Websites— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response clearer and more natural: begin with a direct topic sentence, correct word choice, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide one specific example of a site. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I often visit educational websites for my studies and news sites to keep up with current events. For example, I use Coursera for courses and BBC News for reliable updates, and occasionally I relax by reading lifestyle blogs or browsing Instagram.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the site, fix grammar and pronunciation errors, and give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: My favourite website is YouTube because it offers a wide range of content. For instance, I watch academic tutorials to study and cooking videos to learn recipes, so it’s both informative and entertaining.

提案: Provide a clear, connected answer: state the change, explain how with specific details, and use linking words. Remove filler words and correct vocabulary (sites, algorithms, personalized).

例: Yes, websites have become much more interactive and personalized. For example, many sites now use AI-driven recommendation algorithms, so they show relevant content faster and tailor suggestions to my interests.

提案: Correct word choice and give precise examples: name popular e-commerce platforms and social media, and explain briefly why they are popular. Use linking words and avoid repetition.

例: In Vietnam, e-commerce sites such as Shopee and Lazada and social platforms like Facebook and TikTok are very popular. People use them for convenient online shopping and to stay connected with friends and trends.

提案: Make contrasts clear and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'more structured, in-depth content'). Use linking words like 'however' and give a short example of when you use each source.

例: I prefer websites for quick, up-to-date information because they are searchable. However, I turn to books for in-depth study since they provide more structured and reliable explanations, especially for theoretical subjects.

提案: Start with a direct answer, remove hesitations, and specify the website’s purpose and benefits. Use linking words and give a brief example of what you would put on it.

例: Yes, I would like to have my own website to showcase my portfolio and share personal projects. For example, I would include a resume, project descriptions, and contact information to build a professional presence online.

提案: Be specific about skills and correct word choice (e.g., 'basic coding', 'online resources have improved my productivity'). Use linking words and give one concrete example of a course or tip you applied.

例: I’ve learned practical skills like time-management strategies and basic coding from websites. For instance, after following a time-management course on Coursera, I started using a Pomodoro schedule which improved my study efficiency.

× I mostly recommend educational platforms from my studies and new side to stay objective on current events.

✓ I mostly visit educational platforms from my studies and news sites to stay objective on current events.

The sentence uses 'recommend' which doesn't fit context and has article/word choice errors: 'new side' should be 'news sites' (plural) and 'a' is not needed. Use 'visit' instead of 'recommend' to answer the question about websites visited. Ensure correct plural form 'sites' and correct noun 'news'.

× Occasionally I also browse a social media or lifestyle blogs to relax.

✓ Occasionally I also browse social media or lifestyle blogs to relax.

The phrase 'a social media' is incorrect because 'social media' is an uncountable/plural concept; do not use 'a'. Keep parallel structure by using 'social media or lifestyle blogs'.

× My favorite house to be YouTube is an incredible resource because I can find everything from academic A academic tutorials to cooking videos which makes a pro highly informative and entertaining.

✓ My favourite is YouTube; it is an incredible resource because I can find everything from academic tutorials to cooking videos, which makes it highly informative and entertaining.

Multiple errors: wrong word 'house to be' and duplicate 'A academic' are misuse of words/pronouns/articles. Replace with clear subject 'it' for YouTube. Add punctuation to separate clauses and use 'it' to refer back to YouTube. Fix article 'academic' capitalization and remove duplicate word. 'Which makes it' correctly links the clause. Also use correct adjective placement 'highly informative'.

× Yes, they've become much more interactive. Many sides. You now use AI driven recommendations uh with mixed fighting relevant content much faster and more personalized uh compared to a few years ago.

✓ Yes, websites have become much more interactive. Many sites now use AI-driven recommendations, delivering more relevant content much faster and more personally compared to a few years ago.

'Many sides' should be 'many sites'. 'You now use' is awkward; better to say 'Many sites now use'. 'AI driven' needs a hyphen 'AI-driven'. 'Mixed fighting' appears to be garbled; replace with 'delivering' or 'providing'. Use 'more personally' or 'more personalized' for correct adjective/adverb choice. Ensure subject-verb agreement and smoother phrasing.

× In Vietnam, a commerce size like subway and social platforms like Facebook and Tiktok are extremely, extremely popular.

✓ In Vietnam, e-commerce sites like Shopee and social platforms like Facebook and TikTok are extremely popular.

'a commerce size' is incorrect; correct term is 'e-commerce sites'. 'subway' is likely a misheard brand; use a known example such as 'Shopee'. Avoid repeating 'extremely, extremely'. Capitalize 'TikTok'. This fixes adjective/noun use and article errors.

× People here rely on them heavily for both daily shopping and staying connected.

✓ People here rely on them heavily for both daily shopping and staying connected.

Sentence is grammatically correct; pronoun 'them' correctly refers to previously mentioned platforms. No change needed; included for completeness.

× I prefer websites for quick information because they are they are searchable and up to date.

✓ I prefer websites for quick information because they are searchable and up to date.

Duplicate phrase 'they are' should be removed. Pronoun 'they' correctly refers to 'websites'. Ensure no repetition and proper adjective 'up to date'.

× However, I still turn to books for in-depth learning because they offer a morgue for cards structure experience.

✓ However, I still turn to books for in-depth learning because they offer a more focused, structured learning experience.

'morgue for cards structure' is garbled. Replace with 'more focused, structured learning experience' to convey intended meaning. Adjust adjectives' order ('more focused' then 'structured') and noun 'learning experience' for clarity.

× I would it would be a great way to showcase for My Portfolio or share my personal projects.

✓ I would. It would be a great way to showcase my portfolio or share my personal projects.

Sentence has repetition 'I would it would' and incorrect preposition 'for' before 'My Portfolio'. Split into two sentences and use 'showcase my portfolio' (no 'for'). Capitalize only proper nouns; 'portfolio' is common noun.

× It's a useful skill to have in in this digital age, uh, to build a professional present.

✓ It's a useful skill to have in this digital age to build a professional presence.

Remove duplicate 'in in' and filler 'uh'. 'Present' is wrong word; use 'presence' to mean online professional profile. Ensure correct noun choice and concise phrasing.

× I've learned a lot of practical skills such as time management techniques, techniques and even basis coding.

✓ I've learned a lot of practical skills such as time management techniques and even basic coding.

Remove duplicate 'techniques' and change 'basis coding' to 'basic coding'. Present perfect 'I've learned' is fine for experiences up to now. Correct adjective form 'basic'.

× These online researchers have been again charges for my productivity and academic performance.

✓ These online resources have been a great help for my productivity and academic performance.

'online researchers' is incorrect; use 'online resources'. 'been again charges' is garbled; replace with 'have been a great help' to convey positive impact. Fix noun phrase and preposition 'for'.