Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构混乱，时态和语法有错误，表达重复且不够简洁。建议先用一句主题句直接回答问题，然后用1-2句具体细节补充（什么时候学，小学多久，为什么喜欢），注意时态一致和句子完整。可以练习将不完整短语改为完整句，并减少重复。

例: Yes, I can. When I was in primary school I dreamed of becoming a violinist because I learned the violin there for three years. I loved practicing pieces and performing at school concerts, which made me want to pursue music in the future.

提案: 回答中充满填充词和多处语法错误（例如时态、代词、动词形式），表达不连贯且有发音/拼写问题。建议先用一句话直接回答，然后用具体例子说明与谁分享、分享的频率和原因。减少“uh”等停顿，使用连接词如“because”或“so”。

例: Yes, I used to share my dreams with my friends when I was a child because we often talked about our future plans. For example, I told my best friend that I wanted to be a violinist since playing the violin made me very happy.

提案: 内容较好，有观点并给出例子，但存在用词错误（如“deserve all worries”）和小语法问题。建议用更精确的词汇表达（例如“deepest concerns”），并使用连接词使逻辑更紧凑。此外可再提供一两种梦的含义类型以丰富内容。

例: Yes, I believe dreams can carry special meanings. Often they reflect our daytime experiences and emotions, and sometimes they symbolise our deepest concerns. For example, when I am stressed about work I often dream about exams, which shows my anxiety about performance.

提案: 表达有逻辑但语法和句子连贯性欠佳（例如“to think about the dreams make me feel”）。建议先明确回答（yes/no/maybe），然后用一到两句具体说明原因和结果，注意主谓一致和动词形式。可以用连接词如“however”或“but”清晰对比。

例: Maybe not all of them, because some of my dreams are very ambitious. However, thinking about them motivates me; they give me energy and encourage me to work harder in my current job.

× Yes, I have remembered a dream of my primary school is I want to be a violinist in the future because I had.

✓ Yes, I remember a dream from primary school: I wanted to be a violinist in the future.

问题类型对应：6（现在时）和5（过去时）。原句混用了现在完成时（have remembered）、简单现在（is I want）和过去式（because I had），且语序混乱。应根据叙述的背景（回忆小时候的梦）使用过去时或简单现在表达常态回忆。建议：描述过去的想法或梦想时用过去时或用简单现在表习惯，比如“I remember”或“I wanted”。注意句子结构，使用冒号或从句分开说明。

× I had. Learned violin in my primary school and I often dreamed to be a violinist in my future.

✓ I learned the violin in primary school and I often dreamed of being a violinist in the future.

问题类型对应：8（动词+ -ing）和26（句子结构）。原句中“dreamed to be”是不正确的搭配，正确用法是“dream of doing”或“dreamed about doing”。此外“had. Learned”是断句和大小写错误。建议：用“learned the violin”表示学了小提琴，dream后接动名词短语“being a violinist/being one”。

× Yes, I had shared my dreams with my friends, uh, when I was uh, a little child because we often talk about our dreams for each other.

✓ Yes, I shared my dreams with my friends when I was a child because we often talked about our dreams to each other.

问题类型对应：5（过去时）和6（现在时）。原句使用了过去完成时“had shared”但没有必要，应该用简单过去“shared”。另外后半句时态不一致（we often talk -> talked）。建议：叙述过去经历时统一用过去时；“talk about/to each other”选择合适搭配并保证时态一致。

× And I told her I want to be willing to in the future because I like to play welling.

✓ And I told them I wanted to be a violinist in the future because I liked playing well.

问题类型对应：12（代词使用不当）和8（动名词）与13（形容词/副词）。原句中“her”可能不止一个朋友，应与前文“friends”一致用“them”；“I want to be willing to”不合语法，混淆了意愿表达；“play welling”是错误的词形，应该是“play well”或“playing well”。建议：代词与先行词保持一致，表达过去的愿望用过去时或根据上下文选择；动词“play”后可接副词“well”或动名词“playing”。

× It's make me feel happy.

✓ It made me feel happy.

问题类型对应：12（代词）与5（过去时）。原句“The contraction 'It's' + make”时态和主谓不一致。根据前句谈过去的经历，应使用过去时“made”。建议：主谓一致并使用正确时态；若指现在可用“it makes me feel happy”。

× Often dreams reflect our daytime experience and emotions, and they may symbolize our deepest deserve all worries.

✓ Often dreams reflect our daytime experiences and emotions, and they may symbolize our deepest worries.

问题类型对应：26（句子结构）和13（形容词/副词/词汇）。原句中“deserve all”是错误词序和用词，可能是想说“deepest worries”。建议：删除多余词，使用正确名词短语“deepest worries”；“experience”应用复数与“dreams”对应。

× For example, I sometimes dream about exams when I stress about work.

✓ For example, I sometimes dream about exams when I am stressed about work.

问题类型对应：6（现在时）和13（形容词使用）。原句“when I stress about work”用法不自然，通常用被动形容词“stressed”或短语“when I am stressed”。建议：使用“be + past participle”表达感到有压力：“I am stressed”或“I feel stressed”。

× Maybe I have some very, uh, huge dreams, so I don't think I can make that dream come true.

✓ Maybe I have some very big dreams, so I don't think I can make those dreams come true.

问题类型对应：4（情态动词）和1（单复数问题）。原句“huge”可接受但“that dream”与前面的“some...dreams”数不一致，应该使用复数“those dreams”。情态动词“can”用于能力判断可以保留。建议：保持数的一致性，使用“those”或“them”。

× But to think about the dreams make me feel energetic and I have encouraged me to do more things in my actual work.

✓ But thinking about the dreams makes me feel energetic and encourages me to do more things in my actual work.

问题类型对应：10（现在分词使用）和27（主谓一致）以及12（代词）。原句“It make me”时态主谓不一致；“I have encouraged me”错误地用了反身结构且时态不当。建议：用动名词“Thinking”作主语，谓语用单数“makes”；第二部分用主动结构“encourages me”或“has encouraged me”视上下文而定。