Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接和简洁，避免重复（如重复使用“actually”和“because”）。先用一句话直接回答问题，然后用一到两句具体说明原因或经历，使用连接词使句子更连贯。注意语序（如“how can I draw”应为“I don't know how to draw”）。

例: No, I don't really enjoy drawing. I took art classes in primary school, but I found drawing difficult and struggled with proportions and perspective. Because of that I rarely practice, so my skills didn't improve.

提案: 回答要先正面回应（Yes/No），然后给出具体理由和例子。避免词汇错误（如“will known”应为“well-known”，“obstructive”用词不当，改为“inspiring”或“absorbing”）。句子不要过长，保持清晰。

例: Yes, I do visit galleries sometimes because I enjoy seeing different styles, especially abstract art. I also like watching artists at work and getting inspiration, though I usually go just for enjoyment rather than study.

提案: 回答要更自然，说明原因时使用更流畅的结构，并给出具体细节（例如工作或学习占用时间）。避免重复短语（如两次“learn more”）。

例: Not really. Learning art properly would require regular classes and practice, and at the moment I don't have the free time because of my studies and part-time job.

提案: 合并碎片句，先回答然后补充具体细节。用准确表达描述学到的内容（例如“basic skills like drawing shapes, simple landscapes”），避免模糊或不自然的短语。

例: Yes, I did. I took art classes in primary school where we learned basic skills like drawing simple shapes, landscapes and shading. However, I found these exercises challenging and didn't continue practicing later on.

× Actually I've learned about drawing, so I have studied drawing classes when I was in primary school.

✓ Actually I learned about drawing, so I took drawing classes when I was in primary school.

句中使用了现在完成时（I've learned / have studied），但叙述的动作发生在过去的特定时间（在小学时），应使用一般过去时。建议把“have learned / have studied”改为“learned / took”以符合时间背景。

× But I think I'm not good at drawing because because I think it's really difficult for me.

✓ But I think I'm not good at drawing because it's really difficult for me.

句中重复使用“because because I think”造成结构冗余与语义重复。应去掉重复部分，保留一个“because”并去掉多余的“I think”以使句子流畅。

× So I don't know how can I draw in pictures.

✓ So I don't know how I can draw pictures.

在宾语从句中，间接疑问句应采用陈述语序（how I can），而不是直接疑问语序（how can I）。此外，“draw in pictures”用法不自然，改为“draw pictures”。

× Will I like to go to the gallery because I can see lots of abstract picture and also I can see will known people drawing pictures.

✓ I like to go to the gallery because I can see lots of abstract pictures and also see well-known people's drawings.

原句误用了疑问式“Will I like to go...”且“will known”拼写和用法错误。应改为陈述句“I like to go...”。另外“picture”应为复数“pictures”，“will known”应为“well-known”，“people drawing pictures”改为“people's drawings”更自然。

× I can see lots of abstract picture

✓ I can see lots of abstract pictures

“lots of”后接可数名词时应使用复数形式，故“picture”改为“pictures”。

× also I can see will known people drawing pictures.

✓ also I can see well-known people drawing pictures.

“will known”拼写和用法错误，应为形容词短语“well-known”修饰人。此处为形容词拼写错误导致意义不清。

× So I'm not good at drawing as I said.

✓ As I said, I'm not good at drawing.

原句语序虽不算严重错误，但把“as I said”前置更符合英语常用表达，使语气更自然。

× So I just go to there to watch this for fun.

✓ So I just go there to watch them for fun.

“go to there”是不正确的搭配，应为“go there”。“this”指代不清，改为“them”或具体名词“the artworks”更明确。

× I think it's really obstructive and absorbing for me.

✓ I think it's really interesting and absorbing for me.

“obstructive”意思是“妨碍的、阻碍的”，不符合语境。想表达“让我感兴趣”应用“interesting”。同时“absorbing”（吸引人的）可保留。

× No, I don't. As far as I know, if I want to learn more, learn more about art, so I need to have lessons to study this professional and basic knowledge and also I need to take more exercise after classes.

✓ No, I don't. If I wanted to learn more about art, I would need lessons to study professional and basic knowledge and also need to do more practice after classes.

原句中混合了时态和语气（现在时的“If I want”与陈述“so I need”），表达假设愿望时更常用与过去虚拟或条件语气。建议将条件句改为与现在事实相反的假设（If I wanted... I would...）或保持一般现在时统一时态。此外“take more exercise”在学习技能语境中更自然的说法是“do more practice”。

× Obviously I don't have any spare time to do these things, so I don't like it.

✓ Obviously I don't have any spare time to do these things, so I don't want to.

原句末尾“so I don't like it”语义上与前句不完全对应。若想表达没有时间因此不想学，应使用“don't want to”或“don't want to do that”。保持时态为现在时。

× When I was in primary school. I've learned about art classes, but I just learned basic knowledge is like how to join grass or sun or simple pictures.

✓ When I was in primary school, I learned about art in classes, but I just learned basic things like how to draw grass, the sun or simple pictures.

句首是过去时间状语（When I was in primary school），后续应使用一般过去时，不应用现在完成时（I've learned）。另外“learned basic knowledge is like how to join grass or sun”中词汇使用错误，改为“learned basic things like how to draw grass, the sun or simple pictures”。

× But I think I'm not good at these things, so I think it's difficult for me.

✓ But I think I'm not good at these things, so they are difficult for me.

原句重复使用“I think”显得冗余。将第二个从句改成“they are difficult for me”既避免重复又使句子结构更清晰。