Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition ("during the night, during my sleep") and finish your thought. Use linking words to connect reasons (for example, "because" and "so"). Also limit to 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g. "anxious" and "horror films").

例: Yes, I usually remember my dreams. However, they’re often nightmares, probably because I’m quite anxious and I watch a lot of horror films, so my mind tends to replay frightening scenes at night.

提案: Avoid repetition and split into two clear sentences: one about sharing your own dreams and one about interest in others'. Use linking words like "because" or "and" to show reason. Give a brief specific example to strengthen the point.

例: Yes, I share my dreams if they’re funny because I enjoy seeing people’s reactions. I’m also interested in other people’s dreams because, for example, a recurring dream about exams might reveal they’re stressed.

提案: Be direct and correct grammar (avoid phrases like "quietly agree" and questions mid-sentence). Use one clear topic sentence and one or two supporting reasons with linking words ("because", "for example"). Use precise terms such as "subconscious".

例: Yes, I believe dreams can have meaning because they often reflect our emotions and current life circumstances. For example, stressful dreams may indicate anxiety, while recurring places or people might show unresolved feelings.

提案: Avoid repetition and tighten phrasing. Start with a clear reply ("Not really"), then give a brief reason and one specific example. Use linking words like "because" and avoid repeating phrases ("my dream my dreams").

例: Not really, because most of my dreams are negative or frightening. For instance, I often dream about being chased, so I wouldn’t want those dreams to become reality.

× Most of the times I do remember the dreams that I have during the night, during my sleep.

✓ Most of the time I do remember the dreams that I have during the night, during my sleep.

Use 'most of the time' not 'most of the times'. 'Time' in this expression is uncountable; saying 'times' is incorrect. Improve by memorizing fixed expressions like 'most of the time'.

× Unfortunately, the majority of the time I have nightmares.

✓ Unfortunately, the majority of the time I have nightmares.

Sentence is correct; included to indicate no change needed. 'Majority of the time' is acceptable for uncountable 'time'.

× I also really enjoy to watch horror movies and dramatic stuff so I think that

✓ I also really enjoy watching horror movies and dramatic stuff, so I think that

After 'enjoy' use the -ing form (gerund), not the infinitive 'to watch'. Improve by practicing verbs followed by gerunds (enjoy, dislike, avoid).

× I do share dreams with others when I find I find them quite funny and silly so I like to see their reaction and I'm also interested in learning about someone else's dreams because I feel like I can discover their state of mind through their dreams.

✓ I do share dreams with others when I find them quite funny and silly, so I like to see their reactions. I'm also interested in learning about someone else's dreams because I feel I can discover their state of mind through them.

Repeated 'I find' is redundant (sentence structure issue). Also 'reaction' should be plural 'reactions' to match 'others'. Replace 'discover their state of mind through their dreams' with 'through them' to avoid repetition. Improve by reading sentences aloud to spot redundancies and matching singular/plural forms.

× Yes, I quietly agree on that.

✓ Yes, I quite agree with that.

Use 'quite' (not 'quietly') to intensify agreement; 'agree on' is incorrect here—use 'agree with'. 'Quietly' is an adverb meaning 'silently' and is wrong in this context. Improve by distinguishing adverbs of manner from adverb intensifiers and using correct prepositions with 'agree'.

× I do think they have a special meaning because I think most of the times they reflect how we are feeling and where are we living in that period?

✓ I do think they have a special meaning because I think most of the time they reflect how we are feeling and where we are living in that period.

Change 'most of the times' to 'most of the time' (fixed expression). Also correct question word order 'where are we living in that period?' to statement order 'where we are living in that period' because the sentence is a statement, not a question. Improve by checking whether a clause is a question or statement before ordering subject and verb.

× They can also reflect our psychological state, even though it can be quite sub conscious.

✓ They can also reflect our psychological state, even though it can be quite subconscious.

Use the single-word adjective 'subconscious' (no space). Also ensure pronoun agreement: 'they' and 'it' referents are unclear; better to say 'they can also reflect our psychological state, which can be quite subconscious' or 'which can be quite deep.' Improve by ensuring consistent references and using correct adjective forms.

× Not always because most of the times as I said before, my dreams are not very positive or happy.

✓ Not always, because most of the time, as I said before, my dreams are not very positive or happy.

Replace 'most of the times' with 'most of the time'. Add commas for clarity. 'Most of the time' is the correct uncountable expression.

× I find always myself dreaming about bad stuff and negative stuff.

✓ I always find myself dreaming about bad and negative things.

Word order: place 'always' before the verb phrase ('I always find myself...') rather than between 'find' and 'myself'. Also avoid repeating 'stuff'—use 'things' and avoid redundancy. Improve by learning correct adverb placement and avoiding repeated words.

× So I really don't want my dream my dreams to come true honestly.

✓ So I really don't want my dreams to come true, honestly.

Remove duplicated 'my dream my dreams' and use plural 'dreams' to match context. Add comma before 'honestly' for natural speech. Improve by proofreading to remove accidental repetitions.