Cars— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., use 'I enjoyed' or 'I used to enjoy', not 'I really enjoy it' for past).

例: I enjoyed traveling by car when I was a child because I could watch changing landscapes through the window. In addition, I liked listening to music and having snacks in the car, which made long trips relaxing and fun.

提案: Begin with a direct opinion (e.g., 'I prefer…'), then give clear reasons with linking words. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'cost-effective' or 'environmentally friendly') and avoid repetitive phrases.

例: I prefer electric cars because they are more environmentally friendly and often more cost-effective to run. For example, they produce no tailpipe emissions and can reduce fuel expenses over time.

提案: Answer directly then support with a concise reason. Correct grammar mistakes (e.g., 'afraid of driving' not 'drives car') and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: I prefer to be a passenger because I'm still nervous about driving. Even though I have a driver's license, I feel I need more practice to be confident, so I usually let others drive.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two specific activities using correct verbs and vocabulary. Use linking words such as 'usually' and 'or' to make the answer coherent. Correct errors like 'scrolling my phone' not 'scooting my phones'.

例: When there's a traffic jam, I usually listen to pop music or scroll through my phone. Sometimes I also play simple games to relax and pass the time more quickly.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a logical reason or example. Avoid unclear references and irrelevant anecdotes. Use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'people may judge you' rather than 'tricked like more hard'). If mentioning studies, be concise and relevant.

例: I think car colour can matter to some extent because it affects people's first impressions. For example, bright colours like red or pink might attract more attention, while neutral colours such as grey or white are often seen as more professional.

提案: Answer directly and give one or two clear reasons using correct vocabulary (e.g., 'public transport' not 'public transform transformation'). Avoid hesitation and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to show cause and effect.

例: I probably won't buy an expensive car because I prefer using public transport and would rather invest in a house or my hobbies. Therefore I plan to spend my money on things that matter more to me than a luxury vehicle.

× Yeah, I really enjoy it because when I in the car I can see the landscapes or from the car window and I can listen to music or eat something in the car.

✓ Yeah, I really enjoyed it because when I was in the car I could see the landscape from the car window and I could listen to music or eat something in the car.

The student is describing past experiences, so present tense verbs (enjoy, in, can see) are incorrect. Use past tense and past forms to match the time frame: 'enjoyed', 'was in', 'could see'. Also 'landscapes or from the car window' is awkward; change to 'the landscape from the car window'. Suggestion: Determine the time frame (past) and use past tense verbs; simplify redundant phrases.

× Well, I don't really think about it because, uh, maybe electric cars cost is friendly, environmental is environmental friendly and I think that can help our environment and save the money.

✓ Well, I haven't really thought about it, but maybe electric cars are cost-friendly and environmentally friendly, and I think they can help our environment and save money.

Multiple errors: 'don't really think' should be past or present perfect 'haven't really thought' to indicate consideration; 'electric cars cost is friendly' is ungrammatical—use adjective forms 'cost-friendly' or 'affordable' and correct verb agreement 'electric cars are'. 'Environmental is environmental friendly' duplicates and misuses nouns/adjectives; use 'environmentally friendly'. 'Save the money' should be 'save money' without the definite article. Suggestions: Use correct adjective forms and plural verb agreement, and omit unnecessary articles.

× Oh I really really want to be the passenger because I'm afraid of drives car.

✓ Oh, I really, really want to be the passenger because I'm afraid of driving a car.

'Afraid of drives car' mixes a noun and verb incorrectly. After 'afraid of' use a gerund: 'driving'. Also use the indefinite article 'a car' unless you mean a specific car. Suggestion: After prepositions like 'of', use verb+ing form for activities.

× Also I have got my driver license but I think I need to pay more attention and successful to drive the car so I just want to be the passenger.

✓ Also, I have my driver's license, but I think I need to pay more attention and be more successful at driving, so I just want to be the passenger.

'Have got' is acceptable in some varieties, but 'have my driver's license' is clearer; 'driver license' needs possessive/s possessive form 'driver's license'. 'Pay more attention and successful' mixes verb and adjective; use 'be more successful at driving' or 'drive more successfully'. Suggestion: Use parallel structures ('pay more attention and be more successful') and correct possessive form.

× I usually listen to the pop music in the car or just scooting my phones or play some games because sets can let me unwind and pass the time quickly.

✓ I usually listen to pop music in the car or just scroll on my phone or play some games because those things help me unwind and pass the time more quickly.

Errors: 'the pop music' should be 'pop music' (no article). 'Scooting my phones' is wrong; likely 'scrolling on my phone'. 'Sets' is unclear; replace with 'those things'. 'Pass the time quickly' -> 'pass the time more quickly' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct verbs for phone activity ('scroll') and referents ('those things').

× Yes, do you know an experiment by a Blogger in Xiangushu uh that said that if a man use a red pink color car so the car will be tricked like more hard because they don't believe.

✓ Yes, there was an experiment by a blogger in Xiangshu that said if a man uses a red or pink car, people may judge him more harshly because they don't trust him.

Many structural issues: missing article 'there was', capitalization 'Blogger' not needed, place name 'Xiangshu' fixed, verb agreement 'if a man uses', 'red pink color car' -> 'red or pink car', 'so the car will be tricked like more hard' is nonsensical—likely meant 'people judge him more harshly'. Also 'they don't believe' unclear—clarify subject 'people' and object 'him'. Suggestion: Break into clearer clauses and ensure subject-verb agreement and logical meaning.

× Probably not I I like the public transform transformation more than the car so I will put my money on other things like house or my hobbies, Uh, rather than the car because I'm really don't like.

✓ Probably not. I like public transportation more than cars, so I will put my money into other things like a house or my hobbies rather than a car because I really don't like cars.

Errors: 'I I' duplicate; 'public transform transformation' should be 'public transportation'. 'Put my money on other things' -> 'put my money into other things'. 'Like house' needs article 'a house'. 'Because I'm really don't like' ungrammatical; correct: 'because I really don't like cars.' Suggestion: Use correct noun phrases, prepositions ('into'), and consistent plurals/articles.