Dreams— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, direct topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on clarity, grammar, and coherence: avoid fragmented sentences and unclear references. For example, state whether you can usually remember dreams, mention a typical type of dream or one memorable dream, and explain briefly why you remember it.

例: Yes, I can often remember my dreams. For instance, I frequently dream about dancing because I learned ballet when I was a child, and those vivid memories make the dream stick in my mind.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific reason and a short example using linking words. Avoid trailing fragments and include a complete reason for sharing dreams. Mention who you share with and why their reactions matter.

例: Yes, I often share my dreams with my parents and close friends because they know me well and can help me interpret them. For example, my mother listens and sometimes suggests what a dream might mean, which I find comforting.

提案: Be decisive and explain your view with a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words (because, however, for example) to connect your idea and explanation. Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences.

例: I think some dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our emotions or worries. For example, when I dream about failing an exam, it usually shows that I am anxious about a real test.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your goal, then provide specific reasons and use linking words to connect them. Explain why that career appeals to you and what steps you might take, avoiding hesitations and fragmented thoughts.

例: Yes, I want to make my dream come true and become an animator because I love drawing and telling stories visually. Therefore, I am studying animation techniques and building a portfolio so I can work in the film or gaming industry.

× I remember my dream was buried and so because I learned ballet when I was young, but growing up, I understand I. Be.

✓ I remember a dream about being buried because I learned ballet when I was young, but as I grew up, I understood more about it.

Original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect word order and missing verbs (Grammar Problem Type 26). Fix by making a clear subject and verb structure: 'I remember a dream about being buried' and use past tense consistently 'as I grew up, I understood'. Avoid isolated words like 'Be.' and reorder clauses for clarity.

× Yes, of course I have shared my dreams with my parents and my friends because. My mother said to me, if you want, if you.

✓ Yes, of course I have shared my dreams with my parents and my friends because my mother said, 'If you want, go for it.'

The original contains sentence fragments and incomplete reported speech (Grammar Problem Type 26). Combine clauses into one complete sentence and supply the missing content of the mother's remark. Use reported speech or quote the short direct phrase to make the meaning clear.

× Yes, of course, my images it's dream, which means speak, so I don't. It's not easy to say.

✓ Yes, of course; images in dreams can have meanings, so I don't find it easy to explain.

Original has incorrect clause linking and fragments (Grammar Problem Type 26). 'my images it's dream' is ungrammatical; rephrase as 'images in dreams can have meanings'. Complete the thought 'so I don't find it easy to explain' to resolve the fragment 'so I don't.'

× Yes, of course I want to be artist, especially animator because. Uh, you want to have. I want to make money.

✓ Yes, of course I want to be an artist, especially an animator, because I want to make money.

Errors include missing articles and sentence fragments (Grammar Problem Types 22 and 26). Add the indefinite article 'an' before 'artist' and 'animator' and combine the fragments into one complete sentence that explains the reason. Remove filler fragments like 'Uh, you want to have.' which are incomplete and unclear.