Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (e.g., article use, plural forms, and sentence fragments).

例: No, I don't wear a watch. I usually check the time on my smartphone because it's portable and also combines functions like alarms and calendars, so it's more convenient than carrying a separate watch.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then add one clear reason with a linking word. Combine short fragments into full sentences and avoid repeating the same idea. Use proper tense (present perfect is fine).

例: No, I haven't. Although some friends have received watches from family, I never have because I find them less practical than my smartphone, which already handles timekeeping and scheduling.

提案: Clarify your main idea and give coherent reasons. Use linking words (for example, because or so) and avoid incorrect word choices. Explain two plausible reasons — status and reliability — with simple examples.

例: I think some people wear expensive watches mainly as a status symbol because luxury watches signal wealth and success. Also, they may trust high-end watches for craftsmanship and accuracy, so wearing one can boost confidence and professionalism.

提案: Answer directly, then give a clear, specific reason with an example. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: No, I don't think it's necessary to wear a watch because many devices, like smartphones, show the time and manage schedules. For example, my phone not only tells the time but also sets reminders and alarms, so a separate watch isn't essential for me.

× No, instead of a watch, I typically use smartphone to check the time because it's portable and smartphone has other features to do so it's more efficient than wearing a watch.

✓ No, instead of a watch, I typically use a smartphone to check the time because it is portable and has other features, so it is more efficient than wearing a watch.

Errors: missing article before 'smartphone' (article errors ID 22) and run-on structure with 'to do so' and missing subjects. Primary issue treated as present participle/present form and sentence structure. Suggestion: add the indefinite article 'a' before 'smartphone', replace 'it's' with 'it is' for clarity, remove 'to do so' and connect clauses with 'so' or 'therefore'. Use parallel verb forms: 'is portable and has other features, so it is more efficient...'. Note: This correction follows present-tense usage appropriate to the question.

× No, I haven't. I sometimes see other people who got a watch from their parents or friends, but I haven't because I don't find it particularly convenient for me.

✓ No, I haven't. I sometimes see other people who get watches from their parents or friends, but I haven't because I don't find them particularly convenient for me.

Original uses 'got' (past) inconsistently with habitual action 'sometimes see'; use simple present 'get' for habitual actions. Also plural agreement: 'a watch' vs 'watches' and 'it' -> 'them' to refer to 'watches' (pronoun agreement). Suggestion: use consistent tense for habitual statements and ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× Because smartphone is better. Because it has more features to do.

✓ Smartphones are better because they have more features.

These are sentence fragments and have number/verb agreement issues. Combine fragments into a full sentence. Use plural 'smartphones' or use 'a smartphone' with singular pronouns; here plural is natural. Replace 'to do' with a clear verb phrase 'have more features' to express capability.

× I think wearing brand watches makes make them productive and for poor for the day to start because wearing something special and wealthy makes you feel more special than usual.

✓ I think wearing branded watches can make people feel more confident and start the day better because wearing something special and expensive can make you feel more special than usual.

Multiple problems: 'brand watches' should be 'branded watches' (adjective form), 'makes make' is a duplication, 'for poor for the day to start' is ungrammatical and unclear. Reword to express intended meaning: use modal 'can' for possibility and correct adjective 'expensive' instead of 'wealthy' to describe watches. Also change 'them' to 'people' for clarity.

× No, I don't think so because what only tells us the time was multiple does do that and other things.

✓ No, I don't think so because many devices tell us the time and do other things.

Original has tense and word-order errors and incorrect vocabulary ('what only tells us the time was multiple does do that'). Use simple present 'tell' for general truths and 'many devices' as subject. Remove redundant or erroneous words and place verbs in correct order: 'tell us the time and do other things.'

× For example my smartphone can tells the time and manage my schedule in one device.

✓ For example, my smartphone can tell the time and manage my schedule in one device.

Verb agreement: after modal 'can' the base form 'tell' must be used, not 'tells'. Also add a comma after 'For example' for clarity. Ensure both verbs are parallel and in base form after the modal.