Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I do), then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / I like them because). Avoid repetition and grammatical errors by using correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement.

例: Yes, I do. I like perfume because it gives me a pleasant fragrance and boosts my confidence. For example, I often wear floral scents when I go out with friends because they are light and refreshing.

提案: Answer directly and explain frequency with clear linking words (usually, sometimes, every day). Give one specific detail about when or why you use perfume. Correct common grammar mistakes (use 'use' instead of 'can use', 'a lot of' instead of 'lot of', 'fragrance' not 'fragments').

例: Yes, I usually wear perfume every day. As a student, I prefer a light fragrance for classes because it keeps me feeling fresh and confident throughout the day.

提案: Give a clear yes/no and explain with one specific reason and an example. Use correct sentence structure (e.g., 'Yes, I would' or 'Yes, I often buy'). Mention occasions when you would buy a perfume as a gift and for whom.

例: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift. For example, I often choose perfumes for my sister’s birthday because she loves floral scents and I know she will appreciate a nice-smelling present.

提案: Answer directly and support with one or two specific reasons or examples. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., '10 ml bottle', 'sandalwood' if referring to a scent) and correct grammar. Avoid repeating words and ensure comparisons are clear.

例: Yes, I think some perfumes are expensive because branded 10 ml bottles can cost a lot. For instance, niche scents such as sandalwood-based perfumes often have higher prices due to rare ingredients and brand reputation.

× Yes I like perfume they providing providing me a good fragrance with a good vibes.

✓ Yes, I like perfume; it provides me with a good fragrance and good vibes.

The student used 'they' to refer to 'perfume' which is singular, so the correct pronoun is 'it' (pronoun error). Also 'providing providing' is repetition and incorrect verb form; use 'provides' to agree with singular subject (subject-verb agreement). 'Provide me with' is the correct prepositional pattern. Remove the extra article 'a' before 'good vibes' because 'vibes' is plural or uncountable here.

× Perfumes are good for me, I can use different type of perfumes, flower smells and they are good for me.

✓ Perfumes are good for me; I can use different types of perfumes, such as floral scents, and they are good for me.

'Different type of' should be 'different types of' (quantifier + noun agreement). 'Flower smells' is unnatural; 'floral scents' is the proper collocation. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses for clarity.

× Recent time I am a student in my daily life I can use different type of perfume.

✓ Recently, as a student, I use different types of perfume in my daily life.

Use 'Recently' (adverb) instead of 'Recent time'. The original uses 'I am a student' plus 'I can use' awkwardly; use present simple 'I use' for habitual actions. Also 'different type of' should be 'different types of' (quantifier error combined with tense change).

× They help me lot of fragments and a good vibes.

✓ They help me a lot with fragrance and give good vibes.

'They' can refer to 'perfumes' (plural) so it's acceptable, but 'help me lot of fragments' is incorrect vocabulary and word order. Use 'help me a lot with fragrance' and 'give good vibes'. Remove the extra article before 'good vibes'.

× So I can usually daily in my routine.

✓ So I usually use them daily as part of my routine.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and has incorrect adverb placement. Add 'use them' to provide a verb, place 'usually' before the verb, and 'daily' after the verb or use 'daily as part of my routine' for natural word order.

× Many perfumes in my daily life.

✓ I use many perfumes in my daily life.

The original is missing a verb (sentence without a verb). Add 'I use' to form a complete sentence and clarify meaning.

× Yes is my wishes in in my any birthday any anyone can make gift a good perfume, a good smell with a good vibes I can.

✓ Yes, it is my wish; on my birthday I would like someone to give me a nice perfume with a pleasant scent and good vibes.

The original has multiple pronoun and structure errors: 'Yes is my wishes' lacks subject and has plural/singular mismatch—use 'it is my wish'. 'any anyone' and word order are incorrect. Rephrase to a clear conditional/habitual statement. Use 'someone' as an indefinite pronoun and 'a nice perfume' for natural adjective order.

× Yes I can but gift from anyone.

✓ Yes, I can, but I can only accept a gift from someone I know or from anyone, depending on the situation.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Add subjects and verbs: 'I can' needs context. Clarify whether gifts from anyone are acceptable; provide a more complete sentence. Fix pronoun 'anyone' placement.

× Yes sure perfumes are very expensive.

✓ Yes, certainly, perfumes are very expensive.

Minor stylistic fix: add an adverb 'certainly' and comma. Present simple 'are' is correct for general fact; keep tense consistent.

× A small of 10ML bottles it including ML in bottles it is very costly.

✓ Small 10 ml bottles are very costly.

The original has redundant and incorrect phrasing 'A small of 10ML bottles it including ML in bottles it'. Use plural verb 'are' to match plural 'bottles'. 'ml' is lowercase and no need for 'including ML in bottles'. Simplify to natural expression.

× Different type of different type of perfumes like whitewood there are more more price expensive.

✓ Different types of perfumes, like sandalwood, are often more expensive.

Fix 'Different type of different type of' repetition and change to 'different types of'. 'whitewood' is likely incorrect—use 'sandalwood' or another common note. Use plural subject with 'are' and simplify 'more more price expensive' to 'more expensive' or 'often more expensive'.