Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 중복이 있습니다. 간단한 주제문을 먼저 말한 뒤 필요한 경우 한두 문장으로 이유나 추가 정보를 덧붙이세요. 어순과 시제도 정확히 맞추고 불필요한 반복(예: "still have I have")을 피하세요. 또한 문장 길이는 5문장을 넘지 않도록 유지하세요.

例: Yes, I did. I still have the same bike I used as a child, and I ride it sometimes for exercise.

提案: 답변이 장황하고 비언어적 채움말(uh, umm)과 어순 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 간단한 의견 문장으로 시작하고, linking words(For example, Nowadays, Because)로 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 구체적인 예시(예: 전기자전거 증가, 자전거 도로 확충)를 더하면 점수가 오릅니다.

例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular. For example, many cities have built bike lanes and more people use bicycles or e-bikes for short commutes, especially to avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes I did and still have I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I did, and I still have a bike.

The sentence mixes past and present without correct word order. 'Still have I have a bike' is ungrammatical order. Use 'I still have' for present possession and place commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: say 'Yes, I did, and I still have a bike.'

× Such a difficult question, but I think yes, it's becoming popular more, uh, because in past, umm, people, uh, people didn't interested in bike, they go to work by bus or metro, et cetera.

✓ That is a difficult question, but I think yes; bikes are becoming more popular because in the past people weren't interested in bikes and they went to work by bus or the metro, etc.

Multiple issues: 'Such a difficult question' is colloquial; use 'That is a difficult question.' 'It's becoming popular more' has wrong adverb placement — 'becoming more popular.' 'In past' lacks article — use 'in the past.' 'Didn't interested' is incorrect verb form; after 'did' use base verb 'interest' or use past continuous/wasn't interested. Also 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. Tense consistency: past events use past tense 'went.' Suggestions: use 'bikes are becoming more popular' and 'in the past people weren't interested in bikes and they went to work by bus or the metro.'

× But nowadays people use uh, bikes.

✓ But nowadays people use bikes.

The sentence is almost correct but contains filler 'uh' which should be removed. 'Nowadays people use bikes' correctly uses present simple to describe a current habitual action. Suggestion: avoid fillers and say 'But nowadays people use bikes.'