Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Correct grammar (e.g., use past tense consistently and articles) and avoid repetition. Use one linking phrase to connect your detail.

例: Yes. One advertisement that impressed me as a child was for an energy drink. It showed a funny summer scene where the sun was drawn drinking people’s energy through a straw, which made the ad memorable and humorous.

提案: Answer directly and reduce hesitations. Use plural/singular correctly and add a brief specific example to make it more informative. Use one linking word to list types.

例: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and buses. They are mostly government awareness campaigns, commercial product ads, and occasional NGO posters, for example public-health and safety messages.

提案: Give a concise opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘sale’ not ‘cell’). Avoid repeating the same point. Use a linking phrase like ‘however’ to contrast.

例: Not really. I usually find ads annoying; however, they can be useful when they announce sales or public-health programs, so I sometimes pay attention to those.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the types you prefer, then give one specific example and explain why. Use correct articles and plural forms, and avoid filler words.

例: I prefer public-awareness advertising, especially health campaigns. For instance, vaccination drives or discounts on essential goods help middle-class families and are therefore useful to me.

提案: Give a direct answer, correct prepositions and phrasing (e.g., ‘on my phone’), and add a brief specific example of ad types or frequency to improve content. Use a linking word for clarity.

例: Yes, I see many ads on my phone and computer, mostly for commercial products like apps or online stores, and occasionally government public-service announcements as well.

× Oh, I think there was this advertisement that has a nice impression on me when I was when I was a child.

✓ Oh, I think there was this advertisement that made a nice impression on me when I was a child.

The clause 'has a nice impression on me' incorrectly uses present tense with 'has' and the noun 'impression' instead of the verb 'made'. The context refers to a past event ('when I was a child'), so the correct phrasing is 'made a nice impression on me.' Use past tense verb 'made' (past participle used as simple past here) to match the time frame. Grammar problem type ID: 9

× It comes during the advertisement comes during the summers because it was a energy drink advertisement where the sun is sipping up all the energies using straw on your head.

✓ It used to come during the summers because it was an energy drink advertisement where the sun was shown sipping up all the energy with a straw on your head.

Multiple tense and article issues: 'comes' (present) conflicts with 'was' and the past context, so 'used to come' or 'came' fits better. 'a energy' should be 'an energy' because 'energy' begins with a vowel sound. 'all the energies' is unidiomatic; use 'all the energy.' Also adjust phrasing to passive/description 'was shown sipping' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So I love that advertisement.

✓ So I loved that advertisement.

The speaker refers to a past advertisement that made an impression when they were a child, so past tense 'loved' fits the context. This keeps tense consistent with previous sentences. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× It is mostly of government awareness advertisement or some uh, product advertisement, uh, or uh, some NGOs advertisement are there.

✓ Mostly there are government awareness advertisements, some product advertisements, or advertisements from NGOs.

Plural forms are needed for 'advertisements' because 'mostly' implies multiple instances. 'some NGOs advertisement' is ungrammatical; use 'advertisements from NGOs' or 'NGO advertisements.' Adjust word order to a natural English structure. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× Oh, not really. I don't like advertisement, but sometimes, uh, it is also helpful because they give you some ideas if there is some cell available or if there is a government awareness program that is going to be conducted soon.

✓ Oh, not really. I don't like advertisements, but sometimes they are helpful because they give you ideas about sales or if there is a government awareness program that will be conducted soon.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. 'They give you some ideas if there is some cell available' is unclear: likely intended 'sales' (discounts) rather than 'cell.' Also prefer 'will be conducted' for future events. Remove unnecessary 'some' before 'ideas.' Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I mostly prefer the advertisement that is for public awareness or sometime if it is a sale or something that will be very helpful for uh, a middle class family or about some vaccination program or health, uh, campaigns.

✓ I mostly prefer advertisements that are for public awareness, or sometimes ones about sales that would be helpful for middle-class families, or about vaccination programs or health campaigns.

Use plural 'advertisements' to talk generally. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes.' 'a middle class family' should be plural 'middle-class families' for general reference. 'Health campaigns' is the correct plural noun. Also adjust word order for clarity and natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Yes, I do see a lot of advertisements when I'm in phone or on my computer, like mostly of uh, product advertisements are there, the commercial products or sometimes the government advertisements are also there.

✓ Yes, I do see a lot of advertisements when I'm on my phone or on my computer; mostly product advertisements for commercial products, and sometimes government advertisements are also there.

Use the preposition 'on' for screens ('on my phone'), not 'in.' Simplify 'like mostly of uh, product advertisements are there' to 'mostly product advertisements.' Use consistent conjunctions and punctuation to improve clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11}]} characters: 0.00% continuous.