Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct small grammar issues (e.g., “on a daily basis,” “formal,” remove duplicate words).

例: Yes, I do. I check my appearance in the mirror every morning to make sure I look neat and professional, because I believe first impressions affect my reputation. For example, I always adjust my hair and clothes before leaving the house.

提案: Answer directly and use clear vocabulary. Replace incorrect words (murals -> mirrors) and avoid filler phrases. Give a concise reason and a brief example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

例: No, I haven't bought a mirror yet because my family usually buys them for me. Also, I find choosing the right size and style time-consuming, so I prefer accepting one from relatives when they redecorate.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain when and why you carry a mirror. Use correct phrases (bring a mirror, on a daily basis) and reduce vague words. Include one specific example of an occasion.

例: Not usually. I only carry a small mirror on formal occasions, such as job interviews or weddings, so I can quickly touch up my makeup or hair and feel more confident. On a normal day I leave it at home.

提案: Give a direct answer and two clear reasons using linking words. Correct word choice and grammar (definitely not; mirrors; Vietnamese belief). Be specific about cultural belief and room size. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I wouldn't. My room is quite small, so adding a large mirror would make it feel cramped. Moreover, in Vietnamese culture some people believe mirrors can bring bad luck or attract spirits at night, so I avoid them for cultural reasons.

× I always look at myself in the mirror on daily basis.

✓ I always look at myself in the mirror on a daily basis.

Missing article 'a' before 'daily basis'. Use 'on a daily basis' to indicate a habitual action. Suggestion: add 'a' for correct idiomatic expression.

× I need to make sure that I look great and in in and formal in any circumstances so that my reputation will not be damaged.

✓ I need to make sure that I look great and informal in any circumstance so that my reputation is not damaged.

Repeated word 'in' and wrong adjective 'in and formal'. 'Informal' is likely intended; 'in any circumstances' should be singular 'in any circumstance' or 'in any situation'. Also use present simple 'is not damaged' for general truth. Suggestion: remove duplication, choose correct adjective, and use singular or 'in any situation'.

× Uh, not yet. I haven't bought any murals in my life and I often receive murals from my parents or my friends instead of buying it by on my own because it's kinda took me a lot of time and I do not have that, uh, in-depth knowledge about the reflecting things at all.

✓ Uh, not yet. I haven't bought any mirrors in my life and I often receive mirrors from my parents or my friends instead of buying them on my own because it kind of takes a lot of time and I do not have in-depth knowledge about reflective things.

Multiple issues: 'murals' is wrong word (use 'mirrors'); pronoun agreement 'it' -> 'them' for plural; 'kinda took me a lot of time' mixes tenses — use present 'takes' for habitual situation; 'in-depth' should directly modify 'knowledge'; 'reflecting things' is awkward — 'reflective things' or 'how mirrors work'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'mirrors', match pronouns to plural, keep tense consistent, and use clearer vocabulary.

× Not really, but it kind of depends on the circumstances. Like in some formal occasions I have to bring murals with myself so that I can make sure I look great and confident.

✓ Not really, but it kind of depends on the circumstances. In some formal occasions I have to bring mirrors with me so that I can make sure I look great and confident.

Incorrect phrase 'bring murals with myself' — use 'bring mirrors with me'. 'With myself' is not idiomatic; use object pronoun 'me'. Also correct 'murals' to 'mirrors'. Suggestion: use correct object pronoun and noun.

× But in contrast in slight some daily basis I do not really carry murals with myself.

✓ But on most days I do not usually carry mirrors with me.

Phrase 'in contrast in slight some daily basis' is ungrammatical. Use 'on most days' or 'in daily life'. 'Do not really' -> 'do not usually' is more natural. Replace 'murals' with 'mirrors' and 'with myself' with 'with me'. Suggestion: simplify to natural adverbial phrases and correct pronoun/noun.

× Definitely note my room is not that so spacious for me to bringing in anything else Besides, in our culture, uh, decorating murals in our room can represent bad luck and if we look at yourself in the mirrors in the evening in Vietnamese, we can encounter some spiritual events.

✓ Definitely not, my room is not spacious enough for me to bring anything else. Besides, in our culture decorating mirrors in a room can represent bad luck, and if we look at ourselves in mirrors in the evening in Vietnam, we might encounter some spiritual events.

Multiple problems: 'note' should be 'not'; word order 'not that so spacious' -> 'not spacious enough'; 'for me to bringing' -> 'for me to bring' (infinitive form). 'decorating murals in our room' -> 'decorating mirrors in a room' (correct noun and article); 'look at yourself' wrong pronoun -> 'look at ourselves' to match speaker; 'in the mirrors' -> 'in mirrors' or 'in the mirror'; 'in Vietnamese' likely intended 'in Vietnam'; modal 'might' fits possibility. Suggestion: correct word choice, pronouns, verb forms, and articles; use 'might' for possibility.