Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更清晰和连贯。首先要直接回答问题，然后用1–2句具体说明梦的内容和原因，避免语法错误与多余填充词（如 uh）。注意时态和词类（例如："I dreamed of becoming a teacher" 或 "My childhood dream was to be a teacher"）。使用连接词（because, so）让句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I can remember them. When I was young, I dreamed of becoming a teacher because I loved helping classmates learn. That dream felt very important to me and shaped my long-term goals.

提案: 回答应直接回答问题并给出具体例子说明你如何分享或者对他人梦想感兴趣。减少重复和无意义的词。用一两句解释你分享的方式（talking, writing, planning）并举例说明效果。注意动词形式和名词搭配（例如 "share my dreams with others"）。

例: Yes, I often share my dreams with friends and family. For example, I discuss my plans to become a teacher with my parents and classmates so they can give advice and support, which helps me stay motivated.

提案: 表达含义时要更具体且条理清楚。先给出直接观点，然后用一两个具体原因支持。避免使用错误或不相关的词（如 "poverty", "sing"）。可以说梦代表目标、动力或内心愿望，并举例说明。

例: Yes, I believe dreams often have special meanings because they reflect our goals and values. For instance, dreaming about being a teacher showed me how important education and helping others are to me.

提案: 回答要简洁有力，先肯定地回答，然后说明你为实现梦想所做的具体努力或计划（如学习、实习、资格证书）。避免语法错误（例如时态、一致性）和模糊表述。

例: Definitely. I want to become a teacher, and I'm studying education at university and doing volunteer tutoring to gain experience. These steps bring me closer to making my dream come true.

× Yes, why was the young children?

✓ Yes, why were the young children?

句子主语为复数“the young children”，谓语应使用复数形式“were”。原句中使用了单数过去式“was”，导致主谓不一致。建议：复查主语是单数还是复数，选择相应的动词形式。

× I am a dream to be in a teacher and it's a very dreams and dramatic with my long life.

✓ My dream is to become a teacher, and it has been a big and important part of my life.

原句结构混乱，动词形式和名词使用不当：应使用名词短语“my dream”而非“I am a dream”；“to become a teacher”表示成为教师；“very dreams”不合语法，应改为“a big and important part”。建议：按英语习惯用主语+系动词+表语表达身份或梦想，使用“become”表示成为。

× So I think it's a very, uh, strong for me and it's uh, so big aims to me.

✓ So I think it's very important to me and it is a big goal for me.

原句中“strong”与“for me”搭配不自然，应使用“important”；“big aims”应为单数或不可数名词短语“a big goal”。建议：用固定搭配“important to somebody”和“a big goal for somebody”。

× Absolutely. I'm always talk about my dream with other because I'm a provide myself.

✓ Absolutely. I always talk about my dream with others because it gives me confidence.

原句中“I'm always talk”时态和语法错误，应为“I always talk”；“other”应为复数“others”；“I'm a provide myself”不合语法，推测想表达“给我自信”，可用“It gives me confidence”。建议：注意助动词和主语一致，使用正确的人称代词和固定表达。

× I think it's a, a remarkably a dream is to my, uh, life goal and, uh, it's very, uh, help helpful to my life.

✓ I think it's a remarkable dream and a life goal, and it's very helpful to me.

原句重复并错误使用形容词/副词：“remarkably a dream”应为“a remarkable dream”；“help helpful”是重复且多余，应为“helpful”；“to my life”用法不自然，改为“to me”。建议：避免重复形容词，确保形容词放在名词前并使用恰当的搭配。

× It's a great attitude to me.

✓ It gives me a great attitude.

原句用法不当，“a great attitude to me”不符合英语表达，应该说某物“gives someone an attitude”或“it makes me have a great attitude”。建议：改用能表达影响或效果的动词短语，如“gives me”或“makes me”。

× Yes, I think they have a very special means for me because I think the teacher is a very poverty and positive the life goal and I think it can take a very child or adults to learn something about when they don't sing.

✓ Yes, I think they have a very special meaning for me because being a teacher is a meaningful and positive life goal, and it can help children and adults learn even when they are not studying formally.

原句多处词语使用错误：“means”应为“meaning”；“the teacher is a very poverty and positive the life goal”词序和词选择错误，应表述为“being a teacher is meaningful and positive”；“take a very child or adults to learn something about when they don't sing”语义混乱，推测想说即使不正式学习人们也能学到东西，用“help children and adults learn even when they are not studying formally”。建议：简化句子结构，使用正确的词（meaning, meaningful, help）并注意单复数一致。

× Definitely, I am always want to be a true teacher and I think it's a very amazing and I'm I have a very skilled emotions to the dream, so I'm very happy when the dream was come true.

✓ Definitely, I always want to be a real teacher and I think it's amazing. I feel very emotional about the dream, so I will be very happy when the dream comes true.

原句时态和词形混用多处错误："I am always want"应为“I always want”或“I am always wanting”（但通常用simple present）；“a true teacher”更常用“a real teacher”；“I'm I have a very skilled emotions”语法混乱，应为“I feel very emotional about the dream”；“when the dream was come true”时态错误，应为“when the dream comes true”或“when the dream comes true in the future”。建议：使用正确的时态一致性，主句用一般现在表示愿望，条件句用一般现在谈未来结果；注意情感词汇的搭配，如“feel emotional”。}]}続きを読む PMID:874}{