Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答应更直接并减少填充词，控制在最多5句。先给出主题句说明常访问的网站类型，然后用一两句具体举例并解释原因，使用连接词使答案更连贯。还应避免重复词（如“visit visit”）并注意时态与搭配。

例: I often visit entertainment and shopping websites. For example, I use short-video platforms to watch clips and online game sites to play with friends, because they help me relax and stay connected. I also shop on e-commerce sites for convenience and variety.

提案: 回答需要更简洁有结构：先直接给出喜欢的网站名，然后说明具体原因并用一两条具体例子支持。减少犹豫语气（uh, umm）并用连词（for example, because）提高连贯性。

例: My favourite website is Bilibili because it offers diverse content for all ages. For example, I can watch gaming videos, cooking tutorials, and music performances, so it suits both entertainment and learning.

提案: 回答应更明确描述“变化”并提供具体细节和时间对比。使用清晰句子说明过去的问题、现在的改进及影响，避免重复和语法混乱。

例: Yes, websites have improved their screen compatibility. For example, Bilibili used to be optimized mainly for mobile, so desktop displays looked awkward. Now its layout adapts well to different devices, which makes browsing much easier.

提案: 应减少犹豫语并直接回答：说明一两类流行网站并给出原因或例子，使用连接词如 "because" 或 "for example"。注意句子结构和动词形式（e.g. "scrolling" 用法）。

例: Online shopping websites are very popular in my country because they are convenient and offer many choices. For example, people can scroll through product lists, compare prices, and buy items quickly from their phones.

提案: 回答要更有条理：先直接给出偏好，然后解释具体原因并举例说明。避免模糊表达（"for books" 放错位置）和冗余填充词，使用连接词如 "because"、"for example"。

例: I prefer getting information from websites because they are faster and more convenient. For example, I use AI search tools to find and organize materials quickly, while books usually take more time to search through.

提案: 回答应更明确表达意愿（肯定或否定），并说明网站目的与功能。减少犹豫语并将想法组织成最多三句：主题句+两句具体细节或计划。

例: Yes, I would like to have my own website to share my travel photos and stories. I would also invite other travellers to post their favourite scenery photos, creating a community for travel lovers.

提案: 回答应更具体说明从网站学到的实际技能或知识，而不是笼统评价“高质量”。给出具体例子（如学习技巧、课程、工具）并说明如何应用到生活或学习中，使用连接词增加逻辑性。

例: I have learned time-management and research skills from educational websites. For example, online courses taught me how to structure study plans, and productivity apps helped me manage assignments more efficiently.

× It's hard to give a specific website, but I visit visit a variety of times from umm, online video games to maybe uh, short video platforms or uh, shopping or shopping websites to uh, buy products online.

✓ It's hard to give a specific website, but I visit a variety of sites, from online video game sites to short-video platforms or shopping websites to buy products online.

原句中“visit visit a variety of times”不符合英语用法，重复的“visit”是口语填充词的错误，且应使用名词“sites”而不是“times”。同时列举网站类型时使用并列名词短语更自然。建议用“visit a variety of sites”并列出具体类型。

× There must be Bilibili, you know, uh, a website with a variety, uh, of content is uh, from and covers all realms from, uh, games and cooking to sing or dancing.

✓ There must be Bilibili, you know, a website with a variety of content that covers all realms, from games and cooking to singing and dancing.

原句中结构混乱，缺少连接词并且“sing”应为动名词“singing”。使用“that covers”引导定语从句更清楚。中文建议：使用关系从句连接，动词须用动名词形式。

× Umm, it's designed for the young, but I think it fits everyone.

✓ Umm, it's designed for young people, but I think it suits everyone.

“the young”可以理解但在口语或正式表达中更自然的说法是“young people”。同时“fits everyone”常用于衣物，描述适合人群用“suits everyone”更地道。建议用更常用的名词短语和动词搭配。

× Take a Bilibili as an example.

✓ Take Bilibili as an example.

公司或网站名通常不加不定冠词“a”。“a Bilibili”显得不自然。中文建议：专有名词前一般不加冠词。

× That must be the compatibility of the screen.

✓ That must be the screen compatibility.

原句“the compatibility of the screen”语序不自然，名词短语应改为“screen compatibility”更简洁。中文建议：将“of”结构改为复合名词更符合英语习惯。

× You know, in the past, that's quite that was quite annoying because the some websites are designed were designed for mobile phones.

✓ You know, in the past that was quite annoying because some websites were designed for mobile phones.

原句混用了现在时和过去时，并有多余的冠词“the”与重复短语“are designed were designed”。应统一过去时“was”与“were designed”。中文建议：描述过去情况时保持过去时态并去掉重复和多余冠词。

× So the display was annoying. But now it has changed. The display is comprehensive and complete.

✓ So the display used to be annoying, but now it has changed. The display is comprehensive and complete.

第一句用过去时“was annoying”可以，但用“used to be annoying”更自然衔接“but now it has changed”。保持时态连贯。中文建议：表达“过去常常…现在改变了”用“used to”或明确过去时态连接现在完成时。

× I suppose maybe, uh, online shopping website because Chinese people are fond of shopping online and also I was among them.

✓ I suppose maybe online shopping websites, because Chinese people are fond of shopping online and I'm among them.

“online shopping website”应为复数“websites”以匹配泛指，且“I was among them”时态不合，表达现在也是其中一员应为“I'm among them”。中文建议：泛指用复数，表示当前状态用现在时。

× I, I am among them, uh, you, umm, you can just conveniently scrolling down your scrolling down the screen to find what you like.

✓ I am among them. You can just conveniently scroll down the screen to find what you like.

动词“scrolling”在此处应为动词原形“scroll”因为前面有情态动词或一般现在时的陈述句结构；且有重复短语“scrolling down your scrolling down”。中文建议：在一般现在陈述句使用动词原形，避免重复。

× I always use artificial intelligence for me to search for and then sort out the materials online.

✓ I always use artificial intelligence to search for and sort out materials online.

“for me to”是不必要的冗余结构，直接用不定式“to search”更简洁自然。中文建议：省略多余的“for me to”，直接用不定式表达目的。

× That's time saving and more convenient.

✓ That's time-saving and more convenient.

“time saving”作为形容词应连写为“time-saving”。中文建议：复合形容词用连字符连接。

× It can greatly improve my efficient, uh, for books.

✓ It can greatly improve my efficiency. Books,

“improve my efficient”错误，正确名词为“efficiency”。句子后半“for books”不完整，应改为独立句“Books have their own advantages.”中文建议：区分形容词和名词，使用“efficiency”表示“效率”，并把关于书的内容单独成句。

× It has its own advantage, but it's too time consuming and tiring, you know?

✓ Books have their own advantages, but they are too time-consuming and tiring, you know?

原句主语指代不清，前文提到“books”，这里应以复数形式“books”并用复数谓语“are”。“time consuming”作为形容词应连字号“time-consuming”。中文建议：主谓一致并使用复数形式及正确复合形容词。

× I like posting some pictures and some texts on my, uh, of my own traveling journey.

✓ I like posting some pictures and texts of my own travelling journey on my site.

原句“on my, uh, of my own traveling journey”结构混乱。应表达“在我的网站上发布我旅行的图片和文字”。中文建议：确定动作地点（on my site）并把所属短语放在名词后（pictures and texts of my travel）。

× So maybe if I have my own website, I will also, uh, ask others to post their, uh, favorite sceneries, their beautiful pictures of landscapes on my website.

✓ So maybe if I have my own website, I will also ask others to post their favorite scenery and beautiful landscape pictures on it.

“sceneries”常用不可数“scenery”，且“pictures of landscapes”可简化为“landscape pictures”。同一网站用代词“it”代替重复名词。中文建议：注意不可数名词用法并用代词避免重复。

× Maybe high quality, you know, uh, websites nowadays must be designed for consumers and they need to be high quality.

✓ Maybe high-quality websites nowadays are designed for consumers and need to be of high quality.

“high quality”作为复合形容词应为“high-quality”。句子结构重复“high quality”。建议使用“are designed... and need to be of high quality”或简化表达。中文建议：复合形容词用连字符，避免重复。

× And also from this I can see enlightenment that my life and my study should be more, we should have higher quality.

✓ From this I can also learn that my life and studies should be of higher quality.

原句“see enlightenment”和表达混乱，应使用“learn”或“get inspired”。“my study”改为复数“my studies”。句子更简洁自然。中文建议：用更自然的动词（learn/get inspired），并用复数表达学习方面。