Teacher— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the teacher and their role, then give 2–3 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'a job application class', 'one person', 'professional advice') and avoid repetitions. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my job-application instructor. He spent his own spare time revising every student's CV and gave useful professional advice, which helped many of us get interviews.

提案: Give a direct answer then briefly explain with a specific reason and use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'because'). Fix tense and word order ('I visited them once after I started high school') and avoid filler sounds like 'uh'. Keep to two or three sentences.

例: No, not really. I visited my primary school teachers once after I started high school, but I should visit them more because they helped me a lot and I appreciate their support.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating the main way the teacher helped (e.g., improved confidence). Then add a specific example and use linking words like 'for example' or 'so'. Correct vocabulary (use 'pronunciation' instead of 'pronouns' if you mean sounds) and finish the sentence coherently. Limit to three sentences.

例: He mainly helped me build confidence in English. For example, he corrected my pronunciation and grammar and practiced presentations with me, so I could speak more clearly in class.

提案: Answer directly and give a concise, specific reason. Use correct phrasing ('I don't have enough patience to help students who make many mistakes') and avoid stuttering. One or two sentences are enough.

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher because I don't think I have enough patience to help students who make frequent mistakes.

× Yes, I have a favorite teacher who taught me a job application classes.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher who taught me job application classes.

The preposition 'a' before the plural noun 'classes' is incorrect. Remove the article or change to singular: either 'a job application class' or 'job application classes'. Use plural without 'a' when referring generally to multiple classes.

× I think he is 1 parted because he spent his own spare time to revise CV for every student and he he would give a give some suggestions about professional. Wars.

✓ I think he is very dedicated because he spent his spare time revising CVs for every student and he would give some professional suggestions.

Multiple issues: '1 parted' is incorrect adjective choice—use 'very dedicated'. 'Spent his own spare time to revise' should be 'spent his spare time revising' (use gerund after 'spend time'). 'revise CV' requires plural 'CVs' when referring to each student. 'give a give some suggestions about professional. Wars.' contains duplication and wrong noun order; use 'give some professional suggestions'. Clean up redundant words and incorrect word order.

× I only visited them once, uh, after I entered the enter the high school, but I think I should visit them more times because they help, helped me a lot and I appreciate for that.

✓ I only visited them once after I entered high school, but I think I should visit them more because they helped me a lot and I appreciate that.

Use 'high school' without the definite article when speaking generally. Remove duplicated 'enter the'. Use past tense 'helped' to match 'visited' and 'entered'. 'Visit them more times' is awkward; use 'visit them more'. 'Appreciate for that' is incorrect collocation; use 'appreciate that' or 'am grateful for that'.

× I would say is, uh, it's about confidence because I really worried about my, uh, my English, especially the pronouns and, and the grammar, uh, for example, during the presentation. I I couldn't speak too much because I am.

✓ I would say it's about confidence because I was really worried about my English, especially my pronunciation and grammar. For example, during presentations I couldn't speak much because I was nervous.

Sentence fragments and tense/person inconsistency: 'I would say is, uh, it's' is redundant—use 'I would say it's'. 'Worried' should be past tense 'was' to match context. 'Pronouns' likely intended 'pronunciation'. 'During the presentation. I I couldn't' is fragmented; combine and use plural 'presentations' for general experience. 'Because I am.' is an incomplete clause; complete it as 'because I was nervous' to explain inability to speak.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher because I don't think I have enough patience to help students who hi who have seen mistakes.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher because I don't think I have enough patience to help students who have made mistakes.

The phrase 'who hi who have seen mistakes' is incorrect. Use 'who have made mistakes' to describe students who make errors. Also ensure subject-verb agreement remains correct with 'students who have made' (plural subjects with plural verb form 'have').