Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện rõ ràng và mạch lạc: Trả lời trực tiếp vào câu hỏi bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, tránh từ thừa và lặp từ (ví dụ “exciting” lặp). Sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc hoàn chỉnh (Ví dụ: “I remember some dreams. One of the most exciting is…”). Thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể có liên quan (ví dụ nơi trong Việt Nam hoặc món đồ sang trọng) và dùng liên từ (such as, then) để liên kết ý.

例: I remember some dreams. One of the most exciting is that I return to Vietnam and go shopping in Hanoi’s Old Quarter; I buy a few luxury items, such as a silk dress and a watch. Then I meet old friends and we have dinner together.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp và diễn đạt tự nhiên: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No). Giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và cho ví dụ cụ thể (thỉnh thoảng chia sẻ với ai và tại sao). Tránh lỗi cấu trúc như “could others” hoặc “very interested”. Dùng liên từ như “but” hoặc “however”.

例: No, I usually keep my dreams private because they are personal. However, sometimes I tell my mother about funny dreams because she enjoys them, and my father often laughs when I describe strange details.

提案: Cải thiện rõ ràng ý tưởng và sửa từ vựng: sửa lỗi từ (rooms → dreams) và dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc: nêu quan điểm ngắn rồi giải thích với ví dụ cụ thể (khi căng thẳng tôi mơ thấy gì; khi vui tôi mơ thấy gì). Tránh lặp từ (dangerous dangerous) và hoàn thành câu. Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (reflects, stress, anxious, peaceful).

例: Yes, I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our state of mind. For example, when I am stressed I sometimes dream about danger or falling, but when I feel relaxed I dream about pleasant places or meeting friends.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp và sắp xếp ý rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (“Yes, I do”) rồi nêu lý do ngắn gọn và một ví dụ thực tế về cách làm cho giấc mơ thành hiện thực (lập kế hoạch, tiết kiệm, học hành). Tránh lặp từ và sửa cấu trúc như “make it is really in daylight”.

例: Yes, I do want to make some of my dreams come true because they make me happy. For example, if I dream of traveling to Europe, I plan and save money so I can visit those countries next year.

× Dears, I remember some dream, uh, one of them most exciting exciting dreams is as I dream about, I will have to blend Vietnam.

✓ Dear, I remember some dreams. One of the most exciting ones is that I dreamt about returning to Vietnam.

The sentence has multiple pronoun and noun number errors. 'Dears' is inappropriate; use 'Dear' rarely needed—better to omit greeting. 'some dream' should be plural 'some dreams' (singular and plural issue). 'one of them most exciting exciting dreams' needs a clear noun phrase: 'one of the most exciting ones'. 'I dream about, I will have to blend Vietnam' is ungrammatical: use past simple 'I dreamt' for a past dream and express content clearly: 'dreamt about returning to Vietnam'. Suggestion: keep number agreement between nouns and pronouns, use past tense for remembered dreams, and simplify redundant words. Note: this correction addresses pronoun/noun usage and number; other issues were not changed if outside the specified list.

× After that I go to shopping and buy many luxury items.

✓ After that I went shopping and bought many luxury items.

Use correct preposition and tense for actions in the past: 'go to shopping' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'go shopping' or 'went shopping'. Also because the speaker recalls past dreams, past tense 'went' and 'bought' are appropriate. Suggestion: use verb + shopping without 'to' and match verb tense to context. Note: this targets preposition use and tense consistency.

× No, I don't say my dreams could others because I think my dream is private, I don't want to share with anyone.

✓ No, I don't tell others about my dreams because I think my dreams are private; I don't want to share them with anyone.

Incorrect verb and pronoun use: 'say my dreams could others' is ungrammatical. Use verb 'tell' with indirect object 'others' and preposition 'about' for topic. 'my dream is private' should match number with 'dreams' and use plural 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also refer back to 'dreams' with pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: use 'tell someone about something' and keep number agreement between subject and verb/pronoun.

× Uh so sometime I will talk my dream with my mom and because it's very interested and it seems so funny for my dad.

✓ Sometimes I talk about my dreams with my mom because she is very interested, and they seem funny to my dad.

Multiple pronoun and verb-preposition issues: use 'talk about' not 'talk my dream'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'I will talk' is unnecessary future—use simple present 'I talk' for habitual action. 'because it's very interested' should describe the person: 'she is very interested'. 'it seems so funny for my dad' should be 'they seem funny to my dad' matching plural 'dreams' and correct preposition 'to'. Suggestion: use 'talk about', correct adverb form 'sometimes', and ensure pronouns and verbs agree with the intended subject.

× Yes, I think rooms have special meaning because it reflects our state of mind.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have special meanings because they reflect our state of mind.

Typo and pronoun agreement: 'rooms' should be 'dreams'. 'special meaning' can be plural 'special meanings' matching general statement. 'it reflects' should be 'they reflect' to agree with plural 'dreams'. Suggestion: check for typos and ensure subject-pronoun agreement in number.

× Uh, sometime I dream about the dangerous dangerous dream bigger when I'm stressed, I'm unhappy and comfortable and another when I am happy, I dream about the.

✓ Sometimes I have more intense or frightening dreams when I'm stressed or unhappy, and different dreams when I am happy.

Several problems: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb form). Repetition 'dangerous dangerous' is redundant. 'dream bigger' is unclear; use 'more intense' or 'frightening'. Parallel structure needed for contrasting clauses: 'when I'm stressed or unhappy' and 'when I am happy'. The trailing fragment 'I dream about the.' is incomplete—complete the idea or omit. Suggestion: use correct adverb forms, avoid unnecessary repetition, use comparative/adverbial modifiers properly, and ensure complete clause structure.

× Yes, I want to make some my dreams come true because it is a good dream and dream and some and some dream is that make me feel happy and I want to make it is really in daylight.

✓ Yes, I want to make some of my dreams come true because they are good dreams and some make me feel happy, and I want to make them real in daytime.

Problems include missing 'of' after 'some', incorrect pronoun and verb agreement: use 'some of my dreams' and plural verbs 'they are'/'make'. 'come true' is correct but needs plural subject. 'make it is really in daylight' is ungrammatical: use 'make them real in daytime' or 'in real life'. Suggestion: include 'of' after 'some', ensure plural agreement, and use idiomatic phrase 'make dreams come true' or 'make them real in real life'.