Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, fluency and clarity. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and remove fillers. Keep to 2–3 sentences and add one specific detail. For example, say when you got the bike and who gave it to you without hesitation.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I started elementary school. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and he taught me how to ride it in the park near our house.

提案: Work on grammar (subject-verb agreement), reduce hesitations and use linking words. Start with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use concise comparative language and correct collocations (e.g., "less polluting" or "less pollution").

例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in Taiwan because cycling is healthier and less polluting than driving. For example, many people now commute by bike in cities to avoid traffic and reduce air pollution.

× Yes, I had a bike when I turned to be a elementary school student.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I became an elementary school student.

Use 'became' instead of 'turned to be' for natural expression of changing status; 'an' is required before a vowel-starting adjective 'elementary' due to article rules. Suggestion: use 'became' and 'an' for concise correct past-tense phrasing.

× When I be taught to be, uh, use a bike, my, my father, uh, gave me a separate a birthday present.

✓ When I was taught to use a bike, my father gave me a special birthday present.

'Be taught' must be in past passive 'was taught' to match past timeframe; 'to be' is unnecessary. 'Separate a' is ungrammatical—use 'special' or 'separate' appropriately; 'a special birthday present' is natural. Remove filler words and duplicate words for clarity.

× Well, in my perspective, uh, riding bikes are more popular in Taiwan right now because bikes are a more healthy way, a more less pollutant way to to be a transportation.

✓ Well, in my perspective, riding bikes is more popular in Taiwan right now because bicycles are a healthier and less polluting form of transportation.

Use singular 'riding bikes is' as the activity is treated as a singular subject (gerund phrase). 'Bikes' can be replaced with 'bicycles' for formality; use comparative adjective 'healthier' and adjective 'less polluting' instead of 'more less pollutant.' 'to be a transportation' is incorrect—use 'form of transportation.' Remove duplicated 'to.'