Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove repetition (e.g., avoid repeated filler words).

例: I don't usually wear a watch because I prefer checking the time on my smartphone. However, when I exercise or go running, I wear a fitness watch to track my heart rate and distance.

提案: Use accurate words and clear sentence structure. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific details about the gift and why you like it. Avoid pronunciation or word-choice errors and ensure subject-verb agreement.

例: Yes. A close friend gave me a beautiful watch for my 18th birthday, and I still wear it because of its classic design. It suits my style and adds a simple, professional touch to my office outfits.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons, using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases; choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "status", "functionality").

例: People wear expensive watches for different reasons. For example, business professionals buy luxury watches as a status symbol and to make a good impression, while athletes choose high-quality sports watches for their accuracy and useful features like GPS and heart-rate monitoring.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two concise reasons using linking words. Eliminate fillers and repetitions, and use precise vocabulary to explain when it matters and when it doesn't.

例: I think wearing a watch can be important in some situations but not always. For instance, it matters for businesspeople who want to project professionalism, while others prefer smartphones for convenience and don't need a watch.

× Well, actually I'm, I'm not, I'm not usually wear a watch because I prefer to check the time on my smartphone and for example, when I when I exercising, I usually wear my watch.

✓ Well, actually I'm not usually wearing a watch because I prefer to check the time on my smartphone, and, for example, when I am exercising I usually wear my watch.

The original uses 'usually wear' after a negative contraction awkwardly and repeats fragments. After auxiliary 'am' the progressive form requires verb + -ing (exercising). Use 'not usually wearing' or 'don't usually wear' for habitual actions; because 'I'm not usually wearing' fits present continuous nuance around habitual exception; 'when I am exercising' requires 'am' + -ing. Remove repetitions and add commas for clarity.

× Yes I have, my friend gave me a beau beautiful watch for my 18th birthday and I still wear it because I like its classic design.

✓ Yes, I have. My friend gave me a beautiful watch for my 18th birthday, and I still wear it because I like its classic design.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'Yes I have' with a past simple clause without clear separation. Add punctuation to separate answers and correct spelling 'beau beautiful' to 'beautiful'. Use past simple 'gave' for the past event and keep present 'I still wear' for current habit. Commas and periods clarify sentence boundaries.

× It's use my style and add a simple fashionable touch to my office.

✓ It suits my style and adds a simple fashionable touch to my outfit.

'It's use my style' is incorrect: 'suit' is the correct verb meaning 'match', and it must be conjugated to third person singular 'suits'. 'Add' must also be 'adds' for subject-verb agreement. 'Office' is an unlikely collocation; 'outfit' fits better. Pronoun 'It' as subject requires matching verbs in singular.

× Well, I think it depends on different situations. Like for some business people a lecturer watches a site simple, but for some, for some love sports people, sports people, a high quality watch is useful for them.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the situation. For some business people, a classic watch looks simple and professional, but for sports lovers a high-quality watch is useful.

Original is disfluent and contains unclear fragments ('a lecturer watches a site simple'). Simplify and restructure: use 'depends on the situation' (singular idiom), add commas, use 'for some business people' then a clear description 'a classic watch looks simple and professional'. Replace 'love sports people, sports people' with 'sports lovers'. Hyphenate 'high-quality'. Avoid redundant phrases like 'is useful for them' by saying 'is useful'.

× Well, I think I think it is maybe important, but it diff it depend on different situations because like uh, for example, for some business people, uh, luxury watches, uh, static sample umm, and they like high quality watch, but.

✓ Well, I think it may be important, but it depends on the situation. For example, some business people prefer luxury watches and like high-quality timepieces.

Remove repetition ('I think I think'), correct modal 'maybe' to 'may' for formality, use 'depends' for subject-verb agreement, and tidy filler words. 'Luxury watches, static sample' is unclear; interpret as 'prefer luxury watches'. Make 'high-quality' hyphenated and use plural 'timepieces' or 'watches' to match context. End with a complete sentence rather than 'but'.