Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and coherence: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and frequency), then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Correct vocabulary and avoid unclear phrases. Keep it to 2–4 sentences. For example, say how often (daily/rarely) and specific occasions when you use a mirror.

例: Yes, I do look at myself in the mirror sometimes, but not very often. I usually use a mirror in the morning to check my hair and apply perfume before leaving the house. Apart from those moments, I rarely spend time looking at myself.

提案: Provide a direct, structured reply: answer the question briefly (Yes/No), then give specific details about what type/sizes you bought and why. Avoid unclear words and irrelevant repetition. Use linking words for clarity.

例: Yes, I have bought mirrors. I usually buy small, handheld or compact mirrors to keep in my bag because they are convenient for quick touch-ups before work.

提案: Make your answer direct and concise: start with a clear statement (No, I don't), then give 1–2 specific reasons. Avoid confusing or contradictory phrases and check grammar (subject-verb agreement). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: No, I don't usually take a mirror with me because I do minimal grooming in the morning. Besides, I prefer to rely on quick checks and I find a compact mirror unnecessary for my routine.

提案: Answer directly and give specific reasons and effects: say yes/no then explain how mirrors affect the room (make it look bigger, reflect light) and where you would place them. Keep language simple and coherent, avoid vague phrases.

例: Yes, I would use mirrors to decorate my room because they make a space look larger and brighter. For instance, I would place a large mirror opposite a window to reflect natural light and create a sense of openness.

× So I always use mirror when I want a camphom shower when I just apply some perfumes or laser loss in my body, but apart from that now, I don't like to see myself in the mirror.

✓ So I always use a mirror when I want a quick shower or when I just apply some perfume or remove hair from my body, but apart from that, I don't like to see myself in the mirror.

The sentence omits the indefinite article before 'mirror' and has several word choice errors. Use 'a mirror' (article error). 'Quick' likely fits 'camphom'; 'perfume' is uncountable singular; 'remove hair' or 'hair removal' is clearer than 'laser loss'. Also add commas to separate clauses and improve clarity.

× Of course yes very small onions have different size of mirror so it has a small onion to your face when you when you prepare yourself for work in the morning that's it.

✓ Of course, yes. Very small ones have different sizes of mirrors, so it has a small mirror for your face when you prepare yourself for work in the morning.

The speaker used 'onions' instead of 'ones' and omitted articles and plural agreement. Use 'very small ones' and 'mirrors' (plural) and 'a small mirror' (article). Also 'for your face' clarifies purpose. Punctuation splits run-on sentence.

× So I think if I go to shower and come back to just small things I trust myself with my excuse of how I do make myself in the morning rather than using a mirror.

✓ So I think if I go to take a shower and come back to do just small things, I trust myself to make myself up in the morning rather than use a mirror.

The verb phrases are awkward and missing correct infinitives and prepositions. Use 'go to take a shower' or simply 'take a shower'. 'Come back to do just small things' is clearer. Use 'trust myself to make myself up' or 'trust myself to do my makeup' and parallel structure 'rather than use a mirror' (not 'using').

× Actually they never because I don't do a lot of a lot of lesser makeup of those kind of things in the morning or whatever.

✓ Actually, I never do, because I don't do a lot of makeup or those kinds of things in the morning.

The original has incorrect subject 'they' and missing verb. Replace with 'I never do' and remove repetition 'a lot of a lot'. Use 'makeup' and 'those kinds of things' for correct plural and article usage.

× Maybe there should be something funny because like when you have mirror every corner of your room you can see it yourself I think that should be very good thing to do because when you see yourself malas either side of of your home that should be yeah a very interesting thing to do.

✓ Maybe it would be fun, because if you have mirrors in every corner of your room you can see yourself; I think that would be a good idea and very interesting to have mirrors on either side of your home.

The sentence is a run-on with incorrect word choices ('malas') and missing articles. Rephrase for clarity: use 'it would be fun', 'mirrors in every corner', 'either side', and proper punctuation to separate ideas.