Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm rõ ý chính và thêm liên từ để mạch lạc. Tránh câu dài lủng củng và các lỗi như “become dreams”, “our train”, “want dream”. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao nhớ một số giấc mơ và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu. Ví dụ chỉnh sửa từng phần: (1) Nói trực tiếp bạn có nhớ hay không; (2) nêu lý do bạn nhớ một số giấc mơ (cảm xúc mạnh gây tỉnh giấc); (3) đưa ví dụ ngắn và kết luận.

例: I remember some dreams but not all of them. Usually I remember emotionally intense dreams because they wake me up, such as a dream about failing an important exam. I rarely recall ordinary dreams unless I wake up immediately after them.

提案: Cần sửa một vài lỗi từ vựng và diễn đạt (ví dụ “being just” không đúng). Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, giải thích lý do ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ để nối ý, và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về việc chia sẻ với bạn thân. Giữ 2–4 câu, dùng từ vựng phù hợp như “personal”, “open up”, “seek advice”.

例: I don't usually share my dreams with many people because they feel quite personal. However, I sometimes open up to a close friend when I need advice about big goals, and I also enjoy asking others about their dreams to learn from their experiences.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ nhưng cần hoàn thiện ngữ pháp, sắp xếp câu mạch lạc và dùng liên từ phù hợp. Tránh lặp từ và sửa cấu trúc như “help, meaning” thành câu rõ ràng. Nên có một câu chủ đề, một câu giải thích và một ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng từ như “reflect”, “anxiety”, “process” để chính xác hơn.

例: I think dreams can sometimes have special meanings because they often reflect our feelings and worries. Our brain processes daily events while we sleep, so stressful experiences can appear as dream themes. For instance, when I'm anxious about an exam I often dream about being late, which I interpret as a sign of anxiety.

提案: Ý trả lời tốt nhưng cần thay một vài từ không tự nhiên (“playground”) bằng từ phù hợp hơn như “motivation” hoặc “drive”. Giữ cấu trúc: câu chủ đề, lý do ngắn, ví dụ hành động cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc và tránh thừa từ. Giữ 2–3 câu.

例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because they give me motivation and energy to work hard. For example, to improve my English I study every evening and take online lessons to get better.

× Well I can remember some of my dreams but not all of them.

✓ Well, I can remember some of my dreams but not all of them.

Missing comma after introductory word 'Well'. Add a comma for correct punctuation and natural pause in spoken English.

× I usually become dreams that our train are emotional because they wake me up and for example I want dream about being nice for an important exam.

✓ I usually have dreams that are emotional because they wake me up; for example, I sometimes dream about doing well in an important exam.

Multiple issues: 'become dreams' is incorrect verb choice and should be 'have dreams' (sentence structure). 'our train' seems to be 'are' misused; correct is 'that are emotional' (relative clause). 'I want dream' is incorrect; use 'I sometimes dream about' or 'I dream about'. 'being nice for an important exam' is unclear; correct meaning likely 'doing well in an important exam'. Use semicolon or conjunction to link clauses and add commas after introductory phrases for clarity.

× I rarely remember normal dreams unless I wake up right after them.

✓ I rarely remember ordinary dreams unless I wake up immediately after them.

Word choice: 'normal' is acceptable but 'ordinary' is more natural here. 'Right after' is colloquial; 'immediately after' is clearer. Tense is fine.

× Well, I don't usually share my dreams with many people because they feel quite personal and I worry about being just.

✓ Well, I don't usually share my dreams with many people because they feel quite personal and I worry about being judged.

Incorrect phrase 'being just' is likely a typo for 'being judged'. Use correct past participle 'judged' after 'being'. Pronoun use otherwise fine.

× But I sometimes tell my close friend about big goals when I need advice and I like to ask others about their dreams to learn from them.

✓ But I sometimes tell my close friends about big goals when I need advice, and I like to ask others about their dreams to learn from them.

Singular/plural agreement: 'my close friend' should be 'my close friends' unless referring to one specific friend. Adding a comma before 'and' improves readability.

× Well, I think dreams can sometimes help, meaning I believe they often reflect our own feelings or worries because our brain processes things from the day and that shows up in dreams.

✓ Well, I think dreams can sometimes help; I believe they often reflect our own feelings or worries because our brain processes things from the day and those things show up in dreams.

Use of 'meaning' as a sentence connector is awkward; replace with a clearer clause. Also 'that shows up' should agree with plural 'things', so use 'those things show up'. Maintain present tense consistency.

× For example when I am stressed about exam and I often dream about being late, so I think it is a sign of my anxiety.

✓ For example, when I am stressed about an exam I often dream about being late, so I think it is a sign of my anxiety.

Missing article 'an' before 'exam' (article error). Add comma after introductory 'For example'. Tense is consistent; remove extraneous 'and'. Note: Article error corrected though primary issue is present tense/structure.

× Well, yes, I want to make my dreams come true because they give me a playground and energy to work hard.

✓ Well, yes, I want to make my dreams come true because they give me a sense of purpose and the energy to work hard.

'Playground' is incorrect metaphor here; 'a sense of purpose' is more appropriate. Add definite article 'the' before 'energy'. Present tense is correct.

× For example, I want to improve my English, so I study every evening and I take some online lessons to get better.

✓ For example, I want to improve my English, so I study every evening and take some online lessons to get better.

Parallel structure: remove the second 'I' for smoother, more natural sentence flow. Tense usage (present simple for habitual actions) is correct.