Cars— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and correct grammar: use past tense consistently, remove fillers, and give one clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Keep to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words like 'because' to explain.

例: Yes, I loved traveling by car when I was a child because my father often drove us on weekend trips. For example, we used to drive to the countryside every summer, which gave me happy memories of singing and looking at the scenery together.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating the type you like, avoid vague or incorrect details (e.g., '22 seat'), and provide two specific reasons using linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'. Improve vocabulary: 'sleek', 'stylish', 'high-performance'.

例: I prefer sports cars because they are high-performance and have a sleek, stylish design. For example, I like models that accelerate quickly and have a low, aerodynamic shape that looks sporty and attractive.

提案: State your preference clearly in one sentence and give one specific reason with appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'in control', 'responsible'). Avoid contradictions in the same answer and correct word choice ('drive' not 'write').

例: I prefer to be the driver because I enjoy being in control and responsible for the journey. For instance, I like choosing the route and setting the pace so I can stop when I want to admire a view.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence then one supporting detail. Use correct verbs and reduce fillers. Replace 'kill time' with a more natural phrase like 'pass the time' or 'relax'.

例: When there is a traffic jam, I usually listen to music to pass the time. For example, I put on my favorite playlist and relax until traffic starts moving again.

提案: Give a clear opinion sentence and one or two concise, specific reasons. Use correct phrasing (e.g., 'visible at night', 'eye-catching') and link ideas with 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I think car colours are important because they affect visibility and style. For example, my red car is eye-catching and easier to notice in the evening, which can improve safety.

提案: Answer directly and give clear, specific reasons. Avoid vague or incorrect words like 'defendable'—use 'durable' or 'safe'. Use linking words ('because', 'also') and avoid repeating fillers. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would consider buying an expensive car because they often have better safety features and more reliable performance. Also, higher-quality suspension and engines usually make driving smoother and more comfortable.

× Yes, I loved to traveling by cars.

✓ Yes, I loved traveling by car.

The verb 'love' followed by another verb should be followed by the -ing form without 'to' ('loved traveling'), or by the infinitive with 'to' but not both. Also 'cars' is general here; use singular 'car' or 'by car' for the mode of travel. Suggestion: use 'I loved traveling by car.'

× Uh, it's one of my childhood pleasure actually.

✓ Uh, it's one of my childhood pleasures, actually.

The phrase 'one of my childhood pleasure' needs a plural noun after 'one of' so 'pleasures' is correct. Also adding a comma before 'actually' improves flow. Suggestion: use plural nouns after 'one of'.

× Uh, I usually I took the car with my dad.

✓ Usually, I took the car with my dad.

The original repeats the subject 'I' and misorders adverb 'usually'. Remove the extra 'I' and place 'usually' at the beginning or before the main verb. Suggestion: 'Usually, I took the car with my dad.'

× He, he drove and I take the, I took the ride with him.

✓ He drove and I took the ride with him.

The sentence mixes past ('drove', 'took') with present ('take'). Maintain past tense for past events. Also remove repeated fragments. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past experiences.

× For sure as a, as a boy, uh, we, we like the sports car, uh, we because it runs super fast and uh, it's a especially 22 seat 1 and they are usually looks very nice, uh, look quite fancy, attractive.

✓ When I was a boy, we liked sports cars because they ran very fast. Some were especially two-seaters and usually looked very nice, fancy and attractive.

Multiple errors: tense should be past ('liked','ran'), plural agreement ('sports cars','they ran'), incorrect article and number phrase ('two-seaters' not '22 seat 1'), and wrong verb form 'looks' with plural subject 'they'. Also 'especially' placement and adjective order improved. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and match verb forms to plural subjects; use correct compound nouns ('two-seaters').

× I'd like to be a driver actually 'cause I like the feeling to control the steering wheel.

✓ I'd like to be the driver actually because I like the feeling of controlling the steering wheel.

Use 'the driver' to specify a role and 'because' instead of informal ''cause'. After 'feeling' use 'of' plus gerund ('controlling'), not 'to control'. Suggestion: use 'the driver' and 'the feeling of controlling'.

× It feels good and it's kind of emotion to control my life.

✓ It feels good and it's a kind of emotion to feel in control of my life.

The phrase 'kind of emotion to control my life' is ungrammatical. Use 'a kind of emotion' and the idiom 'feel in control of my life'. Suggestion: rephrase to natural expression 'feel in control'.

× I think they are quite same and I enjoyed the feeling to write.

✓ I think they are quite the same and I enjoyed the feeling of driving.

'Quite same' needs 'the' ('quite the same'). 'The feeling to write' is incorrect and likely a confusion; context expects 'driving', so use 'the feeling of driving' with 'of' + gerund. Suggestion: use 'the feeling of' + verb-ing.

× Uh, it happens every day.

✓ Uh, it happens every day.

This sentence is grammatical and matches the context; no change needed.

× Uh, when, when I made this kind of situation, I, I normally turn the mute MP3 player and enjoy the, uh, music I like, I like to listen to music in this kind of situation and it kill time.

✓ When I encounter this kind of situation, I normally mute my MP3 player and enjoy the music I like; I listen to music in these situations and it kills time.

Problems: 'made this kind of situation' is incorrect; use 'encounter' or 'am in this situation'. Tense consistency and verb forms: 'mute my MP3 player' (verb), 'it kills time' (third person singular). Remove repeated 'I'. Suggestion: use correct verbs ('mute', 'listen') and match subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I think so Uh, my car, my car's color is red.

✓ Yes, I think so. My car's color is red.

Minor punctuation; 'my car, my car's color' is repetitive. Use a period and single reference. Suggestion: concise expression 'My car is red.'

× Uh, it's very obvious to find out and quite eye-catching in the dark, especially in the evening, people have the trouble to, to see if there's a car in front of you, so.

✓ It's very easy to notice and quite eye-catching in the dark, especially in the evening when people have trouble seeing if there's a car in front of them.

'Obvious to find out' should be 'easy to notice'. Use 'people have trouble seeing' not 'have the trouble to see'. Pronoun 'you' changed to 'them' for general reference. Remove trailing 'so'. Suggestion: use 'have trouble seeing' and 'in front of them'.

× Uh, yes, for sure. Uh, I think is a way to show your, how well you are.

✓ Yes, for sure. I think it's a way to show how well you are doing.

Missing subject 'it' (copula), and awkward phrase 'show your, how well you are'. Use 'show how well you are doing.' Suggestion: include 'it' and use progressive 'doing' for state.

× And I do think the expensive car are more defendable, uh, more safe to drive a expensive car and uh, they are, they drive more soft and the power is much more high.

✓ And I do think expensive cars are more dependable and safer to drive. They ride more smoothly and have much more power.

Multiple issues: plural 'cars' requires 'are'; 'defendable' is wrong word—use 'dependable'. 'More safe' should be 'safer'. 'Drive a expensive car' needs article agreement 'an expensive car' but better to pluralize. 'Drive more soft' should be 'ride more smoothly' and 'power is much more high' should be 'have much more power' or 'are much more powerful'. Suggestion: use correct adjectives and comparative forms and match subject-verb agreement.