Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需更直接并结构清晰：开门见山给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持，注意时态和单复数，避免冗余和语法错误。可以用连接词（for example, later）使叙述更连贯。

例: When I was a child, I had two main dreams. At first I wanted to be a biologist because I loved studying animals and nature. A few years later I became fascinated by maps and the Earth's structure, so I decided I wanted to be a geologist instead.

提案: 回答要更简洁明确：先直接回答“Yes/No”，然后给出1–2个具体原因或例子。注意否定表达和代词用法，避免双重否定和语法混乱。

例: I generally don't share my dreams with others. I believe some dreams are personal and I prefer to work on them quietly; for example, I keep a private plan for improving my painting skills without telling many people.

提案: 回答需要更具体并使用连接词：先给出观点，然后解释为什么，最好举例说明。注意词形（encourage people to work hard）、避免重复短语。

例: Yes, I think dreams often have special meanings. For instance, a dream about success can motivate someone to set higher goals, so dreams can inspire people to work harder and stay focused on their ambitions.

提案: 先直接回答然后解释原因并提出计划或态度：避免绝对化（never）并修正语法（biologist, geology, I'll）。可以说出现实限制并给出可行的短期或长期步骤，显得更积极。

例: I still hope to make some of my dreams come true, even if not immediately. Currently I study accounting, but in my spare time I plan to take geology courses and visit field sites; if not now, I might pursue them more seriously after retirement.

× I had couple of dreams when I was a kid.

✓ I had a couple of dreams when I was a kid.

句中缺少不定冠词“a”。在英语中，短语“a couple of”表示“一些/两三个”，必须使用不定冠词“a”。建议记住固定搭配“a couple of + 可数名词复数”。

× I want to be a biologist because I'm realized those animals and a few years later I just fall in love with any maps.

✓ I wanted to be a biologist because I was fascinated by animals, and a few years later I fell in love with maps.

原句时态混乱并且词汇搭配错误："I'm realized" 不正确，应该用过去时“was fascinated”或“realized”，且“fascinated by animals”更自然；“a few years later I just fall”应为过去时“I fell”。此外“any maps”不合适，改为“maps”。建议按时间顺序使用一致时态（这里叙述过去经历用一般过去时）。

× So I want to be a geologist.

✓ So I wanted to be a geologist.

上下文在叙述过去的梦想，时态应与前句一致使用过去时（wanted）。保持时态一致能使表述更清楚。

× Well, I need to share my dreams to other nor interested in others dream because I think every dream should be known by themselves and just try their best to achieve so it's unnecessary to tell others.

✓ Well, I don't need to share my dreams with others nor am I interested in others' dreams, because I think everyone should know their own dreams and try their best to achieve them, so it's unnecessary to tell others.

原句有多处问题："share my dreams to other" 应为 "share with others"（动词share常用介词with）；"nor interested in others dream" 句子缺主语与助动词，且“others dream”应为所有格“others' dreams”；"known by themselves" 不自然，改为“everyone should know their own dreams”；代词与动词一致性也需调整。建议学习固定搭配share with，及所有格形式others'，并注意完整句子需主语和谓语。

× Well I think each dream has its special meanings because I think it encourage people to hard work to achieve their goals.

✓ Well, I think each dream has its special meaning because I think it encourages people to work hard to achieve their goals.

问题包括："meanings" 可用单数“meaning”更自然；主语是单数each dream，谓语应为第三人称单数“encourages”；短语"to hard work" 语序错误，应为“to work hard”。建议注意主语与动词的一致以及副词/动词固定搭配（work hard）。

× So I think it's it is the best meanings for each dreams.

✓ So I think that is the most important meaning of each dream.

原句冗余（"it's it is"）且结构和用词不当："best meanings" 与语境不符，改为“most important meaning”；"each dreams" 主谓数不一致，应为“each dream”。建议避免重复并确保主谓数一致，使用合适的词汇表达语义。

× Well I think my dreams are never come true because my major in university is accounting instead of biologists or geography.

✓ Well, I don't think my dreams will ever come true because my major at university is accounting instead of biology or geology.

原句时态和词形错误："my dreams are never come true" 不正确，应使用将来时或否定句“will ever come true”或“I don't think ... will ever come true”。"major in university" 常说法为"major at university"或"major in"后接专业词；"biologists or geography" 用词错误，biologists是人，geography是学科，应改为“biology or geology”。建议注意动词短语时态表达将来可能性，以及专业名称与身份词的区别。

× So maybe sometimes when I retired I gonna chase my dreams but it's about 40 years later.

✓ So maybe sometime after I retire I'll chase my dreams, but that will be about 40 years from now.

原句时态和口语缩写不规范："when I retired" 应为“when I retire/after I retire”（将来时间表达）；"I gonna" 为非标准口语，应改为“I will”或“I'll”；此外“sometime”比“sometimes”更合适表示将来某时。建议使用正确将来时表达（will/going to 的正确形式）并注意副词sometime与sometimes的区别。