Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles), and give one brief supporting reason. Use a linking word if adding detail.

例: Yes, I enjoy science because it drives innovation and helps solve real-world problems. For example, scientific research leads to new medical treatments and technologies.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Give a direct time reference in one sentence, then add a short supporting detail using a linking word. Remove fillers (uh).

例: I began studying science in the fourth grade and continued through twelfth grade. During that time I covered subjects like biology, chemistry and physics, which built a strong foundation.

提案: Use the correct noun form and a clearer topic sentence. Avoid fillers and add one specific reason or example to support your preference, using a linking word.

例: Biology interests me the most because it studies living organisms, especially human anatomy. For instance, learning how organs function fascinated me during school dissections.

提案: Be specific about the experiments and correct grammar. Answer directly, give one or two clear examples, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrasing and filler words.

例: In school laboratory classes we performed experiments like observing plant cells under a microscope and testing pH levels of common liquids. These hands-on activities were exciting because they helped me see scientific concepts in action.

提案: Make the response concise and grammatically correct. State your opinion, then briefly explain why with a specific example and a linking word. Use plural forms where needed.

例: Yes, I enjoy science TV programs because they introduce new ideas and experiments. For example, documentaries about space inspired me to learn more about astrophysics.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Give a clear, direct answer about frequency, then provide a specific reason or example. Use correct pronouns and tenses, and avoid fillers.

例: Yes, many Chinese families often visit science museums because these venues offer interactive exhibits for children. For instance, parents frequently take their kids to hands-on science centers on weekends to spark curiosity and learning.

× Yes, I like science because science is a subject of innovation which help us in further research.

✓ Yes, I like science because science is a subject of innovation which helps us in further research.

The relative clause refers to 'science' (singular), so the verb must be third person singular 'helps'. This is a subject-verb agreement error (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 / 2). Suggestion: match the verb form to the singular subject: use 'helps'.

× I started learning about science since my 4th standard science. I uh, I learned science till 12th standard.

✓ I started learning about science in my 4th grade. I studied science until 12th grade.

Use 'in' with a school year or grade (preposition error, ID 11) and 'since' with a point in time requires present perfect; here past simple is appropriate so replace 'since' with 'in'. 'Standard' is better as 'grade' or 'year' in this context (article/word choice). Also use 'studied' or 'learned' consistently in past simple and 'until' instead of 'till' for formality. This fixes preposition and tense usage (IDs 11 and 6/5).

× Biological is very interesting for me because, uh, it is the study of human anatomy.

✓ Biology is very interesting to me because it is the study of human anatomy.

The subject name should be the noun 'Biology', not the adjective 'Biological' (Incorrect use of adjectives, ID 13). Also use 'interesting to me' which is the common collocation. Suggestion: use the noun form for subject names.

× There are very experiments, uh, which were uh, taught us in our school laboratory.

✓ There were many experiments that were taught to us in our school laboratory.

'Very experiments' is ungrammatical; use a quantifier like 'many' (quantifier/article error, ID 14/22). Past context requires 'there were' (there be issue, ID 3) and the passive structure 'taught to us' is correct rather than 'taught us' when preceded by 'which'. Also change 'which' to 'that' for restrictive clause. Suggestion: use 'many experiments' and correct passive construction.

× The experimenter was very interesting as it is a new learning for us which we enjoys a lot.

✓ The experiment was very interesting as it was a new learning experience for us which we enjoyed a lot.

'Experimenter' (a person) is wrong; use 'experiment' (noun) (word choice, ID 13). Maintain past tense 'was' to match context (tense issue, ID 5/6). 'Learning' should be 'learning experience' and 'we enjoys' is wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'we enjoyed'. Suggestion: use correct noun, keep consistent past tense, and correct agreement.

× Yes, I love to watch science TV program as it provide us new learning which helps us in future experiments.

✓ Yes, I love to watch science TV programs as they provide us with new information that helps us in future experiments.

'Program' needs plural 'programs' if speaking generally, and the verb must agree: 'they provide' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27). 'Provide us new learning' is awkward; use 'provide us with new information' (preposition and word choice, ID 11/13). 'Which helps us' should agree with singular 'information' or with 'that helps' referring to 'information'—here 'that helps us' is fine. Suggestion: pluralize program and match verb, and use idiomatic phrase 'provide us with'.

× As there are so many, uh, Science Museum, museum in China, so Chinese people love to uh, visit a Chinese museum. They took their children to explore new things and which help us to gain experience for their children.

✓ There are many science museums in China, so Chinese people like to visit them. They take their children to explore new things, which helps their children gain experience.

Simplify: use plural 'museums' and lowercase 'science museum' (article/number errors, IDs 22/1). 'Love to visit a Chinese museum' should be general: 'like to visit them' and verb tenses should be consistent present habitual 'take' not past 'took' (tense issue, ID 7/6). 'Which help us to gain experience for their children' is unclear and ungrammatical; use 'which helps their children gain experience' (pronoun and subject-verb agreement, IDs 12/27). Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements, keep present tense for habitual actions, and make relative clause refer clearly to 'exploring' or 'things'.