Cars— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes — I enjoyed traveling by car as a child because my family often took road trips. For example, my father loved exploring new places, so we visited beaches and mountains; I felt excited by the changing scenery and the comfort of being in a car.

提案: Start with a clear preference, avoid repeating phrases, and give specific features you appreciate (e.g., comfortable seats, good suspension, advanced safety features). Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I prefer comfortable cars with good ergonomics and safety features. For instance, I like cars with supportive seats, smooth suspension and built‑in driver aids because they make long journeys less tiring.

提案: Answer directly then briefly explain why with a specific reason or short example. Avoid unnecessary repetition of 'drive'.

例: I prefer to be the driver because I enjoy controlling the route and pace. For example, when I drive with friends I choose scenic routes and can stop whenever I want to take photos.

提案: Organize the answer: state main action first, then two brief activities with linking words. Correct verb forms and avoid long, unclear sentences. Be specific about what you read or listen to.

例: If traffic is heavy, I usually turn off the engine to save fuel and then either listen to music or read short articles on my phone. For example, I often listen to news podcasts or read short stories while waiting.

提案: Give a direct opinion and one or two clear reasons with examples. Avoid vague phrases and repetition; use adjectives accurately.

例: Yes, I think car colour is important because it affects appearance and resale value. For example, vibrant colours like red can make a car stand out, while neutral colours such as silver or white often appeal to more buyers.

提案: Answer directly and give concrete reasons and a brief plan. Use correct tense and avoid repeating 'expensive'. Mention what aspects of the brand appeal to you.

例: Yes, I hope to buy a luxury car in the future because it offers better comfort and safety. For instance, I admire Mercedes for its build quality and advanced features, and I plan to save money over the next five years to afford one.

× Yes, of course I travel a lot of by car in my childhood because my father also love to travel.

✓ Yes, of course I traveled a lot by car in my childhood because my father also loved to travel.

The sentence refers to past time 'in my childhood' so verbs must be in the simple past. 'travel' should be 'traveled' and 'love' should be 'loved' to match past tense. Suggestion: use simple past for actions completed in the past.

× So that time I feel very excited and liked it when I was traveling by car because it is a very comfortable and makemytrip very easier.

✓ At that time I felt very excited and liked traveling by car because it was very comfortable and made my trips easier.

The original mixes tenses and contains incorrect phrasing. 'So that time' should be 'At that time'; 'feel' and 'liked' should be past: 'felt' and 'liked' or better 'liked traveling'; 'is' should be 'was' to match past; 'makemytrip very easier' is ungrammatical — use 'made my trips easier'. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistency and use correct verb forms and spacing.

× To be honest, I like comfortable cars which are very comfortable and make the trip very easier as well as as well as the number of functions and features they make the travel very easier.

✓ To be honest, I like comfortable cars that make the trip easier and have many functions and features that help travel be more convenient.

Redundant phrases ('comfortable' twice, 'very easier' is incorrect) and awkward structure. 'Very easier' is incorrect — 'easier' is comparative and does not take 'very'. Use 'many' for countable 'functions and features'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use correct comparative forms and quantifiers.

× To be honest, I prefer to be a driver because I like to drive cars, so I always drive cars whenever I go with my family or with my friends.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to be the driver because I like to drive, so I always drive when I go with my family or friends.

This sentence mainly has style issues rather than grammar, but 'a driver' is better as 'the driver' in context. Simplify 'drive cars' to 'drive'. Remove redundant 'with my'. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and definite article when referring to a specific role.

× Well, whenever there is a traffic jam I usually turn off my car and then I listen to music sometime and sometime I reading books because I love to read books.

✓ Well, whenever there is a traffic jam I usually turn off my car; sometimes I listen to music and sometimes I read books because I love reading.

'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). 'I reading' is incorrect — after 'I' use the base verb 'read' or the -ing form with a continuous auxiliary. Also keep parallel structure: 'sometimes I listen... sometimes I read'. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' and ensure correct verb forms.

× So whenever there is a any chance where is a very traffic was jammed.

✓ So whenever there is a chance and traffic is jammed,

This fragment is ungrammatical and contains extra articles ('a any'), wrong word order ('where is a very traffic was jammed') and tense mismatch. Simplify to 'whenever there is a chance and traffic is jammed' or 'when traffic is heavily jammed'. Suggestion: remove extra articles and use correct word order and tense.

× So that I might prefer to read books which make my brain sharp and also utilise my time by knowing.

✓ I prefer to read books because they sharpen my mind and help me use my time well.

'So that I might prefer' is awkward; use simple present 'I prefer'. 'make my brain sharp' is unnatural — use 'sharpen my mind'. 'utilise my time by knowing' is unclear; use 'help me use my time well'. Suggestion: use clear verbs and natural collocations.

× Yes, of course, because colour is the very vital part of the car because the look of the car is came from a colour so it there are very good colour which is very vibrant and good so it make the car more beautiful.

✓ Yes, of course, because colour is an important part of a car: the car's appearance comes from its colour, so a vibrant, attractive colour makes the car more beautiful.

Errors: 'the very vital part' is awkward — use 'an important part'; 'the look of the car is came from a colour' mixes tenses and uses wrong verb — use 'comes from its colour'; 'there are very good colour' is wrong number and article — use 'a vibrant, attractive colour'. Suggestion: use appropriate articles, correct verb forms and natural adjective order.

× Yes, of course I do, because it is also my dream to purchase an expensive car, for example my personal choices Mercedes, which is very expensive.

✓ Yes, of course I will, because it is my dream to purchase an expensive car; for example, my personal choice is Mercedes, which is very expensive.

Question asks about future ('Will you buy...'), so answer should use future 'will'. 'my personal choices Mercedes' is ungrammatical — use 'my personal choice is Mercedes'. Suggestion: use future tense for future plans and correct noun phrase structure.

× So in future I definitely buy expensive.

✓ So in the future I will definitely buy an expensive one.

Missing future auxiliary 'will' for future intention. 'buy expensive' lacks a noun — use 'an expensive one' or 'an expensive car'. Suggestion: include 'will' and a noun after 'expensive'.