Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct word choice (e.g., 'suit' not 'Rook').

例: Yes, I usually wear a watch. I often wear one with a suit for formal occasions because it completes my outfit and looks professional.

提案: Organize the answer into a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Remove fillers (umm, uh) and use correct past tense and pronouns. Explain briefly what was said or why it was meaningful.

例: Yes, I received a watch as a gift from my older brother when I was a child. He gave it to me as a reward for doing well at school, and I still remember how proud I felt.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example', and avoid vague phrases. Use vocabulary like 'status', 'prestige', or 'craftsmanship'.

例: Many people wear expensive watches because they want to show status and good taste. For example, some buy luxury brands to signal success, while others appreciate the fine craftsmanship.

提案: Start with a clear opinion and give one or two concrete reasons, using linking words ('because', 'however'). Correct word choice ('formal', 'considerate') and avoid repetition. Mention practicality as well as appearance if relevant.

例: I think wearing a watch can be important, especially in formal situations, because it looks professional and helps you keep track of time. However, in casual settings a phone can serve the same purpose.

× Yes, of course I like wearing watch, especially when I wear formal Rook, so I usually wear a watch.

✓ Yes, of course I like wearing a watch, especially when I wear formal clothes, so I usually wear a watch.

The noun 'watch' requires an article in this context: use 'a watch'. 'Rook' is incorrect and likely a misspelling of 'suit' or 'clothes'; 'formal clothes' fits the context. Use consistent vocabulary; replace 'Rook' with 'clothes' and include the article before 'watch'.

× Yes, I have umm, gotta watch as a gift.

✓ Yes, I have got a watch as a gift.

Use the correct phrase 'have got' or 'got' to indicate possession; 'gotta' is informal and incorrect here. Also include the article 'a' before 'watch'. Maintain standard written forms in responses.

× Uh, when I was younger, my older brother gave me uh, watch as a present.

✓ When I was younger, my older brother gave me a watch as a present.

The noun 'watch' needs the indefinite article 'a' when countable and singular. Remove filler words for clarity. Past tense 'gave' is correct.

× So he said that umm, when he's, when he came this gift, he said that is.

✓ So he said that when he came with this gift, he would say something to me.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Came this gift' is incorrect; use 'came with this gift'. A reported speech construction is needed: 'he said that he would say...' or simply 'he gave it to me and said...'. Clarify tense and subject reference.

× Umm, this is because they want to express, umm, they want to express expensive something, uh, to uh, watch.

✓ This is because they want to express that they have expensive things, like an expensive watch.

Phrase 'express expensive something' is ungrammatical. Use 'express that they have expensive things' or 'show that they own expensive items'. Place modifiers correctly: 'an expensive watch' not 'watch expensive'.

× And then, uh, well, some another people said, uh, it is very.

✓ And then, well, some other people say it is very important.

Use 'some other people' not 'some another people'. 'Said' may be okay but present 'say' fits general opinion. Complete the sentence with an adjective like 'important' to be clear.

× Umm, it depends on the situation, but uh, I think it is very important to wear the watch.

✓ It depends on the situation, but I think it is very important to wear a watch.

Use 'a watch' rather than 'the watch' for general statements. Remove fillers and keep present simple 'is' which matches the question asking general importance.

× This is because it looks like former, and then I can express the former situation and then I think it's very consideration.

✓ This is because it looks formal, and I can present a more professional image; I think it is very thoughtful.

'Former' is the wrong word; 'formal' fits clothing/appearance. 'Express the former situation' is unclear—use 'present a more professional image'. 'Very consideration' is ungrammatical; use 'very thoughtful' or 'considerate' depending on meaning.