Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and avoid redundancy (e.g., "since I was a kid" and "when I grow up" conflict).

例: Yes, I love drawing. I have enjoyed it since childhood, which led me to study design at university, and now I work as a designer. Drawing helps me solve visual problems at work and keeps me creatively motivated.

提案: Improve fluency by combining sentences and using correct grammar (articles, verb agreement). Add a linking word to explain the reason. Be specific about what inspires you in galleries.

例: Yes, I do. I usually visit galleries two or three times a month with friends because seeing different exhibitions gives me fresh ideas for my design projects and exposes me to new techniques and styles.

提案: Make the response clearer and correct verb forms. State your goal, give a concrete plan or example of what you want to learn, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I do. I plan to study communication design to deepen my knowledge of visual theory and typography, which will expand my technical skills and help me take on higher-level design roles in my career.

提案: Correct grammar and sentence structure. Start with a clear direct answer, then provide specific supporting details (where, who taught you, what you drew). Avoid unclear phrases and repetition.

例: Yes, I did. I took drawing classes at school and attended weekend lessons paid for by my parents. I enjoyed those sessions because I could experiment with different subjects and styles, guided by a teacher who encouraged creativity.

× Definitely, I enjoy drawing since I was a kid and I finally end up studying design when I grow up and also working in design right now.

✓ Definitely. I have enjoyed drawing since I was a kid, and I ended up studying design when I grew up and am working in design right now.

Multiple tense issues: 'enjoy drawing since I was a kid' needs present perfect 'have enjoyed' to connect past to present. 'I finally end up studying design when I grow up' mixes tenses and incorrect aspect; change to past simple 'ended up studying design when I grew up' because the action is completed. Combine clauses and use 'am working' for current continuous state. Use punctuation to separate ideas. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes I do. I go to gallery as a part of my hobby. I usually go there two or three times a month with my friends who also enjoy going to gallery, which give me a lot of inspiration for work.

✓ Yes I do. I go to the gallery as part of my hobby. I usually go there two or three times a month with my friends who also enjoy going to the gallery, which gives me a lot of inspiration for my work.

'Gallery' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific type of place generally visited. Also 'as a part of my hobby' is better as 'as part of my hobby'. Subject-verb agreement: 'which give' should be 'which gives' because the relative clause refers to the singular idea of visiting the gallery. Add 'my' before 'work' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× Yes, I really want to learn more about art. Actually I was planned to study more about communication design that can help further my knowledge so I can expand my skill and improve my career.

✓ Yes, I really want to learn more about art. Actually, I had planned to study more about communication design to further my knowledge so I could expand my skills and improve my career.

'I was planned' is incorrect passive use; use past perfect 'I had planned' to show a prior intention. 'That can help further my knowledge' is wordy; use 'to further my knowledge' (infinitive of purpose). 'Can' should be shifted to conditional past 'could' to match the past planning context. Use plural 'skills'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Guess I did I learned during in school when I was a child and I also learn outside of school which my parent paid for it and I really enjoy those weekend where I have to draw anything I want with T-shirt that that guide me.

✓ I guess I did. I learned during school when I was a child, and I also learned outside of school, which my parents paid for. I really enjoyed those weekends when I could draw anything I wanted, often with a T-shirt that had a guide printed on it.

The original sentence has multiple structure and tense errors. Add 'I guess I did' as a complete clause. 'Learned during in school' should be 'learned during school' or 'in school' and past tense 'learned'. 'I also learn' should be past 'learned'. 'Which my parent paid for it' is ungrammatical: use 'which my parents paid for' (no extra 'it', and plural 'parents'). 'Those weekend' needs plural 'weekends'. 'Where I have to draw' should be past 'when I could draw' to match past context. Clarify 'T-shirt that that guide me' to a plausible meaning: 'a T-shirt that had a guide printed on it'. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]}QUESTION_MAPPING_CHANGED_INVALID_JSON_ERROR<typename_continue_ALERT_INVALID_SIGNATURE_INVALID_JSON_ESCAPE_INVALID_UTF8_INVALID_JSON_VALIDATION_FAILEDน์