Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is a bit repetitive and has some grammar issues. Improve by giving one strong topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and prepositions (e.g. “on the wall” not “in the wall”) and avoid repeating phrases like “I like drawing” twice. Also vary vocabulary (e.g. “paint” / “sketch” / “decorate”).

例: I really enjoy drawing and painting. For example, I spend about two hours each day practicing different techniques, and I often use my paintings to decorate the walls of my room, which makes the space feel more personal.

提案: Your response answers the question but is long-winded and contains grammar and word-choice errors. Be concise: give a direct statement about liking galleries, then one reason and a recent example. Use correct verb forms (e.g. “I haven’t had time recently”) and smoother linking words (e.g. “however”, “because”, “for example”). Remove redundancies like repeating “go to the gallery.”

例: Yes, I enjoy visiting art galleries; however, I haven’t had much time recently because of work. When I do go, I like to spend an hour examining contemporary paintings to get inspiration for my own work.

提案: Good content and a relevant personal example, but reduce filler words (“uh”, “tuition” repeated) and improve phrasing (“my mom enrolled me in art classes” is better). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a concise supporting detail about past learning and current goals. Use linking words like “because” or “so that” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I definitely want to learn more about art because I love painting. For instance, my mother enrolled me in art classes when I was a child, and now I plan to take advanced workshops to improve my techniques.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes specific details, but reduce hesitations (“umm”) and correct word forms (e.g. “sketching” not “sketchings”). Combine past and present information more smoothly using linking words like “and” or “and still do” to maintain coherence. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I took many drawing and painting classes as a child, where I learned sketching and watercolour techniques. I still practice regularly and spend several hours each week painting because I really enjoy it.

× 'I always spend 2 hours every day on drawing, on painting, and I will always like to use my drawing to decorate my room in the wall.'

✓ 'I always spend two hours every day drawing and painting, and I always like to use my drawings to decorate the walls of my room.'

'Problems: redundant tense mixing (use of will with habitual action) and awkward phrasing. Use present simple for habitual actions (always spend, always like). Use plural drawings when referring to multiple works and say walls of my room rather than in the wall. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habits, use plural nouns when appropriate, and simplify prepositional phrases.'

× 'but recently I didn't have the time to go to the gallery in city 'cause I do have a lot of work to do'

✓ 'but recently I didn't have time to go to the galleries in the city because I had a lot of work to do'

'Problems: inconsistent tense within the clause (didn't have... because I do have). Use past tense consistently to refer to recent past events. Use article and plural: the city or in the city, and galleries if referring generally. Suggestion: match past tense verbs and use appropriate articles.'

× 'but I still appreciate to have the time spending in the art gallery to to have a look on the beautiful works.'

✓ 'but I still appreciate having time to spend in art galleries to have a look at the beautiful works.'

'Problems: incorrect verb pattern and prepositions: appreciate + -ing (appreciate having), time spending -> time to spend, look on -> look at, redundant to to. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns and prepositions: appreciate having time, spend time in galleries, look at works.'

× 'I will always like to use my drawing to decorate my room in the wall.'

✓ 'I will always like to use my drawings to decorate the walls of my room.'

'Problems: unnatural modal use (will always like) for general preference; will implies future rather than ongoing preference. If meaning future, this is acceptable but earlier suggested present simple is better for habit. Also corrected plural and prepositional phrase. Suggestion: use present simple for habits or keep will for future intent consistently.'

× 'When I was a little child, uh, my mom sent me to a lot of art tuition, uh, tuition classes to teach me how to draw.'

✓ 'When I was a child, my mom sent me to many art tuition classes to teach me how to draw.'

'Problems: awkward phrase a little child (use a child or little) and redundancy tuition, tuition classes is acceptable though many is better than a lot of. Suggestion: use concise phrasing: when I was a child, many art tuition classes.'

× 'I was sent to a lot of painting classes, including the sketchings, painting and drawing.'

✓ 'I was sent to many painting classes, including sketching, painting and drawing.'

'Problems: sketchings is incorrect plural; use uncountable or base form sketching. Use many instead of a lot of for formal correctness. Suggestion: list activities using base noun forms and use many for countable classes.'

× 'And also until now I still spend a lot of time on painting every week.'

✓ 'And even now I still spend a lot of time painting every week.'

'Problems: awkward time expression until now with present continuous implication; use even now or still now. 'Spend time on painting' is acceptable but 'spend time painting' is more natural. Suggestion: use natural adverbial placement and verb + -ing form for activities.'

× 'I still appreciate to have the time spending in the art gallery to to have a look on the beautiful works.'

✓ 'I still appreciate having time to spend in art galleries to have a look at the beautiful works.'

'Problems: appreciate takes an -ing form (appreciate having), and spend requires to spend or spending; choose appreciate having time. Also correct preposition look at. Suggestion: use correct verb + -ing patterns and prepositions.'

× 'I like to go to the gallery, absolutely, but recently I didn't have the time to go to the gallery in city 'cause I do have a lot of work to do, but I still appreciate to have the time spending in the art gallery to to have a look on the beautiful works.'

✓ 'I like going to galleries, but recently I didn't have time to go to the gallery in the city because I had a lot of work to do; however, I would still appreciate having time to spend in a gallery to look at the beautiful works.'

'Problems: repetitive 'the gallery' and inconsistent pronoun/reference to places; use galleries or the gallery in the city consistently. Also mixed tenses and verb patterns. Suggestion: avoid repetition, choose singular/plural consistently, and correct tense and verb patterns.'