Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 표현을 자연스럽게 고쳐야 합니다. 과거형을 정확히 사용하고 부사 위치와 형태를 바로잡으세요. 또한 어색한 표현(예: practiced hardly)은 의미가 달라지므로 ‘practiced hard’로 수정해야 합니다. 답변은 최대 3~4문장으로 간결히 하고, 주제문 다음에 한두 문장으로 이유나 예시를 덧붙이세요. 예시: 주어 + 과거 동사로 시작해 자전거를 좋아했던 이유와 연습했던 방법을 구체적으로 설명하세요.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I really enjoyed riding it and spent many afternoons practicing in the park. Because I wanted to ride confidently, I practiced hard every weekend until I felt steady.

提案: 명확한 주장과 근거를 제시하는 연습이 필요합니다. 주저하거나 말더듬는 표현을 줄이고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어 인프라(자전거 도로), 안전 문제, 문화적 요인 등을 간단한 문장으로 정리하면 좋습니다. 연결어(if, because, however 등)를 사용해 논리를 매끄럽게 이어가세요.

例: Actually, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. There are few dedicated bike lanes, so cycling can be unsafe in busy cities. As a result, most people prefer driving or taking public transport instead.

× Yes, I had when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child.

The verb 'had' is past tense and correct, but the sentence is missing an object; 'a bike' or 'one' should follow 'had'. Add the noun to complete the sentence. Suggestion: say 'I had a bike when I was a child.' or 'I had one when I was a child.'

× I real really like to ride a bike, so I practiced hardly to ride the bike.

✓ I really liked riding a bike, so I practiced hard to ride it.

Multiple issues: 'real' is incorrect; use adverb 'really'. For past context, 'liked' (past tense) or use present perfect if appropriate; here past 'liked' fits. Use the gerund 'riding' after 'liked'. 'Practiced hardly' is wrong because 'hardly' means 'barely'; use adjective/adverb 'hard' as in 'practiced hard' or 'practiced a lot'. Also 'to ride the bike' is awkward—use pronoun 'it' or repeat 'a bike'. Suggestion: 'I really liked riding a bike, so I practiced hard to ride it.'

× Umm, actually no, because. Bike Rd. is isn't quite so, huh?

✓ Umm, actually no, I don't think bikes are very popular because the roads are not very suitable for them.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'Because.' cannot stand alone; it needs a clause explaining why. 'Bike Rd. is isn't quite so' mixes contractions and abbreviations and lacks a clear subject. Replace with a full explanation: 'the roads are not very suitable for them' or 'there are not many bike lanes.' Also use present tense 'are' for general statements about popularity. Suggestion: 'Actually no, I don't think bikes are very popular because the roads are not suitable for cycling.'