Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your reply is too short, unclear, and unnatural. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two brief supporting details (memory, age, who gave it to you, or how you used it). Use correct grammar and avoid vague phrases like “maybe you have answer.” Keep answers to a maximum of 4–5 sentences and use linking words if you add details (for example, “when,” “because,” or “so”).

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was eight from my parents, and I used it to ride to school and play with friends. Because the roads near my house were quiet, I felt safe riding every day.

提案: Your answer shows an attempt to explain but is confusing, grammatically incorrect, and repetitive. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give one or two specific reasons with coherent linking words (for example, “because,” “for example,” or “therefore”). Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “commute,” “deliveries,” “affordable,” “congested”) and avoid repetition. Keep sentences concise and well-structured.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an inexpensive and convenient way to commute. For example, many delivery workers use bicycles to carry food and packages, so they can move quickly through traffic. Therefore, bikes remain a common choice for short trips and work-related travel.

× Yes, maybe you have answer.

✓ Yes, maybe you have the answer.

The original sentence uses the pronoun 'you' where the definite article 'the' is required before 'answer'. This is an article/pronoun misuse; according to the provided list this fits 'Incorrect use of pronouns' because the wrong word type was used. Suggestion: use 'the answer' when referring to a specific answer the examiner expects.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many of people have their works and jobs and sometimes it was very important to go on a work with you when when you go through your legs like food, you are not, you are not reaching here, you are not reaching there on time, so.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many people have jobs, and sometimes it is very important to go to work by bicycle when you cannot walk far; otherwise you cannot arrive here or there on time.

This long sentence contains multiple errors. Key issues addressed that match the list: 'many of people' is incorrect for plural quantifier use and should be 'many people' (Singular and plural issue). 'their works and jobs' is redundant and unidiomatic; 'jobs' alone is correct. 'go on a work' is incorrect verb/preposition collocation and was changed to 'go to work' (Incorrect use of prepositions also applies). 'when when you go through your legs like food' is meaningless and ungrammatical; replaced with 'when you cannot walk far' to convey intended meaning. 'it was very important' conflicts with general present-tense statement, so changed to 'it is very important' to match tense (Present tense issue). 'you are not, you are not reaching here' is awkward; corrected to 'you cannot arrive here or there on time.' Suggestions: break long ideas into shorter sentences, use correct quantifiers ('many people'), use standard collocations ('go to work', 'arrive on time'), and keep tense consistent.