Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并使用清晰的主句，避免混淆词汇（如把“basketball”与“tennis”混合）。补充一到两句具体细节（例如何时开始练习、如何练习），并用连接词使句子连贯。注意句子数不超过五句，语法和时态保持一致。

例: Yes. As a child I always dreamed of playing in the NBA because it is the highest level of professional basketball. I started practicing seriously at age ten and trained with a local club every weekend to improve my shooting and dribbling.

提案: 回答需先直接回应问题，然后用一两句具体理由支持。避免重复（如“I'm a person, I'm a people person”），并使用连词（however, because）增加逻辑性。可以举例说明什么时候会分享或不分享。

例: I sometimes share my dreams with close friends, but I usually keep them to myself. Because everyone has different goals, I prefer to discuss plans only with people who support me and give constructive advice.

提案: 先给出明确立场（Yes/No），然后用一两句解释并举具体例子。注意句子结构和主谓一致，避免语法错误（e.g. 'dreams represent' 而非 'dreams represents'）。用连接词（but, however）衔接不同观点。

例: Yes, some people believe dreams predict future success, but I see them mainly as motivation. For example, dreaming of a career achievement can push someone to set goals and work harder every day.

提案: 回答要用现在时或将来时明确表达意愿（I want to / I try to），并说明具体困难和采取的行动。避免重复和混乱的短语（如 'I have no I have a bad but the talent'）。使用连词（because, so）使逻辑清晰。

例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true, but it is difficult because I lack natural talent. Therefore I focus on improving my skills through regular practice and cooperating closely with my teammates to get better results.

× Yeah, I'm a sportsman. So when I was a child, my dream was to play in NBA because that is the highest basketball tennis show. So I tried to practice my skills and.

✓ Yeah, I'm a sportsman. When I was a child, my dream was to play in the NBA because it is the highest level of basketball. So I tried to practice my skills.

句子结构混乱并含有词汇错误：原句中“play in NBA”前应加定冠词“the”；“highest basketball tennis show”是错误搭配，应改为“highest level of basketball”（最高篮球水平）。同时句子结尾不完整，“and”后面没有完整内容，需删除或补全。建议：注意句子连贯性，使用正确搭配（level of basketball），并避免用不相关的词如“tennis”。

× To be honest, I'm a person, I'm a people person, so sometimes I would just say with myself and encouraged with myself not to talk with other people because I think everyone's dreams are different.

✓ To be honest, I'm a people person, so sometimes I just talk to myself and encourage myself not to talk to other people because I think everyone's dreams are different.

代词和短语用法错误：原句中“say with myself”应为“talk to myself”；“encouraged with myself”应为“encourage myself”；“I'm a person, I'm a people person”重复赘余。建议：使用正确的反身代词结构“talk to/encourage myself”，避免不必要重复。

× Yeah, someone, somebody think that dreams represents to their successful when they got the goal, so means their success.

✓ Yeah, some people think that dreams represent their success when they achieve a goal, so they mean success to them.

量词和主谓一致问题：“someone/somebody think”应为“some people think”来表达泛指；“dreams represents”动词需与主语复数一致为“represent”；“represents to their successful”结构不正确，应为“represent their success”或“mean success to them”；“when they got the goal”时态和表达不当，改为“when they achieve a goal”。建议：注意主谓一致，使用正确动词搭配及更自然的表达。

× But to me, I think dreams it's just like a motivation that.

✓ But to me, I think dreams are just a motivation.

句子结构错误与主谓不一致：原句“You think dreams it's”混用了主语和代词，且“dreams”为复数应配复数谓语“are”；结尾“that”不必要且使句子不完整。建议：保持主语与谓语一致，避免多余代词和不完整从句。

× I tried to but that is hard because I have no I have a bad but the talent but I try to dig in my skills and cooperation with my teammates.

✓ I tried, but it was hard because I didn't have much talent. However, I tried to develop my skills and cooperate with my teammates.

时态和表达混乱：原句中时态混用（tried / is / have / try），且有词序和单词选择错误（“I have no I have a bad but the talent”无意义）。应将描述过去努力的部分用过去时（was, didn't have）或保持一致；描述持续努力可用过去或现在完成时，且“cooperation with my teammates”应改为动词短语“cooperate with my teammates”。建议：理清时间线，保持时态一致，使用简明正确的词组表达。