Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Javobni aniqlik bilan qisqartiring va zamonlarni to‘g‘ri ishlating. Mavzuni aniqlab beruvchi boshlang‘ich jumla ayting, keyin alohida tafsilotlar bilan izohlang. Masalan, “loved” o‘rniga hozirgi zamonni ishlating (I love). So‘zlar va grammatikani to‘g‘ri qo‘llashga eʼtibor bering (bring it → take it, memorizing → memories, dread → draw).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy drawing because it helps me capture memories when I visit places like mountains or the beach. For example, I often take a sketchbook with me and draw the scenery, which helps me relax and remember the trip.

提案: Javobni aniq va grammatik jihatdan to‘g‘ri qiling. “Gallery” va “museum” farqini biling, noaniq so‘zlar (column?) va xatoliklarni tuzating. Bog‘lovchi so‘zlardan foydalaning (for example, because, so) va his-tuyg‘ularni aniq ifoda qiling.

例: Yes, I enjoy visiting art galleries because they are inspiring and entertaining. For example, when I see interesting paintings or sculptures I feel calm and relaxed, and sometimes I try to copy a piece in my sketchbook.

提案: Javobni sodda, aniq va grammatik jihatdan to‘g‘ri qiling. “Allowed to learn” noto‘g‘ri; o‘rniga “I want to learn more” yoki “I enjoy learning” deb ayting. Bog‘lovchi iboralarni ishlating (for example, I often, when I visit) va manbalarni aniq ko‘rsating (online, books, museums).

例: Yes, I want to learn more about art. I often search for information online and watch videos about artists and techniques, and when I visit museums I read the descriptions to understand the works better.

提案: O‘tmish zamonni to‘g‘ri ishlating va gapni mantiqan tuzing. “Allowed to drawing” noto‘g‘ri; o‘rniga “I used to draw” deyish kerak. Oilaviy faoliyatni aniq va qisqacha bayon qiling, keraksiz tafsilotlarni kamaytiring.

例: Yes, I used to draw when I was a child. My father and I often drew together, usually animals or family members, and those activities helped me develop my skills.

× Absolutely. I loved it because it's very interesting and when I go to some mountains or the beach I try to bring it because it's giving me good memorizing and when I dread something I just enjoy for myself.

✓ Absolutely. I love it because it's very interesting, and when I go to the mountains or the beach I try to bring my sketchbook because it helps me remember things, and when I draw something I just enjoy it for myself.

The student uses past tense 'loved' incorrectly when describing a current preference; use present simple 'love' for habits and likes. 'Some mountains' is unnatural; use plural with the definite article 'the mountains' when speaking generally. 'Bring it' is vague; 'bring my sketchbook' is clearer. 'It's giving me good memorizing' is incorrect; use 'it helps me remember things' (verb 'help' + base verb). 'When I dread something' is wrong word choice; 'draw' was intended. 'Enjoy for myself' should be 'enjoy it for myself' or simply 'enjoy it.' Suggestions: use consistent present tense for current habits, choose precise nouns, and use verbs with correct complements.

× Definitely, yes. I love to go into the gallery because it's a very interesting and very entertainment for me. When I watch some galleries, I can feel column and I can relaxing and sometimes I just draw like it.

✓ Definitely. I love going to galleries because they are very interesting and entertaining for me. When I look around a gallery, I feel calm and relaxed, and sometimes I just draw things I like.

'Love to go into the gallery' is acceptable but 'love going to galleries' is more natural. 'It's a very interesting and very entertainment' mixes adjective and noun incorrectly; use 'interesting and entertaining.' 'When I watch some galleries' should be 'When I look around a gallery' or 'visit galleries.' 'I can feel column' is incorrect word choice; 'calm' is intended. 'I can relaxing' is wrong form; use 'relaxed' or 'relax.' 'Sometimes I just draw like it' is ungrammatical; use 'draw things I like.' Suggestions: use correct adjective forms, avoid mixing noun/adjective incorrectly, and use verbs in appropriate forms.

× Yes, of course I allowed to learn about the art and most of the time I'll search some knowledge from my from the Internet about the art because it's very interesting. And when I go to the museums, I saw some galleries and I learn about it.

✓ Yes, of course. I am allowed to learn about art, and most of the time I search for information about art on the Internet because it's very interesting. When I go to museums, I see some galleries and I learn about them.

'I allowed to learn' is incorrect modal/auxiliary usage; use 'I am allowed to' if permission is meant, or more naturally 'I like to learn about art.' 'Learn about the art' should be 'learn about art' (no article). 'I'll search some knowledge from my from the Internet' is awkward; use 'I search for information on the Internet.' Tense inconsistency: 'When I go to the museums, I saw' mixes present and past; keep present simple 'I see' for habitual actions. 'I learn about it' should be 'I learn about them' or 'I learn about art.' Suggestions: use correct auxiliary verbs, remove unnecessary articles, use 'search for information,' and keep consistent tense for habitual actions.

× When I was young allowed to drawing and sometimes I just draw with my father because my mother and father I love driving and sometimes we draw about the some animals and or some seniors.

✓ When I was young, I was allowed to draw, and sometimes I just drew with my father because my parents loved drawing. Sometimes we drew animals or portraits of older people.

The original sentence omits the subject for 'allowed' and mixes verb forms. Use passive 'I was allowed to draw' if permission is meant. 'Sometimes I just draw with my father' should be past tense 'drew' to match 'When I was young.' 'My mother and father I love driving' is confused: intended 'my parents loved drawing' (not driving). 'We draw about the some animals and or some seniors' has article and preposition errors; use 'drew animals or portraits of older people.' Suggestions: include subjects for verbs, match past tense for past events, correct word choice (drawing vs driving), and use proper noun phrases.