Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant with personal details, but has minor issues with redundancy and some unnatural phrasing. Reduce repetition (e.g. ‘small’ used several times), combine ideas with linking words, and correct tense/word choice (e.g. ‘He surprised me’ could be ‘He usually surprises me’ if habitual). Keep responses concise (max 4–5 sentences) and vary vocabulary (e.g. ‘celebrate’, ‘mark’, ‘spend time with family’).

例: I usually visit the temple in the morning and then celebrate with my husband in the evening. He often surprises me with a cake and a gift; last year he gave me a delicate necklace. Overall, I prefer spending my birthday quietly with close family.

提案: Good memory and content, but fix tense consistency and minor grammatical errors. Avoid filler sounds (‘Uh’) and use precise linking words to make the account smoother (e.g. ‘When I was young... and everyone brought gifts and offered good wishes’). Make sentences more concise and correct plural/verb forms.

例: When I was young, my parents organized small parties for me with close family and friends. I remember enjoying those celebrations a lot because everyone brought gifts and offered warm wishes.

提案: Meaning is understandable but phrasing is confusing and contains errors (‘an special location’, ‘I think it's A1’, ‘it it's’). Clarify your opinion with a clear topic sentence, then give reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear expressions and correct articles and word choice (e.g. ‘a special occasion’).

例: I don't think celebrating birthdays is essential, but I do appreciate them as special occasions. They provide an opportunity to make memories and reconnect with loved ones, even if it’s just for one day.

提案: You answer honestly, but the question asks about China; better to acknowledge limited knowledge then contrast with your own country clearly. Fix grammar and word choice (‘special’ not ‘especial’, ‘engage in’ not ‘doing engaging in’). Use linking words to compare and conclude.

例: I'm not very familiar with birthday customs in China, but in Sri Lanka we celebrate Vesak, the Buddha's birth, which is very important. People visit temples and take part in religious ceremonies, so that would be a major celebration in my country.

× He surprised me with a small birthday cake and a gift.

✓ He surprised me with a small birthday cake and a gift.

No correction needed; sentence uses simple past correctly. (Included to show no change required.)

× Last birthday, he presented me a small necklace.

✓ Last birthday, he gave me a small necklace.

'Presented' is grammatically correct but sounds formal and slightly awkward in this context; 'gave' is the more natural simple past verb for receiving gifts. Keep past tense to match the time reference. Suggestion: Use common verbs (gave, bought) for natural spoken English.

× Uh, it's only a small celebration with all our close family members and friends.

✓ Uh, it was only a small celebration with all our close family members and friends.

Tense mismatch: the question asks about past events, so use past tense 'was' instead of present 'is'. This is categorized under singular/plural because 'it' refers to 'celebration' (singular) but the main issue is tense. Suggestion: Match verb tense to time frame (use 'was' for past).

× Everyone bought some gifts and wish.

✓ Everyone bought some gifts and wished me well.

'Everyone' is singular and takes a singular past verb form. The original uses 'wish' (base form) which is incorrect. Use past tense 'wished' and add object or phrase to clarify (wished me well). Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree in tense and include objects when needed.

× Personally I don't think it's essential but as an special location I like to celebrate my birthday and I think it's A1.

✓ Personally I don't think it's essential but as a special occasion I like to celebrate my birthday and I think it's nice.

Errors: 'an special' is incorrect because 'special' begins with a consonant sound and requires 'a', not 'an'. 'Location' is the wrong word; 'occasion' fits meaning. 'A1' is informal/slang; use an English adjective like 'nice' or 'important'. Suggestion: Choose correct article 'a' before consonant sounds and use vocabulary appropriate to meaning.

× It could be a just one day, but it it's a day to collect lots of memories.

✓ It could be just one day, but it's a day to collect lots of memories.

Problems: extra 'a' before 'just one day' is unnecessary; double 'it it's' contains a duplication and a contraction error. Use 'it's' once. Suggestion: Read aloud to catch duplicated words and remove extra articles where 'just' already quantifies.

× I don't have specific idea about China, but in Sri Lanka we celebrate the birth of Buddha.

✓ I don't have a specific idea about China, but in Sri Lanka we celebrate the birth of the Buddha.

Missing article before 'specific idea' — use 'a specific idea'. Also 'the Buddha' is standard when referring to the historical/religious figure. Suggestion: Add articles where needed and use 'the' with titles of major religious figures in general contexts.

× It's an especial.

✓ It's a special occasion.

'Especial' is archaic or uncommon; use 'special' and add a noun to complete the idea (occasion, event). Also use 'a' not 'an' before 'special'. Suggestion: Use common adjective forms and ensure article matches initial sound.

× It's a religious festival in Sri Lanka.

✓ It is a religious festival in Sri Lanka.

No grammatical change required; expanded contraction for formality. (Included to show correct usage.)

× Therefore everybody celebrate it by going to temple and doing engaging in religious activities.

✓ Therefore everybody celebrates it by going to the temple and engaging in religious activities.

Errors: subject-verb agreement — 'everybody' is singular and needs 'celebrates'. 'Going to temple' needs article 'the temple'. 'Doing engaging' is ungrammatical; use 'engaging in' or 'taking part in' without 'doing'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and choose one verb pattern (e.g. 'engaging in activities').