Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify meaning and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. “I I was charged” is incorrect).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. In fact, my parents bought it for me when I was seven, and I used it every day to ride to my friends’ houses. Because I practiced a lot, I became confident riding on busy streets.

提案: Give a direct answer, correct noun and verb forms, and add specific reasons or examples with linking words. Use singular/plural correctly and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g. “cycle/bicycle”, “commute”, “company” misuse).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work because they are cheap and convenient, and others ride them at the weekend for exercise and leisure.

× Yes, I had a bike when I I was charged.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence contains a typographical/word choice error: 'charged' is incorrect in context and there is a duplicated 'I'. This is a sentence structure and word choice problem (falls under Sentence structure errors). Correcting to 'child' matches the intended meaning and yields a grammatically complete, clear clause. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and choose context-appropriate nouns; use 'child' when referring to one's younger self.

× Yes, my company of Japan bike are very popular.

✓ Yes, Japanese bikes are very popular in my country.

The original phrase 'my company of Japan bike' mixes ownership, country name, and noun order incorrectly and lacks correct article/word forms. This is primarily an article/word order error. Rewriting to 'Japanese bikes' uses the adjective form of the country and plural noun to match meaning. Also add 'in my country' to answer the examiner's question about popularity locally. Suggestion: use demonyms (Japanese) as adjectives and ensure noun plurality matches context.

× Many people take bike to commit and enjoy at weekend.

✓ Many people take bikes to commute and enjoy themselves at the weekend.

Multiple errors: 'take bike' should be plural 'take bikes' (singular/plural issue), 'commit' is a wrong verb form—should be 'commute', missing reflexive or object for 'enjoy' requires 'enjoy themselves', and 'at weekend' needs article 'the weekend' in this dialect. The primary listed issue is singular/plural; corrected sentence also fixes verb choice and pronoun. Suggestion: ensure noun number agrees with quantifiers ('many people' -> plural noun), use correct verb vocabulary ('commute'), include reflexive pronoun for 'enjoy' when no object is given, and use 'the weekend'.