Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较自然但存在以下问题：1) 有重复信息（“when I was a child”出现两次）；2) 句子衔接稍显混乱，时态不一致（“I still dreamed”应为现在完成或现在时）；3) 词汇和表达可以更具体（为什么觉得教师是dedicated及具体吸引点）。建议练习简洁开头句＋1-2句具体细节，注意时态一致，并用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: Yes, I can remember my childhood dreams. I wanted to become a teacher because I admired how teachers help students learn and grow. Even now I still hope to work in education, so I take courses to prepare for that career.

提案: 回答清楚但有口头禅（“you know”“umm”）和重复，细节可以更具体（谁给了什么建议，举例说明如何有帮助）。建议减少填充词，使用一两个具体例子说明朋友的建议如何改变了你的行动。

例: Yes, I often share my dreams with friends. For example, a friend suggested a useful online teaching course, so I signed up and improved my lesson-planning skills, which made me more confident about teaching.

提案: 回答有想法但表达含糊不清，语法错误（“represent”应为复数一致或改主语），结尾句不完整且细节不足。建议先给明确观点（Yes/No + 简短理由），然后用一到两个具体例子说明梦想如何反映价值观或目标，避免留下不完整句子。

例: Yes, I think dreams often reflect a person’s goals and values. For instance, my dream of becoming a teacher shows that I value helping others and education, which is why I focus on developing teaching skills.

提案: 回答积极但存在双重否定错误（“no one doesn't like it”）和表达不准确（“profession ability”应为“professional skills”）。细节可以更具体：说明做了哪些具体行动、有无时间安排或成果。建议使用明确的句子描述具体步骤和进展。

例: Yes, I definitely want to make my dream come true, and I am taking steps to achieve it. For example, I take online teaching courses twice a week and practise lesson planning and classroom activities to improve my professional skills.

× You know, I wanted to be a teacher when I was a child 'cause I think it's a dedicated career and it's great.

✓ You know, I wanted to be a teacher when I was a child because I thought it was a dedicated career and it was great.

句子时态混用。主句用了过去时（wanted, was a child），但后半句用了现在时（think, it's），应与过去时一致改为过去时（thought, it was）。此外，'cause 是口语缩写，正式写作用 because。建议：叙述过去的经历时，全句尽量使用过去时，保持时态一致。

× Even now I still dreamed about it.

✓ Even now I still dream about it.

原句使用了过去式 dreamed，与前面的 now 和 still 表示的现在状态不一致。应使用现在时（dream）。建议：表达现在仍然发生的动作用一般现在时或现在完成时（I still dream about it / I have still been dreaming about it）。

× Yeah, I will share my dreams with my friends.

✓ Yeah, I share my dreams with my friends.

在回答习惯性或常规动作时，英语通常用一般现在时而非将来时。句中表达的是习惯性行为（会与朋友分享），因此用 I share 更恰当。建议：谈论习惯或常规行为时用一般现在时。

× ...sometimes they will offer me some suggestions and umm, guidance that I can follow.

✓ ...sometimes they offer me suggestions and guidance that I can follow.

同样表示习惯性或经常发生的动作时，用一般现在时更自然。去掉 will 并删去冗余的 some（可保留或删去均可）。建议：若表达将来可能性或承诺才用 will，否则用一般现在时。

× Yeah, of course one person's dream represent one person's goal and umm, also their value is fantastic.

✓ Yeah, of course one person's dream represents that person's goal, and their values are connected to it.

主语 one person's dream 为单数，应使用第三人称单数动词 represents；此外，原句中 their value 是复数代词 their 与单数 value 不一致，改为 their values 或改用 that person's value。建议：单数主语搭配单数动词，代词与所指名词在人称和数上保持一致。

× Like I dream about teaching in the future. So umm, my goal is to serve for a school for some specific classmates and.

✓ For example, I dream of teaching in the future. My goal is to work at a school and teach certain groups of students.

原句结构不完整且用词不当：'serve for a school for some specific classmates and.' 句尾不完整，serve for 用法错误，应说 work at / teach at a school，'some specific classmates' 表达不清，应为 certain groups of students 或 specific students。建议：说清想表达的对象与行为，避免不完整句子并使用正确短语（work at/teach at）。

× Yes, of course, no one doesn't like it actually and I also make some effort to make it come true.

✓ Yes, of course—no one dislikes that, and I also make an effort to make it come true.

原句包含双重否定 no one doesn't like it，应改为 no one dislikes it。另：make some effort 常见但更自然是 make an effort。建议：避免不必要的双重否定，使用固定搭配（make an effort）。

× Like I would spend time to learn some teaching classes online and I also improve my profession ability.

✓ For example, I spend time taking online teaching courses and I also improve my professional abilities.

原句时态和动词搭配问题：would spend 暗示假设，不适用于陈述事实；'to learn some teaching classes online' 用法不当，应为 take online courses 或 attend online classes；'profession ability' 词序和词形错误，应为 professional ability/abilities。建议：陈述习惯性行动用一般现在时，使用常见搭配（take courses, improve professional skills/abilities）。