Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır ancak gereksiz tekrarlar var ("personally" iki kez, "because" tekrarları). Cümle yapısını sadeleştirip, bağlaçlar kullanarak daha akıcı ve mantıklı bir yapı kurabilirsiniz. Ayrıca bir örnek veya kısa açıklama ekleyerek cevabı zenginleştirin (ne sıklıkta, nasıl bir karışıklık oluyor?).

例: Yes, I can usually remember my dreams clearly when I wake up because they are very vivid. For example, last week I dreamed that I was late for an exam and felt anxious for several minutes after waking, which sometimes makes it hard to tell dream from reality.

提案: Cevap anlaşılır ama dilbilgisi hataları ve uzun, tekrarlı ifadeler mevcut ("other time", "it's can be"). Cümleleri net parçalara ayırın ve bağlaçlarla mantığı gösterin. Ayrıca bir kısa örnek vererek açıklamayı güçlendirin.

例: It depends. If the dream is entertaining, I usually tell my best friend about it, but otherwise I keep it to myself because my dreams can be complex and hard to explain. For instance, I once had a dream blending school and childhood home scenes, which was difficult to describe.

提案: Genel olarak anlam açık fakat cümle akışı biraz tekrarlı ve bazı ifadeler dilbilgisi açısından hatalı ("warn us something about we can't see ourselves"). Daha doğru bağlaç ve yapı kullanarak fikirlerinizi örneklerle destekleyin. "Sometimes" ile başlıyorsanız bir durum örneği verin.

例: I think dreams can sometimes have special meanings. For example, they may reflect our worries or hopes by processing the day's events, and as a spiritual person I also feel some dreams warn me about issues I haven't noticed consciously.

提案: Cevap net ve ilişkilendirilebilir fakat birkaç dilbilgisi hatası var ("dreams" vs "my dream", "law informations"). Ayrıca "small steps" örneğini daha spesifik yaparak inandırıcılığı artırın: hangi adımlar atıyorsunuz?

例: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because they give me direction and motivation. For example, I plan to apply to law school, study for the entrance exams, and gain volunteer experience in legal clinics as small steps toward practicing law.

× Yes, I personally can remember my dreams very clearly when I wake up because I personally see vivid dreams very often and it can be a little tricky for me because I can mix my reality often because of it.

✓ Yes, I can remember my dreams very clearly when I wake up because I often have vivid dreams, and it can be a little tricky for me because they often mix with my reality.

The sentence contains several present tense and style issues: remove redundant 'personally', use 'have vivid dreams' instead of 'see vivid dreams' for natural English, and ensure consistent plural reference ('they' for dreams) instead of 'it'. Also 'mix my reality' is corrected to 'mix with my reality'. Use 'often' before the verb for natural adverb placement.

× Well it depends, if it's a fun dream I usually tell my best friend about it, but other time I don't really share with anyone because it's can be a little complicated for them to understand what I see because I see very complicated dreams sometimes.

✓ Well, it depends. If it's a fun dream, I usually tell my best friend about it, but other times I don't really share with anyone because it can be a little complicated for them to understand what I dream about since my dreams are sometimes very complicated.

Problems: missing comma after 'Well', run-on sentence, 'other time' should be 'other times', 'it's can be' incorrect modal structure—use 'it can be', 'what I see' is better as 'what I dream about', and clarify 'see very complicated dreams' to 'my dreams are sometimes very complicated'. Also fix punctuation and sentence boundaries.

× Well, I think dreams sometimes have special meanings. I believe they can reflect our worries or hopes because they might process daily events at night. And I'm a spiritual person and I believe dreams can warn us something about we can't see ourselves.

✓ Well, I think dreams sometimes have special meanings. I believe they can reflect our worries or hopes because they might process daily events at night. I'm a spiritual person, and I believe dreams can warn us about things we cannot see ourselves.

Issues: 'warn us something about we can't see ourselves' is ungrammatical. Use 'warn us about things' and 'we cannot see' (avoid contraction in formal correction). 'And' at sentence start combined with comma improves flow. 'Might process' is awkward but acceptable; kept for meaning.

× Well, yes, I do want to make my dream come true because they give me direction and motivation.

✓ Well, yes, I do want to make my dreams come true because they give me direction and motivation.

Mismatch between singular 'my dream' and plural pronoun 'they'. Use plural 'dreams' to match 'they give' or change pronoun to 'it gives'. Here plural fits context.

× For example, I want to go to the law school and practice law informations. So I try to take small steps to reach that goal.

✓ For example, I want to go to law school and practice law. So I try to take small steps to reach that goal.

Errors: 'the law school' is usually 'law school' when speaking generally; 'practice law informations' is incorrect—'information' is uncountable and not used with 'practice'; correct phrase is 'practice law'. Removed redundant article and corrected noun usage.