Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, ngắn gọn và rõ ràng; tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không hợp ngữ cảnh. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (‘Not really, I rarely remember my dreams.’). (2) Giải thích ngắn gọn bằng một hoặc hai câu hỗ trợ với liên từ phù hợp (e.g., ‘However, if I wake up suddenly, I sometimes recall fragments, but the details usually fade.’). (3) Tránh từ sai như ‘1 river late’ và dùng từ chính xác. (4) Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp như ‘fragments’, ‘vivid’, ‘fade’.

例: Not really — I rarely remember my dreams. However, if I wake up suddenly, I sometimes recall fragments or a vivid image, but the details usually fade quickly.

提案: Cần trả lời đúng câu hỏi và giữ mạch chủ đề (chia sẻ giấc mơ hoặc quan tâm tới giấc mơ của người khác). Hiện tại câu trả lời lạc đề, có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ sai (ví dụ ‘sell my trips’, ‘trimmed about’). Hãy: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp (‘Yes, I do’ hoặc ‘No, I don’t’). (2) Cho lý do ngắn gọn và ví dụ cụ thể liên quan đến giấc mơ. (3) Dùng liên từ để liên kết ý. (4) Sử dụng động từ chính xác như ‘share’ hoặc ‘talk about’.

例: Yes, I often share my dreams with close friends because they find them interesting. For example, last week I told a friend about a strange dream I had, and we discussed possible meanings, which was fun and reassuring.

提案: Câu trả lời trực tiếp tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp ý. Cần: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (‘No, I don’t think so.’). (2) Giải thích ngắn gọn với lý do cụ thể và ví dụ (‘Most of my dreams are vague and I can’t remember details.’). (3) Dùng liên từ để làm mạch văn trôi chảy (‘because’, ‘so’). (4) Tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng chính xác (‘significant’, ‘vague’, ‘recall’).

例: No, I don't think dreams have special meanings for me because most of my dreams are vague and I rarely remember details. Therefore, they don't influence my daily life.

提案: Ý tốt nhưng diễn đạt lộn xộn và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy: (1) Trả lời khẳng định ngắn gọn (‘Yes, I definitely do.’). (2) Liệt kê mục tiêu cụ thể bằng cấu trúc rõ ràng và dùng liên từ (‘for example’, ‘such as’, ‘and’). (3) Sử dụng thì phù hợp và từ chính xác (‘become a flight attendant’, ‘buy a motorcycle’, ‘have a laptop for university’). (4) Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, tránh lặp.

例: Yes, I definitely do. For example, I want to become a flight attendant, buy a big motorcycle, and get a laptop when I start university. I am working hard now to achieve these goals.

× Actually I rarely remember my dreams, but when I suddenly wake up I still remember 1 river late, but most of the time the details fade quickly out of my head.

✓ Actually I rarely remember my dreams, but when I suddenly wake up I still remember one or two details, but most of the time the details fade quickly from my head.

The original sentence has incorrect wording and a number written as '1 river late' which is nonsensical. 'Rarely remember' is fine (present tense habitual). Use 'one or two details' to express small amount. Use 'fade quickly from my head' rather than 'out of my head' for natural English. Also remove redundant commas and ensure parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, I usually sell my trips with my friends.

✓ Yes, I usually share my experiences about trips with my friends.

The verb 'sell' is incorrect collocation here; 'share' is appropriate for talking about telling friends about experiences. Also 'my trips' could be 'experiences about trips' or 'my trips' with context. Present habitual 'usually share' is correct. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Take a sample for last day I already trimmed about.

✓ For example, yesterday I already told them about it.

The original is ungrammatical and uses wrong verbs ('trimmed'). Use 'for example' to introduce an example and 'yesterday I already told them about it' for clarity. Maintain past reference 'yesterday' with past tense 'told'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I have a high score speaking in IELTS and I already told my friends about that and she's like encourage me a lot and I was very happy about that.

✓ I got a high speaking score in IELTS and I already told my friends about that and they encouraged me a lot, so I was very happy.

Multiple issues: 'have a high score speaking' is awkward — use 'got a high speaking score' (past event). 'She's like encourage me' mixes pronouns and verb forms; use 'they encouraged me' (past tense) or 'she encouraged me' with correct verb form. Combine clauses for coherence and use past tense consistently. Grammar problem type ID:2

× No I think dreams don't have many special meanings about because looking back our most of my dreams I don't have any like big memory about my dream as well.

✓ No, I don't think dreams have many special meanings because when I look back at most of my dreams I don't have strong memories of them.

Use 'I don't think' and 'have many special meanings' without 'about.' Use 'look back at' with preposition 'at.' 'Our most of my dreams' is incorrect; use 'most of my dreams.' Use 'strong memories of them' instead of 'big memory about my dream.' Grammar problem type ID:11

× So I think dreams don't have many special meaning for me.

✓ So I think dreams don't have much special meaning for me.

'Many' is used with count nouns; 'meaning' is uncountable here, so use 'much special meaning.' Maintain negative contraction consistently. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, definitely yes. I want. I only want to make my dreams come to such as my trip about to be being a flight attendant on my trip about to have a big motorbike, as well as my dream about to have a laptop when I go to the university as well.

✓ Yes, definitely. I want to make my dreams come true, such as becoming a flight attendant, owning a big motorbike, and having a laptop when I go to university.

Use the idiom 'come true' not 'come to.' Replace awkward phrases 'be being' with the appropriate gerund/infinitive 'becoming.' Use parallel structure for list items ('becoming,' 'owning,' 'having'). Omit redundant words like 'about' and extra 'as well.' Grammar problem type ID:26

× And I think I would make my dreams come too.

✓ And I think I will make my dreams come true too.

Use 'will' for a future intention rather than 'would' which is conditional. Use the fixed phrase 'come true.' Grammar problem type ID:7