Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid contradictions. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like looking in the mirror, then add 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Correct common errors (e.g., 'cleaned' → 'clean', 'without looking myself' is unclear). Keep under five sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I check myself in the mirror every morning to make sure I look neat and confident. For example, I fix my hair and check my clothes before leaving the house, which helps me feel prepared for the day.

提案: Answer directly and avoid mispronounced or incorrect words ('murals' → 'mirrors'). Give a short reason and a specific future plan. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' correctly. Keep it within three sentences.

例: No, I haven't bought a mirror before. However, I might buy one in the future to decorate my room or to give as a gift to a friend because mirrors can make a room look brighter.

提案: Avoid absolute statements that seem unrealistic; be specific about what you carry (e.g., a compact mirror). Correct grammar ('with myself' → 'with me', 'whenever I going go out' → 'when I go out'). Give a brief reason using a linking phrase like 'because' or 'so that'.

例: I usually carry a small compact mirror with me when I go out because I like to check my appearance occasionally so I look presentable and confident.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give two clear, specific reasons using linking words such as 'because' and 'also'. Use correct vocabulary ('mirror' not 'mural'), avoid colloquial fillers ('kinda', 'like'), and check grammar ('not that spacious').

例: No, I wouldn't. My room is quite small, so a large mirror would make it feel cramped, and also in my culture some people believe looking in a mirror at night brings bad luck, so I prefer not to use one for decoration.

× Yes, and I often look at myself in the mirror on daily basis just to make sure that I look confident and cleaned.

✓ Yes, I often look at myself in the mirror on a daily basis just to make sure that I look confident and clean.

The sentence has a redundancy 'and' and incorrect adjective 'cleaned'. Use present simple for habitual action: 'I often look'. Add article 'a' before 'daily basis'. Use adjective 'clean' (not 'cleaned') to describe appearance. Remove unnecessary 'and' for clarity.

× And I do this like every day and without looking myself at the mirror.

✓ I do this every day and I cannot go outside without looking at myself in the mirror.

The original phrase 'without looking myself at the mirror' misorders pronoun and preposition. Use correct structure 'looking at myself'. Also clarify meaning: add 'cannot' to express inability and keep present simple for habitual action.

× I couldn't like go outside my house.

✓ I cannot go outside my house.

The sentence mixes past 'couldn't' with present habitual context and includes filler 'like'. Use present modal 'cannot' to match ongoing habit. Remove 'like' which is informal and unnecessary.

× No I haven't bought any murals in my life, but in the future I could definitely try purchasing some murals just to give him give them as a gift or to decorate my rooms.

✓ No, I have never bought any mirrors in my life, but in the future I could definitely try purchasing some mirrors to give them as a gift or to decorate my rooms.

Use present perfect 'have never bought' instead of 'haven't bought any' for clarity and correct plural 'mirrors' (not 'murals' which is wrong word). Remove duplicated words 'give him give'. 'Could' is acceptable for future possibility; keep consistency. Also 'any' optional after 'bought' but 'never' is clearer.

× No I haven't bought any murals in my life, but in the future I could definitely try purchasing some murals just to give him give them as a gift or to decorate my rooms.

✓ No, I have never bought any mirrors in my life, but in the future I could definitely try purchasing some mirrors to give them as gifts or to decorate my rooms.

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect and likely a typo. Use 'them' to refer to 'mirrors' (plural). Also use 'gifts' plural to match 'mirrors' potentially multiple items.

× Definitely yes. I always take a mural with myself whenever I going go out because I need to make sure that I look great and confident so that my reputation will not be damaged.

✓ Definitely yes. I always take a mirror with me whenever I go out because I need to make sure that I look great and confident so that my reputation will not be damaged.

Use correct noun 'mirror' (not 'mural') and correct collocation 'take a mirror with me' (not 'with myself'). Use present simple 'I go out' not 'I going go out'. Keep present simple for habitual action.

× ...to make sure that I look great and confident so that my reputation will not be damaged.

✓ ...to make sure that I look great and confident so that my reputation is not damaged.

Use present simple 'is not damaged' to describe a general truth rather than future 'will not be damaged'. Both are possible, but present simple fits habitual context better.

× Definitely not because my room is not that so spacious to cater for a mural and sometimes in our culture murals kinda represent like a bad luck whenever we look at ourselves in the mirror in the night and it's kinda a bad symbol.

✓ Definitely not, because my room is not spacious enough to accommodate a mirror, and in our culture mirrors sometimes represent bad luck when we look at ourselves in the mirror at night; it is considered an unfortunate symbol.

Use 'spacious enough' and 'accommodate a mirror' for correct collocation. Replace informal 'kinda' and 'like' with formal vocabulary. Use 'at night' not 'in the night'. Use consistent noun 'mirror' not 'mural'. Also restructure sentence for clarity and formality.