Cars— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar (use past tense and gerunds), and add one specific supporting detail. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I loved traveling by car as a child. I enjoyed sitting with my parents and looking at the changing scenery, especially when we drove to the beach on summer weekends.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence stating preference, correct vocabulary and grammar (electric vehicles, expansion), and provide a clear reason with one specific example. Avoid repetition and filler phrases.

例: I prefer electric vehicles because they are becoming more common and environmentally friendly. For example, many cities in China are adopting EVs, which reduces local air pollution.

提案: Answer directly with a clear contrast between past and present, use correct tense and phrasing, and remove redundant words. Provide one specific reason for your current preference.

例: It depends: as a child I preferred being a passenger because I liked chatting with my father. Now that I have a driving license I prefer to drive because I enjoy the independence and control it gives me.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid vague phrases, and give specific activities in a logical order using linking words. Correct word choice (play games, have conversations) and keep it concise.

例: When there is a traffic jam, I usually talk with my family or play simple games with my brother, like guessing games or card games. Sometimes we also listen to music to pass the time.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating your view, use appropriate linking words (because, therefore), and use correct vocabulary (sunlight, reflect heat). Provide one specific comparison between hot and cold regions.

例: Yes, car colour can be important because in hot regions people often choose white cars to reflect sunlight and keep the interior cooler. In colder regions colour matters less, so buyers focus more on style than heat reflection.

提案: Answer directly and confidently, avoid vague phrases like 'we'll see' or 'as a good person', and give a specific reason or condition for buying an expensive car (features, safety). Keep it to 2 sentences.

例: I might buy an expensive car in the future if it offers advanced safety and eco-friendly features. For instance, I would consider a model with autonomous driving assistance and excellent fuel efficiency.

× when you traveling by cars, it gives you an, a smile to your face, like sitting with your father or mother and uh, ride anywhere you want.

✓ when you travel by car, it puts a smile on your face, like sitting with your father or mother and riding anywhere you want.

Use the base verb after 'when' for general statements (when you travel). 'Traveling' after 'when you' is incorrect here. Also use singular 'car' as a general noun and 'riding' (verb + -ing) to match the gerund form after 'and'. Replace 'gives you a smile to your face' with the idiomatic 'puts a smile on your face'. Suggestion: Use 'when you travel by car' for habitual actions and keep parallel gerund forms for actions joined by 'and'.

× I'm more like electrical vehicles due to its broaden expendation throughout the world, especially from the China.

✓ I'm more interested in electric vehicles because their use has broadened throughout the world, especially in China.

'More like' is incorrect for preferences; use 'interested in'. 'Electrical vehicles' should be 'electric vehicles'. 'Its' does not agree with plural 'vehicles', so use 'their'. 'Broaden expendation' is nonstandard — use 'use has broadened' or 'their popularity has expanded'. Preposition 'from the China' is incorrect; use 'in China'. Suggestion: Say 'interested in electric vehicles' and use 'their' for plural subjects and 'in' for countries.

× Earlier than it was a child, ordinary child without driving license, I prefer to sit with my father and go anywhere.

✓ When I was a child and did not have a driving license, I preferred to sit with my father and go anywhere.

The sentence mixes tenses and incorrect phrasing. Use past tense 'was' and 'did not have' for past situations. 'Prefer' should be past 'preferred' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Earlier than it was a child' is ungrammatical; use 'When I was a child'. Suggestion: Use clear time markers and keep verb tenses consistent for past habits.

× But now I have this driving license, I would I really appreciate these feelings that I sit in the car and ride my vehicle by myself.

✓ But now I have a driving license, I really appreciate the feeling of sitting in the car and driving my vehicle by myself.

The original mixes conditional 'would' with present reality and has awkward phrasing. Use present simple 'I really appreciate' because this is a current state. 'These feelings' should be singular 'the feeling' and 'ride my vehicle' should be 'driving my vehicle'. Remove the extra 'I'. Suggestion: For current habits or states, use present simple and prefer natural collocations like 'the feeling of sitting' and 'driving'.

× We with my brother can play different games, playing chess or another feelings or I have a small conversation with my family members and for sure it's an exciting time to do in the traffic jam.

✓ My brother and I can play different games, like chess, or have a short conversation with family members; it's definitely a good way to pass the time in a traffic jam.

'We with my brother' is an incorrect word order; use 'My brother and I'. 'Another feelings' is ungrammatical; use 'other activities' or 'other games'. 'I have a small conversation' should be 'have a short conversation'. 'Exciting time to do in the traffic jam' is awkward; use 'a good way to pass the time in a traffic jam'. Suggestion: Use correct pronoun order and natural collocations: 'My brother and I', 'have a short conversation', 'pass the time'.

× in the hot regions, uh, the cars can be mostly white to uh, reflect the, uh, the sunbath, uh, in the, uh, cold region, it's uh, not, it's no matter what color is in your car.

✓ In hot regions, cars are often white to reflect the sun; in cold regions, the color of your car does not matter as much.

'Mostly white to reflect the sunbath' is incorrect: 'sunbath' is wrong here; use 'the sun'. 'Can be mostly white' is better as 'are often white'. 'In the cold region' should be plural 'in cold regions' or 'in a cold region'. 'It's no matter what color is in your car' is ungrammatical; use 'the color of your car does not matter as much'. Suggestion: Use 'often' for frequency, 'reflect the sun', and correct noun phrases like 'the color of your car'.

× OK, we'll see in the future. Now I can tell you the my suggestion about it, but as a good person, I would like to have the expensive car with a plenty of different features, innovations from the from the car industry world.

✓ OK, we'll see in the future. Now I can give you my opinion about it, but ideally I would like to have an expensive car with plenty of different features and innovations from the car industry.

'The my suggestion' is incorrect article/pronoun combination; use 'my opinion' or 'my suggestion'. 'A plenty of' is incorrect; use 'plenty of' or 'a lot of'. 'From the from the car industry world' is repetitive and awkward; use 'from the car industry' or 'from the automotive industry'. Keep future 'we'll see' and conditional 'I would like' consistent. Suggestion: Use 'give you my opinion', 'plenty of features', and 'from the automotive industry'.