umm well as I mentioned earlier, most of people love to love to visit Instagram because they can connect with umm regardless of distance friends and also they can share their interests or short videos with their friends with.

✓ Umm, well, as I mentioned earlier, most people love to visit Instagram because they can connect with friends regardless of distance and share their interests or short videos with them.

'Most of people' -> 'most people'. 'love to love to' duplicate phrase; remove repetition. Word order 'connect with umm regardless of distance friends' should be 'connect with friends regardless of distance'. Remove redundant 'with' at the end and use pronoun 'them' for clarity.

× I would say definitely from website because it is more convenient because I can. Umm search about various informations on in on the website, for example online shopping apps, I can compare the prices more.

✓ I would definitely say from websites because they are more convenient; for example, I can search for various pieces of information on a website and compare prices on online shopping apps.

'from website' should be plural 'from websites' or 'from a website'. 'various informations' is uncountable; use 'pieces of information' or 'information'. Remove extra prepositions 'on in on'. Use 'compare prices' instead of 'compare the prices more'.

× Umm, I don't think so, because making an upside is quite difficult and good good at computer things, but I'm not good at handling some electronic devices so I don't want to make my own website.

✓ Umm, I don't think so, because making a website is quite difficult and I'm not good at computer-related tasks or handling some electronic devices, so I don't want to make my own website.

'making an upside' is incorrect; likely 'making a website'. Duplicate 'good good' is an error; rephrase to 'I'm not good at computer-related tasks'. Clarify sentence structure and punctuation for readability.

× Umm, actually I learn a lot of English informations because these days I study IELTS, so my algorithm is full of IELTS tests.

✓ Umm, actually I learn a lot of English information because these days I am studying for the IELTS, so my feed is full of IELTS material.

Use progressive 'am studying' for current activity. 'informations' is incorrect—use uncountable 'information'. 'my algorithm is full of IELTS tests' is awkward; likely means 'my feed is full of IELTS material' or 'my algorithm shows IELTS content'.

× So, but it is quite useful to me, uh, when I visit on Instagram or YouTube, I can pick up some useful inform.

✓ But it is quite useful to me; when I visit Instagram or YouTube, I can pick up some useful information.

Remove unnecessary 'on' after 'visit' (use 'visit Instagram'). 'inform' is incomplete; use 'information'. Improve sentence flow by removing filler words and correcting noun form.