Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and correct grammar and awkward phrases, be concise and natural, and add a brief reason with linking words. Keep answers under 5 sentences. Replace incorrect words (e.g. “sweetie”, “scoring summer day”) with correct terms such as “sweaty” and “hot summer days.”

例: No, I usually don't wear a watch. I find watches uncomfortable because my wrist gets sweaty, especially on hot summer days. Also, I haven't found a style that suits me, so I prefer using my phone to check the time.

提案: Good content and clear structure. Improve by using smoother linking and slightly more natural phrasing (e.g. “gave me a watch for my birthday” and “remind me to value time”). Add one specific detail to enrich the answer if possible.

例: Yes. My parents gave me a watch for my birthday when I was in high school. They said it would remind me to value time and also represent their support and encouragement as I started more responsibilities at school.

提案: Answer is relevant and includes an example. Improve by using linking words for clarity, avoiding absolute claims, and adding a second reason (e.g. craftsmanship or investment). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g. “signal status” or “convey wealth”)

例: I think some people wear expensive watches to signal their social status and wealth. For example, businessmen might choose brands like Rolex to convey professionalism and boost confidence in meetings; others buy luxury watches because of their craftsmanship or potential resale value.

提案: Fix grammar and make the contrast clearer using linking words (e.g. “however” or “on the other hand”). Be concise and avoid repetition (“for me” twice). Provide a specific reason why office workers may prefer watches (appearance, punctuality).

例: Personally, I don't think it's necessary because I usually check the time on my phone. However, for office workers a watch can project professionalism and make it easier to glance at the time discreetly during meetings.

× Frankly speaking, I can't stand wearing a watch for a long period of time because my wrist can't get easily sweetie, especially in how the scoring summer day.

✓ Frankly speaking, I can't stand wearing a watch for a long period of time because my wrist can easily get sweaty, especially on hot summer days.

The adjective 'sweetie' is incorrect; the correct adjective describing skin producing sweat is 'sweaty' (adjective). Word order 'get easily sweetie' is also incorrect; use 'can easily get sweaty'. 'In how the scoring summer day' is ungrammatical and should be 'on hot summer days' to indicate typical conditions. Suggestion: use 'can easily get sweaty' and 'on hot summer days' for natural phrasing.

× Have you ever got a watch as a gift?

✓ Have you ever gotten a watch as a gift?

In present perfect questions in many dialects (American English), the past participle of 'get' is 'gotten'; in British English 'got' is acceptable. Since the rest of the transcript uses forms compatible with American usage, use 'Have you ever gotten a watch as a gift?'. Suggestion: match dialectal past participle ('gotten' for American English, 'got' for British).

× When I was in high school, my parents gave me a watch as my birthday gift.

✓ When I was in high school, my parents gave me a watch as a birthday gift.

Phrase 'my birthday gift' is not ungrammatical but sounds redundant; 'a birthday gift' is more natural English. This is a word choice/style correction rather than tense. Suggestion: use 'a birthday gift' for natural phrasing.

× They told me that this watch can remind me to value the time and represent their support and encouragement.

✓ They told me that this watch could remind me to value time and represent their support and encouragement.

In reported speech after 'told me' (past), modal 'can' should shift to 'could' to match sequence of tenses. Also 'value the time' is awkward; 'value time' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: shift modals in reported speech and prefer 'value time'.

× I think people wear luxury watches because they can symbolize one's social status.

✓ I think people wear luxury watches because they can symbolize a person's social status.

Mixing plural 'people' with singular possessive 'one's' is inconsistent. Use 'a person's' to match 'people' in a general sense, or rephrase 'those watches can symbolize people’s social status'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent in number.

× For example, businessmen usually wear expensive watches like Rolex to improve their confidence in social situations.

✓ For example, businessmen usually wear expensive watches like Rolexes to improve their confidence in social situations.

When referring to multiple items of a brand used generally, the plural 'Rolexes' or the phrasing 'watches like Rolex' is acceptable; adding plural marker clarifies. Also 'wear... to improve their confidence' is acceptable. Suggestion: pluralize brand name when referring to many watches or rephrase 'watches such as Rolex'.

× For me, I don't think it is important for me to wear a watch because I can use mobile phone to check the time.

✓ For me, I don't think it is important to wear a watch because I can use my mobile phone to check the time.

Redundant 'for me' and 'I' repeated is stylistically poor; remove one. Also 'use mobile phone' lacks possessive article; use 'my mobile phone' or 'a mobile phone'. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and include possessive.

× However, for office workers, they wear a watch can combine a strong sense of professionalism.

✓ However, for office workers, wearing a watch can convey a strong sense of professionalism.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and structure: 'they wear a watch can combine' is ungrammatical. Use a gerund subject 'wearing a watch' + modal 'can' + verb 'convey' (or 'project') to express the idea. 'Combine' is the wrong verb; 'convey' or 'project' fits context. Suggestion: use 'wearing a watch can convey a strong sense of professionalism.'