Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, use past tense and give one or two brief supporting details. Avoid repeating the examiner's question and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day to visit friends and to go to school, because our house was close to the neighborhood park. As a result, I became quite confident riding in traffic and learned basic bike maintenance.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and examples. Avoid unclear phrasing like 'mediocre families' and vague clauses. Use linking words (for example, because, so, also) and keep sentences concise (max 4–5). Mention concrete contexts (commuting, delivery, leisure) to strengthen your answer.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Because they are affordable and easy to park, many people use them for short commutes and deliveries. For example, motorcycle taxis are common in cities, especially when traffic is heavy, since they can weave through congestion and save time.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country.

The original sentence uses 'our country' which may be incorrect when the speaker refers to their own country in a test context; 'my country' is more natural for a personal answer. Also 'bikes' is informal; 'bicycles' is slightly more formal but optional. Use 'my' for clear first-person reference and prefer consistent register.

× The reason behind that is most of the mediocre families get help through bikes and they take it outside for people can sit on the bike apart from it if there is heavy traffic in any city or.

✓ The reason is that many low-income families use bicycles to travel and give others rides, and people also use them when there is heavy traffic in a city.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: unclear phrase 'most of the mediocre families', incorrect use of 'get help through bikes', awkward clause 'they take it outside for people can sit on the bike', and a dangling 'or' at the end. Corrections: replace 'most of the mediocre families' with 'many low-income families' (word choice), change 'get help through bikes' to 'use bicycles to travel' (clarify meaning), combine clauses with conjunctions and appropriate verbs ('give others rides'), and remove the trailing 'or'. Maintain tense present simple for general truths. Suggestions: break long run-on sentences into clearer clauses, use precise nouns (low-income, bicycles), and ensure connectors (and, when) link ideas logically.