Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、结构更清晰并避免语法错误。开头直接说“能记得”或“不能记得”，然后简短解释原因。注意时态一致，句子不宜过长，最多5句。可用更合适的词汇（e.g. save lives 而非 save others lives），并移除多余片段如“Who is really powerful and helpful”。

例: Yes, I can remember some of my childhood dreams. For example, I wanted to be a doctor because I admired how doctors help people and save lives. I also thought they were well-respected and earned a good living.

提案: 回答要更直接并避免重复（例如同时使用 maybe 和 nowadays）。先给出明确回答（Yes/No/Not really），然后补充具体细节，如谁知道、何时分享过、为什么现在不分享。使用连词使句子连贯。

例: Not really. A few close friends knew about my childhood dream to become a doctor, but I haven't talked about it recently because I no longer feel strongly about it.

提案: 需要更清晰地表达“梦想意义”的观点，避免混淆“dreams”与“ambitions”的词义。用一两句说明观点，再用具体例子或原因支持。注意句子简洁，逻辑连贯。

例: Yes, I believe dreams can be meaningful. For me, having a dream gave me motivation to face difficult challenges, for example studying hard to improve my chances of a better career.

提案: 回答含混且语法错误很多。先明确回答，然后解释原因，使用恰当词汇（e.g. ‘grow up’, ‘disillusioned’, ‘become a doctor’）。表达应具体，比如说明为什么不想实现（看到现实与理想差距、工作压力等）。保持句子简短且连贯。

例: Not really. As I grew up I became aware of the pressures and disappointments in some professions, and I worry that becoming a doctor might not meet my expectations or could be emotionally draining.

× Yes, I absolutely I wanted to be a doctor in the past because in my opinion the doctors can earn a lot of money and can save others lives. Who is really powerful and helpful.

✓ Yes, I absolutely wanted to be a doctor in the past because, in my opinion, doctors can earn a lot of money and can save other people's lives. They are really powerful and helpful.

问题类型：Subject-verb agreement / 复数与所有格使用错误（主谓一致与名词形式）。解释：原句中有多处问题：1) “I absolutely I wanted” 中重复出现主语，应去掉多余的“I”；2) “the doctors” 不需要定冠词“the”，用复数一般名词“doctors”；3) “others lives” 应为“other people's lives” 表示“他人的生命”，需要所有格结构；4) “Who is really powerful and helpful.” 用法不当，前文指代为复数，应使用复数代词并构成完整句子，例如“They are really powerful and helpful.” 建议：注意不要重复主语，判断名词是否需要冠词，用所有格表示“某人的……”并保持代词与先行词在数和人称上一致。

× Maybe I forgot about it, maybe some of my best friends know my dreams about it in the past, but up to now I haven't told it to others nowadays.

✓ Maybe I forgot about it. Maybe some of my best friends knew about my dreams in the past, but up to now I haven't told others about them.

问题类型：Incorrect use of pronouns（代词使用不当）及时态不一致。解释：1) “know my dreams about it in the past” 结构混乱，应为“knew about my dreams in the past”；2) “haven't told it to others nowadays” 中“it”指代不明，应使用复数“them”指代“dreams”；3) “up to now” 与“nowadays” 重复且混用，保留一种即可，且时态要与过去事实区分。建议：代词要与所指名词在人称数上一致；避免同时使用重复时间短语，确保时态一致（过去发生的用过去时，直到现在仍未告诉则用现在完成时）。

× Yes, I think so. In my opinion, the dream gave me some determination to do something that may be really hard for me or it's really difficult for me to cope with, but it gave me some effort.

✓ Yes, I think so. In my opinion, the dream gave me some determination to do something that might be really hard for me or very difficult for me to cope with, but it gave me encouragement.

问题类型：Present tense issue（时态与词汇选择）及词汇搭配不当。解释：1) 原句时态混乱，“may be” 与“it's really difficult” 混用，应统一表可能性可用“might be”；2) “gave me some effort” 用法错误，英语中人或事物“give effort” 不自然，应使用“gave me encouragement/determination” 等搭配更合适。建议：统一时态表达可能性（may/might/可能的时态要一致），使用自然搭配如“give someone encouragement/determination”。

× No, not really, because after I grow up nowadays I feel that when you see someone who's gotten waken gradually, that's really a upset thing for me if I being a doctor.

✓ No, not really, because as I grow up I feel that when you see someone who has gradually woken up, that's really an upsetting thing for me if I were a doctor.

问题类型：Future tense issue（时态与虚拟语气）及被动/过去分词使用错误。解释：1) “after I grow up nowadays” 语序与时间词混乱，应改为“As I grow up” 或“After I grow up”；2) “who's gotten waken gradually” 完全不正确，正确形式为“who has gradually woken up” （过去分词woken用于完成时）；3) “that's really a upset thing” 形容词形式错误，应为“an upsetting thing”；4) “if I being a doctor” 语法错误，表示与现在事实相反或假设应使用虚拟语气“If I were a doctor”。建议：注意完成时的过去分词形式（wake—woken），形容词与现在分词区别（upsetting 表示令人不安的），以及虚拟语气用法（If I were ...）。