Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with verb tense, articles and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (since the question is about the past). Avoid repeating facts ("bought me" and "gifted by my father"). Add one specific detail and use a linking phrase to make it coherent. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for my 13th birthday, and I used it every day to ride to school and around the neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear, concise opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples. Use correct comparisons and plural forms, and connect ideas with linking words (for example, "because", "however"). Avoid repetition and correct grammar ("compared to cars", "most people"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheaper and easier to park. For example, many people use motorcycles or scooters to commute short distances, although cars remain common for longer trips.

× Yes, I do have bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have...?'), so the student should use past tense. Also 'bike' needs an article 'a'. Use the auxiliary 'did' for past simple; the full affirmative response is 'Yes, I did have a bike' or simply 'Yes, I had a bike.'

× When I was a child my father bought me and it was gifted by my father on my 13th birthday.

✓ When I was a child my father bought me a bike as a gift on my 13th birthday.

The original sentence is awkward and partly redundant. 'Bought me and it was gifted by my father' repeats the agent. Use past tense 'bought' and a clear object: 'bought me a bike' or 'bought a bike for me.' 'As a gift' clarifies 'gifted'. Remove repetition for clarity and natural flow.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular compared to the car because in my country most of people are engaged with bike and even car are also popular.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular compared to cars because in my country most people use bikes, though cars are also popular.

Use plural 'cars' when making a general comparison. 'Most of people' is incorrect — use 'most people.' 'Engaged with bike' is unnatural; use 'use bikes.' 'Even car are also popular' has number and article errors; change to 'cars are also popular.' This corrects multiple preposition and noun usage issues and improves naturalness.

× But as compared to the bike, bike are most popular.

✓ But compared to cars, bikes are the most popular.

The sentence has incorrect singular/plural forms and article usage: 'the bike, bike are' is wrong. Use plural 'cars' as comparison object and plural 'bikes are.' Add 'the' before 'most popular' to form the superlative properly: 'the most popular.'