Cakes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 语法和表达要更地道，注意单复数和搭配，回答应更简洁自然并使用连接词。可以把主题句和原因分开，并用更准确的词汇替换“balanced of”或“really tasty”。

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy cheesecakes, such as blueberry and New York styles, because they have a nice balance of sweet and tangy flavors, which I find very satisfying.

提案: 回答清楚但有些冗长且语序可改进。用更自然的表达如“mooncake”单词，以及说明馅料或风俗可以增加细节。注意节日全名“Mid-Autumn Festival”。

例: Yes, one well-known traditional pastry is the mooncake. People eat mooncakes during the Mid-Autumn Festival to celebrate the full moon, and they often contain fillings like red bean paste or lotus seed paste.

提案: 回答信息明确但不够自然，提到来源时用更准确的词（website or Bilibili），并增加一点细节说明学习过程或难易度。避免重复“make a cake”。

例: Yes, I taught myself from videos on Bilibili. For example, I learned to make cheesecakes and a French-style lemon cake, though the lemon cake was a bit challenging at first.

提案: 表达需要更简洁，注意时态与词序，避免重复“at that time”。可以说明原因更具体，如甜腻和喜欢清爽口感。

例: To be honest, I didn't. When I was a child creams were too sweet for me, so I preferred ice cream because it felt fresher and less cloying.

提案: 句子结构有问题，时态和短语使用需改进（例如 'to lose weight' 应用动名词形式）。建议分两句说明过去和现在的习惯，并用更自然短语如 'watch my weight' 或 'watch my calorie intake'。

例: I used to enjoy a slice of cake or some ice cream after meals, but now I try to watch my calorie intake to stay fit, so I usually avoid desserts.

× I really enjoy eating cheesecakes, especially blueberry cheesecake and New York cheesecake, because I think the flavor of cheesecakes are balanced of sour and sweet, so it's really tasty.

✓ I really enjoy eating cheesecake, especially blueberry cheesecake and New York cheesecake, because I think the flavor of cheesecake is a balance of sour and sweet, so it's really tasty.

问题类型：主谓一致（Subject-verb agreement）和名词单复数使用不当。句中“cheesecakes are”主语应为不可数或单数的“cheesecake/ the flavor”，谓语用单数“is”。此外“balanced of sour and sweet”搭配不当，改为“a balance of sour and sweet”更地道。建议：当表示一种食品的总体类别或风味时常用不可数或单数形式；检查主语是单数还是复数，动词要一致。

× Yes, there is a Chinese traditional dessert which is called the moon cake. People will eat this kind of cake when they celebrate the festival of mid autumn because the shape of moon cake is similar to the moon.

✓ Yes, there is a traditional Chinese dessert called the mooncake. People eat this kind of cake when they celebrate the Mid-Autumn Festival because the shape of the mooncake is similar to the moon.

问题类型：存在句用法和冠词/词序（There be issue 与 Article errors/词序）。原句“a Chinese traditional dessert”中形容词顺序不自然，习惯说“traditional Chinese dessert”。“which is called”在这里可简化为“called”。节日名称应大写并习惯用固定搭配“Mid-Autumn Festival”。“the shape of moon cake”需加定冠词并合并为复合名词“mooncake”。建议：使用固定搭配并注意词序、冠词和专有名词大写。

× Yes, I learned how to make a cake from the poster on the website Billy Billy. I learned how to make cheesecake and French style lemon cake.

✓ Yes, I learned how to make a cake from a poster on the website Bilibili. I learned how to make cheesecake and a French-style lemon cake.

问题类型：过去分词/过去式使用与冠词和词形（Verb in the past participle form 与 Article errors/形容词顺序）。“learned”作过去时是可以的，但网站名拼写应为“Bilibili”，并且“the poster”改为不定冠词“a poster”更自然。“French style lemon cake”需连字符作形容词短语“French-style”并在“cake”前加不定冠词。建议：注意专有名词拼写、冠词使用及复合形容词用连字符。

× To be honest I didn't because when I was a child the cream at that time was over sweet so I preferred to eat an ice cream because it was cold which made it taste more fresh.

✓ To be honest, I didn't, because when I was a child the cream at that time was overly sweet, so I preferred to eat ice cream because it was cold, which made it taste fresher.

问题类型：过去时使用和副词/形容词误用（Past tense issue 与 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs）。“over sweet”应为副词形式“overly sweet”或“too sweet”。“eat an ice cream”在泛指时通常说“eat ice cream”或“have an ice cream”；“more fresh”比较级错误，应为“fresher”。建议：注意形容词/副词的正确形式，比较级使用规则，并在句子中加适当标点以提高清晰度。

× Well, when I was a child I'd like to have a slice of cake or a cup of ice cream, but now due to lose weight and keeping fit, I have to refuse this kind of dessert because I have to control my daily calories intake.

✓ Well, when I was a child I liked to have a slice of cake or a cup of ice cream, but now, to lose weight and keep fit, I have to refuse this kind of dessert because I have to control my daily calorie intake.

问题类型：情态动词/动词时态与动词搭配（Modal verb usage 与 Present tense issue/动词形式）。原句“I'd like to have”在讲过去习惯时应用过去式“I liked to have”或“I used to like”。短语“due to lose weight and keeping fit”结构错误，改为“to lose weight and keep fit”。“daily calories intake”中“calories”用作名词时复数但在“calorie intake”中应使用单数“calorie”。建议：表示过去习惯使用过去时或“used to”；不定式并列用统一形式；注意固定短语“calorie intake”。