Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor phrasing issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "presentable and comfy" is slightly informal and repetitive).

例: Not really. I only check the mirror briefly in the morning and before leaving for school to make sure my hair and clothes look neat. For example, I usually take a quick look to adjust my collar or hair so I appear tidy.

提案: Correct vocabulary and clarify the object name ("platypus reformer" seems incorrect). Give a concise topic sentence (yes/no), then specific reason with linking word. Avoid unnecessary details and ensure accurate words.

例: No, I haven't bought a mirror yet, but I plan to. I want one because I use a Pilates reformer at home, and a mirror helps me check my posture to avoid injury while exercising.

提案: Fix grammar and repetition. Use one clear topic sentence and then one or two specific supporting reasons connected with linking words. Avoid redundancy like "rare I rarely" and "check my appearance" repeated.

例: No, I don't carry a mirror. Since I rarely wear makeup and I don't have a compact mirror, I usually use restroom mirrors if I need to adjust my hair or clothes.

提案: Be concise and correct word choice ("Decker" likely incorrect—use "decor" or "furniture"). Provide a clear direct answer then one specific reason with linking words and an example of style choice.

例: Yes, I would. I'm currently searching for a decorative mirror because a stylish frame can make my room feel bigger and complement the rest of my decor; for instance, I prefer a thin black frame to match my furniture.

× Usually I only check my appearance when I wake up or when I'm getting dressed for school because I want to make sure I look presentable and comfy.

✓ Usually I only check my appearance when I wake up or when I get dressed for school because I want to make sure I look presentable and comfortable.

Use simple present 'get dressed' to match habitual action rather than present continuous 'I'm getting dressed'. Also replace informal 'comfy' with the adjective 'comfortable' for standard grammar and register.

× No, I haven't bought 1 yet but I'm looking for a mirror because I have a platypus reformer at home.

✓ No, I haven't bought one yet but I'm looking for a mirror because I have a Pilates reformer at home.

Replace numeral '1' with the word 'one'. Also 'platypus reformer' appears to be a typo; likely 'Pilates reformer' is intended. Past participle 'bought' is correctly used with present perfect 'haven't bought', so only the typo and numeral needed correction.

× If my alignment is wrong it could cause injury, so a mirror helps me to correct my form.

✓ If my alignment is wrong, it could cause an injury, so a mirror helps me correct my form.

Add a comma after the conditional clause. 'Could cause injury' is acceptable, but adding the article 'an' before 'injury' is more natural here. Remove the infinitive 'to' before 'correct' after 'helps' because 'help' can be followed by the bare infinitive or a to-infinitive; bare infinitive is more concise: 'helps me correct my form.'

× No, I usually don't carry a mirror because I don't wear a makeup so rare I rarely need to check my appearance.

✓ No, I usually don't carry a mirror because I don't wear makeup, so I rarely need to check my appearance.

Remove the article 'a' before 'makeup' because 'makeup' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. The original sentence also contained the redundant phrase 'so rare'; remove it and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so'.

× Also, I don't own a compact mirror to carry around and I prefer to use a restroom mirror if I ever need to check my appearance.

✓ Also, I don't own a compact mirror to carry around, and I prefer to use a restroom mirror if I need to check my appearance.

Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses. 'If I ever need' is acceptable but 'if I need' is more concise; both are grammatically correct.

× I'm actually looking for a mirror at the moment, so I do sometimes use mirrors to decorate my room.

✓ I'm actually looking for a mirror at the moment, so I sometimes use mirrors to decorate my room.

Place the adverb 'sometimes' in the more natural position after the subject and before the verb: 'I sometimes use'. 'Do sometimes use' is emphatic but unnecessary here.

× I care about the style and frame because a well designed mirror can make the space look larger and match the rest of my Decker.

✓ I care about the style and frame because a well-designed mirror can make the space look larger and match the rest of my decor.

Compound adjective 'well-designed' should be hyphenated before a noun. 'Decker' appears to be a misspelling; the correct word is 'decor'. Adjust spelling accordingly.