Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition, correct basic grammar (articles, tense, plural/singular) and use relevant vocabulary (e.g., ‘ride’, ‘bike’, ‘accidents’). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. I had a bike that I loved when I was a child. I rode it almost every weekend in my free time, and sometimes I practiced with friends to get better. However, I had a few accidents because the roads were uneven, so my parents worried about my safety.

提案: Answer directly and organize ideas: give a clear opinion, then support with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and choose correct verbs ('ride' or 'use' a bike, not 'drive'). Make sentences concise and logical.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Tunisia. Many people use them for short trips and errands because they are cheap and convenient. For example, in my family my father rides his bike to work every day, so we rely on bicycles for local travel rather than cars.

× Yes, when I was child I had a bike that I loved.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike that I loved.

Missing the article 'a' before the singular noun 'child' is a singular/plural related article error. Use 'a child' to indicate one instance; the noun 'child' requires an article in this context.

× I used to to use it every time in my free time during weekends and also I I had a lot of problems using these bags, notably multiple accidents.

✓ I used to use it all the time in my free time on weekends, and I had a lot of problems using those bags, notably several accidents.

There is a repeated 'to' and repeated 'I' (typos), and 'used to use' is correct form but 'every time' is awkward—'all the time' fits habit. 'During weekends' should be 'on weekends' (preposition error also but kept under allowed list 8); 'these bags' likely refers to previously mentioned items so 'those bags' is clearer. 'Multiple accidents' is grammatically okay but 'several accidents' is more natural. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use 'used to use' correctly, prefer 'on weekends' and choose consistent demonstrative pronoun.

× Yeah, in Tunisia there are multiple people who uses a bike and and even in each family there there is someone who who drive a bike.

✓ Yeah, in Tunisia there are many people who use a bike, and even in each family there is someone who drives a bike.

Subject-verb agreement: after plural subject 'people' the verb must be base form 'use' not 'uses'. Also 'many' is more natural than 'multiple' in this context. For the relative clause 'someone who drives a bike', 'someone' is singular so the verb must be third person singular 'drives'. Removed duplicate words.

× For example, in our family my dad drive, drives everyday.

✓ For example, in our family my dad drives every day.

Subject 'my dad' is third person singular, so the present simple verb requires an -s: 'drives'. Also 'everyday' (one word) is an adjective meaning ordinary; the adverbial phrase should be 'every day' (two words). Use 'drives every day' to indicate habitual action.

× A bike you don't use, I don't use car.

✓ If I have a bike, I don't use a car.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and missing articles. To express the conditional relationship, use 'If I have a bike' and include the article 'a' before 'car'. This corrects sentence structure and makes the meaning clear. Alternative: 'If I have a bike, I don't use my car.'