Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “most of the content” → “most of the details”).

例: Sometimes I can remember my dreams clearly, but usually I forget most of the details quickly. For example, I might recall the setting or a single scene for a few minutes after waking, but the rest fades within an hour.

提案: Answer directly, then provide a brief reason and an example. Improve grammar and coherence by using linking words (e.g., “because” → use with a concise clause) and plural/singular agreement (dreams).

例: Yes, I usually share the dreams I remember with my mother because she is supportive. For instance, last week I told her about a dream where I was lost in a city, and we discussed what it might mean.

提案: Be cautious with claims about scientists—use hedging language and clear reasoning. Start with a direct opinion, then briefly justify it with a specific reason and linking word. Correct grammar (“shows”→“show”, “might matter future”→“might matter in the future”).

例: I think dreams can have special meanings to some extent because research suggests they reflect our emotions and concerns. For example, stressful dreams might indicate unresolved anxiety in waking life.

提案: Give a clear yes/no or conditional response, then provide one specific example and use linking words for clarity. Fix grammar and word order (e.g., “I hope to become true” → “I hope they come true”).

例: It depends. If the dream is positive or reflects my goals, then yes, I would like it to come true; for example, a dream about succeeding in my career would motivate me to work towards it. However, if the dream involves harm or accidents, I would not want it to happen.

× It depends because sometimes I remember my dreams clearly but most of the time I forget that most of the content and they fade quickly so I can't recall much of the content.

✓ It depends, because sometimes I remember my dreams clearly, but most of the time I forget most of the content and the dreams fade quickly, so I can't recall much.

Original sentence has redundant phrase 'that most of the content' and awkward structure with run-on clauses. This is a sentence structure error (type 26). Improve by removing unnecessary words, adding commas, and reordering for clarity: 'forget most of the content,' 'the dreams fade quickly,' and combine with appropriate conjunctions.

× Yes, I usually share my dreams that I can recall with my mother, but I am not interested in other people's dream but mine because I heard that some of the dreams that I had might matter in the future.

✓ Yes, I usually share the dreams I can recall with my mother, but I am not interested in other people's dreams, only my own, because I heard that some of the dreams I have might matter in the future.

Multiple errors: incorrect preposition/possessive and plural forms (type 11 and 1) and awkward phrasing. 'Dreams that I can recall' is wordy—simplify to 'the dreams I can recall.' Use plural 'dreams' and possessive 'my own.' Change 'that I had might matter in the future' to 'I have might matter in the future' to match present relevance.

× I hope so because some scientists shows that some of the dreams that people have might matter future.

✓ I hope so, because some scientists show that some of the dreams people have might matter in the future.

Original uses 'scientists shows' which is subject-verb agreement error (type 27). 'Scientists' is plural, so the verb should be 'show.' Also missing preposition 'in' before 'the future' and redundant 'that' can be omitted for clarity.

× So I believe dreams have some special meaning.

✓ So I believe dreams have some special meanings.

This is a quantifier/adjective usage choice (type 13 and 14) though primarily number/agreement: 'special meaning' vs 'special meanings.' Using plural 'meanings' is more natural when referring to multiple possible interpretations; adjust to match general statement. Alternatively, 'a special meaning' would refer to a single meaning.

× It depends what kind of dream that I had but if I had good dreams or idealistic dream then I hope to be come true but if it was bad dream or causing accident then I hope it wouldn't come true.

✓ It depends on what kind of dream I have, but if I have a good or idealistic dream, I hope it will come true; if it is a bad dream that causes an accident, I hope it will not come true.

Multiple tense and structure problems (type 26 and 6/5). Original mixes past and conditional incorrectly and uses 'hope to be come true' which is ungrammatical. Correct by using consistent tense and proper verb forms: 'depends on,' 'I have,' 'I hope it will come true,' and 'hope it will not come true.' Also change 'causing accident' to 'that causes an accident' for clarity.