Number— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and correct tense/word choice (e.g., “I feel really regret” → “I regretted it”). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Not really. I'm quite forgetful with numbers, especially dates. For example, I recently forgot my boyfriend's birthday and I felt really bad about it, so now I set reminders on my phone.

提案: Answer directly and expand with specific details and linking words. Use accurate expressions (e.g., "use numbers" → "use numerical data"). Mention concrete examples of how you'll use numbers and why they matter. Limit to up to 4 sentences.

例: Yes, I will. I want to work in the music industry, so I will use numerical data to track album sales, chart positions and streaming figures. These numbers help me evaluate an artist's success and plan marketing strategies.

提案: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct response with a reason and one supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word (e.g., "because").

例: Not really. I wasn't good at math as a child because I focused on music lessons, so I spent less time practicing mathematics.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then add specific supporting details and a reason. Fix grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like "for example" or "for instance."

例: Birthdays are the most important numbers to me because they mark special occasions. For instance, I always remember my parents' birthdays and I keep cards and reminders, so I never miss celebrating them.

× Not really, I'm a bit clumsy so I don't remember number, especially birthday.

✓ Not really, I'm a bit clumsy so I don't remember numbers, especially birthdays.

The noun 'number' should be plural 'numbers' when speaking generally. 'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' if referring to birthdays in general. Use plural for general, countable items. Suggestion: Use 'numbers' and 'birthdays' when talking about them in general contexts.

× For example recently I forgot my boyfriend birthday so I felt really regret over me.

✓ For example, recently I forgot my boyfriend's birthday so I felt really regretful about it.

Possessive form is required: 'boyfriend's birthday'. The phrase 'regret over me' is incorrect; use 'regretful about it' or 'felt really sorry' and refer to the event with 'it'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use possessive 'boyfriend's' and 'regretful about it' or 'felt really sorry'.

× Absolutely yes, because I want to work in entertainment in music industry so I would use a number, especially album chart or sales.

✓ Absolutely, yes, because I want to work in the entertainment/music industry so I would use numbers, especially album charts and sales figures.

Use 'the' with 'entertainment industry' and optionally 'music industry' or 'entertainment/music industry'. 'Would' is unnecessary for a habitual/future fact; 'would use' can stay but 'will use' is stronger—kept 'would' but improved nouns: 'numbers', 'album charts', 'sales figures'. Suggestion: Use 'the entertainment industry' and plural forms 'numbers', 'album charts', 'sales figures'.

× When I was a child, I'm not good at math because I was majoring in music.

✓ When I was a child, I wasn't good at math because I was majoring in music.

Time mismatch: 'When I was a child' requires past tense 'I wasn't' not present 'I'm'. 'Was majoring' is acceptable for past continuous; keep past tense consistent. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout the clause: 'I wasn't good at math'.

× So I didn't study math because I didn't.

✓ So I didn't study math because I didn't study it.

The second 'didn't' is incomplete; it needs the verb it negates ('study it') to form a complete clause. Suggestion: Repeat the verb or use a clearer clause: 'because I didn't study it'.

× Birthday is really important to me because it is really special day and I received a lot of the thank you card so I really remember my birthday or parents birthday.

✓ Birthdays are really important to me because they are really special days and I receive a lot of thank-you cards so I really remember my birthday and my parents' birthdays.

Use plural 'Birthdays' and 'days' when speaking generally. 'Receive' should be present tense if this is a general/habitual fact. 'Thank-you card' needs hyphen or can be 'thank-you cards' plural. Possessive 'parents'' is needed. Also 'my birthday and my parents' birthdays' is clearer than 'my birthday or parents birthday'. Suggestion: Use plurals for general statements and correct possessive form 'parents''.

× I recently I check my. My.

✓ Recently, I checked my calendar.

The original is fragmented and incomplete. 'I recently I check my. My.' lacks object and correct tense. Likely meaning is 'I recently checked my [calendar]' or 'I recently checked my phone/calendar to remember dates.' Suggestion: Complete the sentence with an object and use past tense 'checked' for a recent completed action.