Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、语法更准确并且信息更具体。避免重复和词汇错误（例如“red note”应为“Red Notes/小红书”，“help me entertainment”应改为“entertain me”）。可以先用一句主题句说明常访问的网站类型，再用一两句举例并说明原因，句子总数控制在5句以内。

例: I often visit social apps and short-video platforms. For example, I use WeChat to stay in touch with family and friends and handle payments. I also browse Red Notes (Xiaohongshu) and short-video sites to find lifestyle tips and relax after work.

提案: 答案要更简洁并修正语法和表达错误。先给出主题句说明最喜欢的网站，然后列出一到两个具体功能并用连词使逻辑更清晰。避免冗长或重复的表达（如“besides that it also can come to the video”应改为“it also supports video calls”）。

例: My favourite website is WeChat because it combines messaging, mobile payments and video calls. For instance, I use its payment feature for shopping and rainy-day video calls to keep in touch with friends.

提案: 回答要更准确流畅并给出时间或原因细节。注意时态和语法（“my interest turn”→“my interests have turned to”，“to help us relaxed”→“to help us relax”）。可以说明什么时候开始改变以及具体吸引你的内容。

例: Yes — recently my interests have shifted towards Red Notes, which offers many short lifestyle videos. I started using it a few months ago because those clips help me relax after a stressful day and give useful tips.

提案: 回答应更有条理并使用更合适的词汇（例如“TikTok”在中国应称为“Douyin”）。给出分类和具体用途会更有说服力。避免重复‘use it every day’并改用连词联系句子。

例: In China, social and short-video platforms are extremely popular. For example, Douyin (TikTok) and Red Notes are widely used for entertainment and shopping tips, while WeChat is essential for daily communication and mobile payments.

提案: 回答有明确立场，但需更自然、具体并修正语法（例如“the quick feedback once you input”→“quick answers when I search online”）。可以举例说明喜欢网站的具体优点并用连接词组织观点。

例: I prefer getting information from websites because they provide quick, up-to-date answers. For example, when I have a question I can search online and find articles, videos or forums within minutes, which is much faster than finding the right book.

提案: 表达要更清晰并且具体说明网站的目的和功能（例如提醒学习、课程安排）。注意语法（“bad habit that stop me to continue”→“bad habits that stop me from continuing”）。控制句子数量并用连词说明用途。

例: Yes, I would like to create a website for my English study plan. It would include lesson schedules, progress trackers and reminders to help me break bad habits and stay consistent.

提案: 回答要更具体并用更自然的表达描述学到的内容和效果。修正语法（“related about the cleaning work in home”→“about home cleaning”，“copy the skills”→“tried the tips”）。可以说明具体技巧和结果。

例: Last week I watched a short video about home cleaning and learned an easy method for removing stains. I tried the influencer's tips and they worked well, saving me time and effort.

× I usually use a WeChat red note and this website can help me connect with my families and friends.

✓ I usually use WeChat and this website can help me connect with my family and friends.

问题类型：复数/单数使用不当（1）以及名词搭配错误。说明：英语中“family”作为整体名词一般不用复数“families”来指代自己的家人；应用程序或平台名通常直接用“WeChat”。建议：将“WeChat red note”改为“WeChat”或“Red Note”（如果是特定功能或应用，用正确名称）；将“families”改为“family”。

× Besides that, I also watched short videos to help me entertainment with my daily life.

✓ Besides that, I also watch short videos to help me relax in my daily life.

问题类型：时态不当（6/5）与动词形式及词类使用错误。说明：回答描述的是经常性的习惯，应用现在时“watch”，而“entertainment”是名词，需用动词或形容词短语，这里用“relax”更合适；短语应为“in my daily life”。建议：用现在时“watch”，把“entertainment with”改为“help me relax in”。

× My favorite website is WeChat, which has many functions in it, such as you can pay for the product when you buy something and besides that it also can come to the video with your friends visually.

✓ My favorite website is WeChat, which has many functions, such as allowing you to pay for products when you buy something, and it also lets you make video calls with your friends.

问题类型：句子结构错误（26）、动词搭配和语序（6/4/8）。说明：原句“functions in it”多余，应简化为“has many functions”；“such as you can pay...”应改为非限制性定语从句或使用动词不定式或现在分词，且“pay for the product”改为“pay for products”；“come to the video with your friends visually”是错误表达，正确为“make video calls with your friends”。建议：重构为并列短语，使用“allow/let + object + verb”或“such as allowing you to...”并用“video calls”。

× Yes, definitely. Currently my interest turn to the Red notes which is full of interesting videos and we can watch the short videos to help us relaxed in the stressful work.

✓ Yes, definitely. Currently my interest has turned to Red Notes, which is full of interesting videos, and we can watch short videos to help us relax during stressful work.

问题类型：主谓一致（27）、时态（7/6）和形容词/副词使用（13）。说明：主语“interest”与动词“turn”不一致，需用“turns”或更自然的现在完成时“has turned”；应用专有名词一致性“Red Notes”；“which is full”对应“Red Notes”（复数应用“are”或把名称看作单体用“is”视具体品牌，这里保留“is”也可），但为安全用“is”改为“which is”也可接受；“relaxed”是形容词，需用动词原形“relax”；“in the stressful work”应为“during stressful work”或“at work”。建议：使用现在完成时“has turned”，用“relax”并调整介词为“during”。

× In China there are several websites which are very popular among young people and old people, such as TikTok, Red Notes, WeChat. We usually use it every day and such as when we need to pay something, we use the WeChat.

✓ In China there are several websites that are very popular among young and old people, such as TikTok, Red Notes, and WeChat. We usually use them every day, for example when we need to pay for something, we use WeChat.

问题类型：定冠词/不定冠词错误（17/22）、代词使用不当（12）。说明：“young people and old people”可简化为“young and old people”；列举后代词应与“websites”复数一致，用“them”而不是“it”；“pay something”需用“pay for something”；不需要在“WeChat”前加定冠词“the”。建议：统一复数代词，移除不必要冠词，并使用“for”引出支付对象。

× To be honest, I prefer to get information from websites because there are several reasons for me to use it. First of all, websites can give you the quick feedback once you input your questions. It's very convenient for user to use it.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to get information from websites because there are several reasons for me to do so. First of all, websites can give you quick feedback once you input your questions. It's very convenient for users to use.

问题类型：代词与短语使用（12）、冠词（22）、名词单复数（1）。说明：“use it”指代不清，改为“do so”；“the quick feedback”中“the”多余，应为“quick feedback”；“user”要用复数“users”或泛指“a user”，并把“use it”简化为“use”。建议：用“do so”代替先行短语，移除不必要定冠词，并使用复数“users”。

× Yes definitely I would like to have my own website on English learning plan because currently I have a lot of bad habit that stop me to continue my learning plan so I need the website to help me remember.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to have my own website about my English learning plan because currently I have a lot of bad habits that stop me from continuing my learning plan, so I need the website to help me remember.

问题类型：情态动词/介词使用（4/11）、冠词和复数（22/1）、动词形式（6）。说明：“website on English learning plan”表达不自然，改为“website about my English learning plan”；“a lot of bad habit”应为复数“bad habits”；“stop me to continue”错误，正确为“stop me from continuing”；并在句子之间加入逗号使结构更清晰。建议：使用“about”或“for”，将“habit”改为复数并用“stop sb from doing sth”。

× Yes, definitely. I remember the last week I watched a short video which related about the cleaning work in home. So I just copy the skills from the influencer and it works.

✓ Yes, definitely. I remember last week I watched a short video related to cleaning work at home. So I just copied the skills from the influencer and they worked.

问题类型：过去时（5）、介词使用（11）、动词形式（9）。说明：“the last week”应为“last week”；“which related about”应为“related to”；“in home”应为“at home”；既然是过去发生的动作，动词应为过去式“copied”且“it works”应改为“they worked”或“it worked”视指代（这里“skills”为复数，用“they”）。建议：用“related to”、用过去式，并修正介词为“at”。